Talk:Peruchazhi
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GA Review
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- This review is transcluded from Talk:Peruchazhi/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 14:52, 3 March 2016 (UTC)
Will do this soon. JAGUAR 14:52, 3 March 2016 (UTC)
Initial comments
[edit]- "The film originally written in Tamil" - Originally written in Tamil, the film
Done
- The middle two paragraphs in the lead definitely need to be merged into one
Done
- "The film is about how Jagannathan a young politician from India" - how about The film revolves around Jagannathan, a young politician from India and his transition to chief political adviser or something like that. The sentence has no breaks and is very choppy
Done
- United States is linked twice in lead
Done
- "Sunny is forced to consult a third person's advise and calls Francis Kunjappan" - sounds like an actual third person here. How about Sunny is forced to consult advice from a third person and calls Francis Kunjappa
Done
- "US" is linked twice in the Plot. The first instance of "US" should be changed to just "United States", and the second "US" delinked
Done
- "They gives a message to Sunny" - give
Done
- " but is not revealed that from where he got it" - I don't get this. Is it meant to be like but it is not revealed where he got it?
- This means, it is not revealed on that scene, it is later shown on climax scene when, Jagannathan calls Sunny and reveals backstage dramas which occurred last night.
- "Meanwhile, Jagannathan and his pals returns to India" - informal. Use 'friends'
Done
- "About the unique title, "The term Peruchazhi" - a colon is needed instead of a comma
Done
- Europe is linked twice in the Release section. Does it even need to be linked?
Done
- " in google play store in September 2014" - needs capitalisation
Done
- "which the makers claims to be the first of its kind marketing method" - choppy. How about in which the film's makers claim to be the first of its kind in marketing
Done
- The first paragraph in Soundtrack is unsourced
Done
There are some prose issues and some confusing sentences, but once they're all addressed this could have a chance at meeting the criteria. JAGUAR 19:10, 3 March 2016 (UTC)
Comments from Kailash
[edit]- The filming and marketing sections may be split if possible.
- The refs need great cleanup.
- There can be more categories.
- "The Oscar nominee Bombay Jayashri had sung a song" - How relevant is that in "Casting"? Besides, the fact that she is an Oscar nominee should removed per WP:PUFFERY.
- All sources' authors must be in "Last name, first name" format. Some sources lack access date.
There are just some of the issues I cannot let the GA review overlook. More will come soon. Kailash29792 (talk) 11:08, 4 March 2016 (UTC)
Close - not listed
[edit]Kailash's comments haven't been addressed, and I think this is far off from meeting the criteria. I was very lenient on Bangalore Days, and I can't afford to do that again. Can you renominate it when it meets the criteria? JAGUAR 17:03, 7 March 2016 (UTC)
This file isn't used according to the rationale given on the image description page. There probably isn't a way this file could be used in conformity with WP:NFC anyway. Its use here is purely decorational; it isn't used to identify the subject (the on in the infobox is) and it's appearance isn't critically discussed. I suggest removing the image before or during the GA review (WP:GACR 6a). – Finnusertop (talk ⋅ contribs) 15:20, 3 March 2016 (UTC)
Done Removed the Poster. JØ +TALK 16:20, 3 March 2016 (UTC)
References need cleanup
[edit]Most of the references have the first and last names of the authors reversed. For example, "last=V.P|first=Nicy" should be "first=V.P.|last=Nicy". If you want this to pass a GAN, it would be a good idea to fix those. – Jonesey95 (talk) 19:27, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- You are wrong. When it is written as "first=V.P.|last=Nicy", the result will be "Nicy, V.P." - this is not the right way. It should be like "V.P., Nicy". In bibliography, the last name should come first and the first name goes last. It's a commonly accepted bibliographical standard in literature. We follow that in Wikipedia referencing too. Hope you understand. --Charles Turing (talk) 11:06, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
- Charles Turing, I'm confused--is V. P. the person's last name? Most people don't have initials for last names. Further, the article is inconsistent about this, referring to the writer as V.P. Nicy in the critical response section. Whatever is correct, adjustments need to be made, so Jonesey95 is correct on that point. Cyphoidbomb (talk) 18:39, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
- Other examples including "Vijay, George" for the author named "Vijay George", and "Asha, Prakash", for the author named "Asha Prakash". Unless I'm missing something, these are simply incorrect and need to be swapped. – Jonesey95 (talk) 21:26, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
- Charles Turing, I'm confused--is V. P. the person's last name? Most people don't have initials for last names. Further, the article is inconsistent about this, referring to the writer as V.P. Nicy in the critical response section. Whatever is correct, adjustments need to be made, so Jonesey95 is correct on that point. Cyphoidbomb (talk) 18:39, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
Nicy V. P is the correct name (checked it in IBTimes). The references are all messed up. No homogeneity. Someone should take the initiative to fix it. Let me see if I can manage that. --Charles Turing (talk) 11:13, 3 April 2016 (UTC)
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