Talk:Playmate to Jesus

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 13:39, 5 August 2013 (UTC)

Comments

• "The song, which was released" followed by "The song was released" is repetitive.
  •  Done Is "Published" better? EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• "it only managed to chart" it only charted in...
  •  Done EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• "and was only certified in that country" I imagine that to be obvious since it only charted in Denmark.
  • I've removed it, so Done. EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• "Danmark" Denmark.
  •  Done EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• Could link YouTube.
  •  Done EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• " a radio single[2] on 12 September,[3]" might as well place the two refs together after the punctuation.
  •  Done EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• "The track was written as the first track" not great, rephrase to avoid repetition of "the ... track".
  •  Done Reworded, should look better known, though I really don't know what is wrong with repeating "the".EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• Infobox should say Producer(s).
  • I'm confused here. How do you make it say producer(s), cause I've been looking all over the template page and can't find how to do it. Do you know? I don't think this should even be a problem. EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• "pop song[2]" similarly, place this after punctuation, it won't harm the reader to have to wait a few words for the ref.
  •  Done EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• "an E Major key" major.
  •  Done EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• "Lene's vocal" surnames please.
  •  Done She has been under her stage name "Lene" for some of her solo release, so I don't see why this is a problem. EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• "Rene Dif's bridge is cut from the 3.5 single edit of the song" ditto, and what's a 3.5 single edit?
  •  Done changed EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• "The song has been certified gold" by whom?
  •  Done by the IFPI EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• Time Magazine is actually Time.
  •  Done changed it. EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• I don't think the link you use for Idolater is what you're after.
  • What are you trying to say? EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
    • Oh, wait. I had it disambung it.  Done EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 17:22, 6 August 2013 (UTC)
• ""How R U Doin?".[15]" no need for the spare full stop.
  •  Done I think i fixed it
• Denmark again.
  •  Done fixed it. EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• "Aqua members as they appear in the video." no need for full stop, not a complete sentence.
  •  Done changed EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• Chart positions table is pointless being sortable.
  •  Done fixed it EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• Sales/shipment but the article says it was 300k streams which is very different.
  •  Done Changed to "sales of 300,000 units"
• "Accessed from... " or "Retrieved..."? Be consistent in the refs.
  •  Done EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• Is it Allmusic or Allmusic? Be consistent.
  •  Done I've added Rovi Corporation as publisher to make it clear. EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
• Ref 10 has no accessdate. Check others.
  •  Done added accessdates EditorEat ma talk page up, scotty! 14:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)

A few issues, so I'll put it on hold for a week. The Rambling Man (talk) 13:55, 5 August 2013 (UTC)