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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 11:30, 19 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! I am interested to review this. Will start adding my comments from today itself. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 11:30, 19 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking this review! :-) Cerevisae (talk) 12:11, 19 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

is one of the two Malaysian states on the island of Borneo Could add the other state in this line. Done
of the Malaysian federation Any link for "Malaysian federation"? What is it? Should "f" be in capital? Could add when this was founded. Done I have linked the Federation. Cerevisae (talk) 07:00, 20 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
It is also known as Bumi Kenyalang ("Land of the Hornbills"). These "a.k.a." names are typically added (in bold) just after the main name and its pronounciation (here, Sarawak). Done
economic centre of state and seat of Sarawak I think this should read: economic centre of the state and seat of the Sarawak unless I got it wrong. Done
The capital city is ... Sibu, and Bintulu Better write Kuching, the capital city, is also the economic centre of state and seat of Sarawak state government. Other cities and towns in Sarawak include Miri, Sibu, and Bintulu. Done
As of the last census (2015) census in Malaysia or where? Don't link census. Done
Sarawak has an equatorial climate with tropical rainforests Can link "equatorial climate" and "rainforest" Done
Can "cave system" be linked? Done Linked "Cave" only. Cerevisae (talk) 07:00, 20 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Rajang River is the longest river in Malaysia. Bakun Dam, one of the largest dams in Southeast Asia is located at one of the tributaries of the Rajang River. Combine these two sentences. Done
Earliest human settlements in Sarawak was 40,000 years ago at Niah Caves. Could this be combined with the line on cave systems in the previous para? Not done Niah Caves are different from Mulu caves. Niah Caves is best known for its prehistory but not its cave formations while Mulu caves is best known of its unique cave formations. However, there is no evidence of human inhabitants in Mulu caves. These two caves are situated inside different national parks. Cerevisae (talk) 07:00, 20 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
The state had a trading relationship with China during 8th to 13th century Link China. AD/BCE? Done
Earliest human settlements in Sarawak was 40,000 years ago at Niah Caves Better say "date back to 40,000 years ago at the Niah Caves" Done
for 100 years from 19th to 20th century Is "for 100 years" not redundant? Done Removed "100 years". Cerevisae (talk) 07:00, 20 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
and later formed the federation of Malaysia Not clear who formed the federation: Sarawak or Britain? Done
formed the federation of Malaysia This looks like a repetition from the first para. Could the two mentions be merged? And what again was this federation about? Done Moved the Federation of Malaysia sentence from first para and replace this sentence. Cerevisae (talk) 07:00, 20 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
The state is multi-ethnic, multi-cultural, and multi-lingual To remove the repetition of "multi", could write The state exhibits notable diversity in ethnicity, culture and language. Done
also known as Yang di-Pertua Negeri while the head "Negeri, while" Done
is Chief Minister "the" Done
English and Malay are official languages of the state Are these the only two official languages or the two major ones? Should be clearly written. Done
while there is no official religion --> ; there is no official religion (use semicolon instead) Done
celebrate Gawai Dayak festival "the" Done
Duplinks (the word(s) linked twice, these are typically removed; there is no problem in linking a word in the lead as well as the main text) : Sabah Done

Thank you. I have made a few more changes here, please check them. Can the first two paras of the lead be merged? The first looks too short and too many paras may not look good. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 07:18, 20 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Etymology

What is the source for the pronunciation of "Sarawak"? Could use this source: [[1]] Done

The trouble now is whether we include the English or the Malay pronunciation. The Malay one has no source yet. And the same pronunciation should be mentioned both in the lead and Etymology. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 07:51, 20 March 2016 (UTC)

Done I decided to use the English pronounciation. Cerevisae (talk) 13:04, 21 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

of the word Sarawak Sarawak in double quotes Done
from Sarawak Malay word of serawak which means antimony Better say from the Sarawak Malay word serawak, which means antimony Done
Pangeran Muda Hashim , John Brooke You need to introduce these people. Links? Done
However, such an explanation has several flaws because the territory had already been named Sarawak Done
before the arrival of James Brooke Simply say "Brooke" Done
before the Malaysian federation the "formation" of Done

Prehistory

(located 110 km southwest of Miri) Could use a convert template Done
Seems we have a contradiction here. According to the lead the first human settlement here was in the Niah Caves 40,000 years ago. This section says it was 50,000 years ago. Moreover The earliest evidence of human population in the area dates back to 40,000 BC in Niah Cave at Paleolithic period looks like a repetition Done. Converted 50,000 years to 40,000 years. Removed the second sentence. Cerevisae (talk) 09:58, 21 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
a Homo sapiens skull Can we simply say "human" skull? Done "modern human skull" used. Cerevisae (talk) 09:58, 21 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
and plant gathering What exactly does this mean? Done "gathering of edible plants" used. Cerevisae (talk) 09:58, 21 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
and more open than it is now What does this mean? Done "exposed" used. Cerevisae (talk) 09:58, 21 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Unfossilised What does this mean? Done "without becoming a fossil" used. Cerevisae (talk) 09:58, 21 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
I have done some copyediting here and here, please check that the meanings of the lines are not altered. Please check the errors made and do not repeat them in future.

Bruneian empire

The eastern seaboard of Borneo was charted Could the meaning be clearer? Done Removed this sentence. It mentions Borneo in general. The Portugese did not settle in "this area" also refers to Borneo in general. Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
The Bruneian empire only had authority along the coastal regions Does this mean only the Empire had this right or was this the only right the Empire had? Done Moved "only" to after the word "authority". Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Malay chiefs Who were they? Links? Done. "Malay" linked. changed "chiefs" to "leaders". Nobody know the names of these Malay chiefs. Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Who is Pangeran Indera Mahkota? Done He is a representative of Sultan of Brunei. Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Don't link James Brooke here if already linked in the Etymology section as I suggested. You can add a word about who he was Done
Who is Pangeran Muda Hashim? Done (uncle of Sultan of Brunei) Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Link Sinian Done Deleted this place. Very difficult to find sources about it. Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Say either Pangeran or Pengeran. Done Used Pangeran. Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Done some copyediting here. Check the edit to see if the meaning is unaltered. Done checked. Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Brooke dynasty

Duplinks: James Brooke, Brunei, Kuching, Miri, Bintulu, Kuching Done. So I should only link for two instances in the whole article? (one link for lead and another link in the article body) Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Now the lines In 1846, Brooke effectively became the Rajah of Sarawak and founded the White Rajah Dynasty of Sarawak after the death of Pengeran Muda Hashim. appear repetitions to me. Done. Deleted "In 1846, Brooke effectively became the Rajah of Sarawak". Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Brooke ruled the territory, later expanded, across the western regions of Sarawak around Kuching until his death in 1868 Could not understand this. Done "Brooke ruled the area and expanded the territory northwards until his death in 1868." Is this sentence understandable? Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
with his brother Bertram Brooke Whose brother? Done Vyner Brooke's brother. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Bintulu region until Tanjung Kidurong What does this mean? Done Removed Tanjung Kidurong. This area is also under the Bintulu region. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
penjajah in Malay Need this be mentioned? Done Removed this phrase. Since the source is in Malay, I have added this phrase for clarity. But it makes the article text a bit weird. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Sarawak was accorded a status of similar to Indian princely states in the British Empire What exactly was this status? Done Removed this sentence. I think it is very clear that Sarawak was recognised as an independent state in the previous paragraph. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
contingent militia What does this mean? Done Reduced the phrase to "milita" only. Cerevisae (talk)
Can Hakka Chinese be linked? Done Linked. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
assaulted Brooke's residence and it was burnt down You mean "damaged" the residence? How? Who burnt it? Done changed to "under the leadership of Liu Shan Bang, destroyed the Brooke's residence." Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
He was able to defeat them later When and how? Done Added more details about Brooke's army and his attack on Chinese rebels. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
British protectorates Link? Done Linked. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
In 1891, Charles Brooke, the second White Rajah of Sarawak No need to introduce him again. To avoid confusion with the third ruler you can say Charles Anthoni Brooke. Done Used Charles Anthoni Brooke. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
More copyediting. Please check this. Done checked. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Japanese occupation and Allied liberation

Duplinks: Kuching, Mukah, Bintulu, North Borneo, Southeast Asia Done
What is Singkawang "II"? Done Removed "II" from Singkawang. Actually Singkawang II is a military base in Singkawang. But I don't know what is Singkawang I. Cerevisae (talk) 17:49, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
important positions in the government such as? Not done Cannot find any sources on the examples important positions in the Japanese government. Changed the wordings to "prioritising Japanese for government positions."Cerevisae (talk) 10:05, 23 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Charles Vyner Brooke already left for Sydney The meaning is not clear. Had he already left before the attack or did he escape immediately? Done He left for Sydney before the attack began. Cerevisae (talk) 10:05, 23 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Link Allied in Allied forces later formed Done Linked. Cerevisae (talk) 10:05, 23 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
What is SEMUT? Done Linked Semut operation. It is a code name. Cerevisae (talk) 10:05, 23 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
surrender of Japanese to the Australian forces Were the Australian forces part of the Allies? Else how do they come into the picture? Mention it. Done Added "Allied forces (headed by Australia)" in the previous sentence. Cerevisae (talk) 10:05, 23 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
More copyediting. Please check these edits. Done checked. Cerevisae (talk) 10:05, 23 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

British crown colony

Little copyedit, here. Done Checked. Cerevisae (talk) 10:40, 23 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Duplink: Bertram Brooke Done

Self-government and the Federation of Malaysia

Duplinks: Sabah, Brunei, Limbang Done
which would be called Malaysia Is this to say that the federation was known as Malaysia in the future, or was it Rahman's plan to name it so? Done changed to "which he called Malaysia". Cerevisae (talk) 12:04, 23 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
between Malaya and Singapore with the Borneo states What does this mean? Done changed to "between Malaya and the Borneo states." Cerevisae (talk) 12:04, 23 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
of the Sarawak and Sabah is "the" needed? Done changed to "to gauge the support of Sarawak and Sabah" Cerevisae (talk) 12:04, 23 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
local Sarawakians Is this the correct term to refer to them? Just a confirmation. Done Removed "local" since "Sarawakians" is already local. Cerevisae (talk) 12:04, 23 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
The group was later succeeded by What does this mean? changed "succeeded" to "succeded". Cerevisae (talk) 12:04, 23 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
communist guerrillas Link? Done Linked "Communism" and "Guerilla warfare". Cerevisae (talk) 12:04, 23 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Copyedit: here and here. Done checked. Cerevisae (talk) 12:04, 23 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Territorial disputes

While land border demarcation and maritime disputes between Sarawak and Kalimantan are currently yet to be settled with Indonesia Looks like an error, or is this incomplete? Done changed to this sentence:"Meanwhile, there are several Sarawak-Kalimantan border issues yet to be settled with Indonesia.". Cerevisae (talk) 09:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Little copyedit here. Done checked. Cerevisae (talk) 09:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Government and politics

Yang di-Pertuan Agong can this be translated? Done He is simply known as the king. Cerevisae (talk)
Could not understand these parts:

Sarawak has been a political stronghold of the ruling Alliance Party and, later, the Barisan Nasional (BN) coalition since its independence in 1963. Done Changed to: "Sarawak has been the political stronghold of the ruling Alliance Party and, later, the Barisan Nasional (BN) coalition (its successor) since the formation of Malaysia in 1963." Cerevisae (talk) 12:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
landslide victories of three tier system of local council elections. Done changed to "landslide victory of local council elections". Cerevisae (talk) 12:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
(of the PESAKA) not introduced before Done Changed the previous sentence to "Other major political parties such as Parti Pesaka Sarawak (PESAKA) appeared by 1962." Cerevisae (talk) 12:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
at first by Abdul Rahman Ya'kub and followed by his nephew Abdul Taib Mahmud Done changed to "...beginning of ethnic Melanau domination in Sarawak politics by Abdul Rahman Ya'kub and Abdul Taib Mahmud." Cerevisae (talk) 12:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
the first Peninsular-based party Done changed to "was the first West Malaysia-based party to open its branches in Sarawak." Cerevisae (talk) 12:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Duplinks: Sarawak State Legislative Assembly, Sarawak United Peoples' Party, Abdul Rahman Ya'kub, Abdul Taib Mahmud, North Kalimantan Communist Party, Sarawak National Party.
Copyedit: here Done checked. Cerevisae (talk) 12:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Subdivisions

Source for the table? Done citation added. Cerevisae (talk) 22:02, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Security

Duplink: Constitution of Malaysia Done
Ninth Schedule of the Constitution of Malaysia stated that Why is this in past tense? Done changed to present tense. Cerevisae (talk) 22:19, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
that is suitable with the security in Sarawak What does this mean? Done Removed the whole sentence. Even the website does not clearly specify the objectives and functions of this unit and also the rationale of creating this unit in Sarawak. Cerevisae (talk) 22:19, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Geography

Duplinks: Kalimantan, Southeast Asia, Kuching, Bintulu, Miri, South China Sea, Kenyah, Sarawak River, Rajang River, Baram River Done
The coordinates should be written as in this line (from Kerala): Lying between northern latitudes 8°18' and 12°48' and eastern longitudes 74°52' and 77°22' Done
Mount Batu Lawi, Mount Mulu and Mount Murud as the highest point in Sarawak Can be clearer, could not understand very well Done changed to "becoming the higher near the source of the Baram River with the steep Mount Batu Lawi, and Mount Mulu. Mount Murud is the highest point in Sarawak." Cerevisae (talk) 03:12, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
UNESCO World Heritage Site Link Done
Sarawak is a tropical country with an equatorial climate Links? Done
between 23 °C in the morning and 32 °C in the afternoon , between 330 cm and 460 cm Convert templates? Done
while podzol accounts for 12% of the Sarawak land area. Alluvium is found in the coastal and riverine regions while 12% of Sarawak land area are covered with peat swamps Just need to ensure that peat and podzol are not the same. I hope you have not repeated the fact? Donepodzol and peat are not the same. Podzol soil is for eucalypt, coniferous, and boreal forests in temperate areas while peat is for peat swamp forests. However, podzol can also be found in tropical areas in lesser extent. Quote from Podzol article: "but they can also be found in other settings including both temperate rainforests and tropical areas". Cerevisae (talk) 03:12, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
While the youngest Igneous rock in this region is Andesite lava at Sematan. Could not understand this. Done changed "Andesite lava" to "Andesite rock"
Types of stones that can be found here What exactly is "here"? Done changed to "central and northern Sarawak". Cerevisae (talk) 03:12, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
I have done more copyediting: here and here. Done checked. Cerevisae (talk) 03:12, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Biodiversity

Duplinks:Limbang, Gunung Mulu National Park, Lambir Hills National Park, proboscis monkeys. Done
mangrove and nipah forests Links? Done
hill Dipterocarpaceae forests What does "hill" mean here? Done Removed "hill". Cerevisae (talk) 15:08, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Could not understand It also has 19% of the mammals, 6% of the birds, 20% of the snakes and 32% of the lizards as endemic species Done changed to "The state also accounts for 19% of the mammals, 6% of the birds, 20% of the snakes and 32% of the lizards as endemic species." Cerevisae (talk) 15:08, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Sarawak chief minister Abdul Taib Mahmud "The then chief minister" if he is not in the post anymore. Done Used "the then" Cerevisae (talk) 15:08, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Could not understand and to maintain 60% forest cover Done changed to "The Sarawak government also planned to preserve 60% forest cover in the coming years." Cerevisae (talk) 15:08, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
which links to corruption by chief minister Abdul Taib Mahmud and his family. This is a risky statement, could indicate bias. Done Removed the sentence. Cerevisae (talk) 15:08, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Currently, the proposed Baram Dam project Don't use "currently", give the years Done
Copyedit here Done checked. Cerevisae (talk) 15:08, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Economy

Duplinks: Kuala Lumpur, Labuan, Bintulu, Miri, Luconia Shoals Done
Manufacturing industry of Sarawak mainly consisting of food and beverages, wood-based and rattan products, basic metal products, and petrochemical products Errors here. Is anything missing? Same in the immediately next sentence Done changed to "The main contributors for manufacturing industry are: food and beverages, wood-based and rattan products, basic metal products, and petrochemical products." and "Meanwhile, services industry are contributed by cargo transportation services, air transport, and tourism." Cerevisae (talk) 03:14, 26 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Link petrochemical Done
Sarawak contributed 10.1% of the national GDP GDP of Malaysia? Done Used "GDP of Malaysia". Done
RM 527 million in 1963 to RM 58 billion in 2013 Can we use money conversion templates here? And in the rest of the section? Done Wikipedia templates doesn't recognise Malaysian Ringgit. I used manual conversion instead. Cerevisae (talk) 03:14, 26 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Sarawak state government is able to maintain fiscal surpluses over seven years until 2013, supported by oil and gas industry which accounted for 34.8% of the state's revenue Why is this in present tense? Same for Total exports as a percentage of GDP is more than 100% in 2013 Done Used past tense. Cerevisae (talk) 03:14, 26 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
sawlogs, and sawn timber Link sawn timber. Sawlog is to be linked here, but it is linked a little later in the section Done
What is oil royalty? Done added "(percentage of oil production paid by the mining company to the lease owner]])" Cerevisae (talk) 03:14, 26 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Link UN Done
The last UN statistics Year? Done
WTK, and KTS Full names? Done
last 4 years until 2013 Don't say "last ... years", always give the years themselves Done changed to "from 2009 until 2013". Cerevisae (talk) 03:14, 26 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Link poverty rate Done Linked poverty.Cerevisae (talk) 03:14, 26 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
CE here Done checked. Cerevisae (talk) 03:14, 26 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Energy

Duplinks: Bakun Dam, Murum Dam, Liquefied Natural Gas, Sarawak Corridor of Renewable Energy, Bintulu, Mukah Done
There are currently three operational dams in Sarawak as of 2015 Omit currently Done
Sarawak also derived its electrical energy Why in past tense? Done changed to present tense. Cerevisae (talk) 10:36, 29 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"research and development" Link not needed. Done
Link biomass, tidal, hydroelectric Done
coal fired power plants You mean coal-based ? Done changed to "coal-based" Cerevisae (talk) 10:36, 29 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
aluminium, glass, steel, oil, fisheries, livestock, timber, and tourism Are the industries listed in terms of priority? They are all high priority areas but themselves are not arranged in terms of priority. Cerevisae (talk) 10:36, 29 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
The last lines list future plans. When were they planned? Done Plans were started since 2008. Cerevisae (talk) 10:36, 29 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Tourism

Duplink: Kuching Done
20,000 music fans I think "people" would be more proper. Not all need to be fans! Done changed to "people" Cerevisae (talk) 10:52, 29 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
CE here Done checked. Cerevisae (talk) 10:52, 29 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Infrastructure

In 2009, 94% of urban areas and 67% of rural areas has electrical supply. In 2014, 91% of the rural areas has electrical supply. Combine the two lines. And "has" should be "have". Done
What is fixed line penetration rate and mobile phone penetration rate? Done changed to "In terms of telecommunication, the coverage of fixed phone line in Sarawak was 25.7%, and the mobile phone usage was 93.3% in 2013." Cerevisae (talk) 06:46, 30 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Computers usage was only 45.9% in the same year. Internet usage was 58.5% in urban areas and 29.9% in rural areas What are the percentages indicating? The percentage of people using this? State clearly. Done changed to "Percentage of people using the internet was 58.5% in urban areas and 29.9% in rural areas." Cerevisae (talk) 06:46, 30 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Sacofa Sdn Bhd What is Sdn Bhd? Done added "(Sacofa Private Limited)" Cerevisae (talk) 06:46, 30 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Don't link Information technology Done
CE here Done checked. Cerevisae (talk) 06:46, 30 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Transport

Duplinks: Sematan, Bintulu, Kapit, Kuala Lumpur, Rajang River Done
Many conversion templates needed Done except for freight weight tonnes (FWT). There is no wiki conversion template available for FWT. Cerevisae (talk) 12:27, 30 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
What is federal highway?
The primary route in Sarawak would be Why future tense? Done changed to "is the" Cerevisae (talk) 12:27, 30 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Could not understand connecting from south-western tip of Sematan, Sarawak through Brunei until the north-eastern end of Tawau, Sabah Done Removed "south-western tip", and "north-eastern end" Cerevisae (talk) 12:27, 30 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
However, the road condition is unsatisfactory Explain why. Done source added. Cerevisae (talk) 12:27, 30 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
There are three airlines serving flight routes in Sarawak: Malaysia Airlines, Air Asia, and MASwings. Source? Done
CE here and here Done checked. Cerevisae (talk) 12:27, 30 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Healthcare

1Malaysia clinics What is that? Done
A variety of traditional medicinal practices are still being used by the various communities in Sarawak Would be interesting if we can have further sourced info on this. Done added four sources. Cerevisae (talk) 13:45, 30 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
There are 2,237 doctors in Sarawak... As of which year? Done
CE here Done

Demographics

Note: This section has been repeatedly vandalized by some IPs. Please check that the percentages and figures are still accurate. Done
Duplinks: Ibans, Bidayuh, Melanau, Murut, Iban people, Peninsular Malaysia Done
As of the 2015 census Of where? Done

Iban

Sarawak has the highest number of Ibans in Borneo Their number? Done
I think the groups should be arranged alphabetically, or is there some other order here? Not done These are arranged in terms of hierarchy. The first one to be mentioned is of the highest hierarchy, followed by the second one in the hierarchy. Cerevisae (talk) 11:47, 31 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Duplink: Rajang basin Done
when headhunting was prevalent What is headhunting? Has this been mentioned elsewhere? Not done It is linked in the sentence "Piracy, slavery, and headhunting were also banned." in the "Brooke dynasty" section. Cerevisae (talk) 11:47, 31 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
symbol of ritual well being among its households What does it mean? Done changed to "ritual symbol" Cerevisae (talk) 11:47, 31 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Chinese

The Chinese first came to Sarawak as traders and explorers in the 6th century AD/BC? Done
They organised themselves economically Meaning? Done Sentence removed. Cerevisae (talk) 12:37, 31 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
before subscribed to the ideology of Sarawak nationalism after the formation of Malaysia in 1963 Meaning? Done changed to "before adopting the ideology of Sarawak nationalism after 1963." Cerevisae (talk) 12:37, 31 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Duplinks: Bau, Sarawak, Sarawak River, Sibu, Rajang River, Miri Done

Malay

(Malay kampung/village) What does it mean? Write properly Done Removed "kampung". Just use "village" Cerevisae (talk) 10:56, 29 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
They choose to build settlements (Malay kampung/village) along the river banks. Today, they migrated to urban areas So is the first line about what they did in the past? The second line is grammatically wrong and I can not understand it. Done changed to "They chose to build settlements (Malay villages) along the river banks. Today, they migrate to urban areas and work in public and private sectors." Cerevisae (talk) 12:47, 31 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
silver/brass craftings What does "/" mean? Done changed to "silver and brass crafts" Cerevisae (talk) 12:47, 31 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Examples of Malay kampungs (villages) You have already defined it Don't repeat Done
Duplinks: Fort Margherita, Melanau Done

Melanau

Duplink: Mukah Done
kampungs (villages) Why define again? Done Removed "kampung" Cerevisae (talk) 10:57, 29 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
They worked as fishermen, boat-builders, and craftsmen. The Melananus originally practices paganism but today most of them are Muslims. However, some of them still practices Christianity and paganism. They do celebrate traditional animists Kaul festival. Very poorly written. Please correct it yourself, I may change the meaning accidentally. Done changed to "They originally practiced paganism and celebrate Kaul festival but today most of them are Muslims." Cerevisae (talk) 09:11, 1 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Bidayuh

Link percussion, limestone Done

Orang Ulu

The word Orang Ulu means "upriver people". What is the original language? Done Iban language. Cerevisae (talk) 20:59, 31 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
in upriver of the Sarawak's interior Where is the water body whose upriver or upstream it is? Done Used "upstream" Cerevisae (talk) 20:59, 31 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Duplinks: Kenyah, Penan, Bario, Ba'kelalan, Baram River Done

Religion

Duplinks: Abdul Rahman Ya'kub, Yang di-Pertuan Agong, Iban, Bidayuh, Orang Ulu Malay, Melanau, Kedayan, animism. Done
Sarawak constitution The Constitution of Sarawak Done
BEM or Sidang Injil Borneo, S.I.B. One short form uses periods, the other does not Done
Buddhism, Taoism, and Chinese Folk Religion Link. Why are caps used in Chinese Folk Religion? Done Used small letters. Cerevisae (talk) 09:38, 1 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Other minor religions in Sarawak are Baha'i, Hinduism, Sikhism, and animism. Source? Done Four sources added. Cerevisae (talk) 15:45, 1 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Languages

Duplinks: Stephen Kalong Ningkan, Abdul Rahman Ya'kub, state legislative assembly, Chief Minister, Adenan Satem, Sarawak Malay, Orang Ulu Done

Culture

Sarawak has a multiracial, multicultural, and multilingual society Reword as I suggested in the lead Done
Religions such as Christianity have affected the lives of indigenous people particularly Kelabit people and Lun Bawang people. Christianity plays an important role in their daily lives, and has changed their ethnic identities. Done changed tp "Christianity plays an important role in the daily lives of the Kelabit and Lun Bawang and has changed their ethnic identities." Cerevisae (talk) 22:51, 1 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Carpenter Streets Should this be "Street"? Done
Duplinks: Headhunting, Kelabit people, Lun Bawang, Mount Santubong, Fort Margherita, Kapit, Kuching, Bario, Ba'kelalan, Sibu, Chinatown, Kuching Done

Fine arts and crafts

Duplink: Sapeh, Universiti Malaysia Sarawak Done
Hikayat Panglima Nikosa Who wrote it? Done

Media

The government and its wealthy allies virtually controls every newspapers in Sarawak through restrictive laws and personal connections. Looks like a risky sentence. I think the "wealthy allies" and "controls every paper" parts should be omitted. It is a fact that they impose laws and restrictions - so keep just them. I am not sure what to do about the subsequent examples. You may say "the Sarawak government is popularly believed to exert its influence over the media." I do not think the allies part is proper here. Done Changed to "The Sarawak government is popularly believed to exert its influence over the media. Examples of newspapers based in Sarawak are ..." Cerevisae (talk) 10:47, 29 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Duplink:Rimbunan Hijau Done Removed. Cerevisae (talk) 10:47, 29 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Holidays and festivals

Duplinks: Sarawak Self-government Day, Gawai Dayak Done

Sports

1958 and 1962 British Empire and Commonwealth Games Link this as 1958 and 1962 British Empire and Commonwealth Games Done
Olympic medal to the total of 6 medals won by Malaysia For which year? Done from 1992 to 2012. Cerevisae (talk) 09:28, 31 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Sources

Format refs. 20, 76, 77, 78, 276, 278 properly Done
Why is bold used in ref 75? Done
Refs. 315, 316 may not be reliable Done

Paraphrasing possibility

Earwig's copyvio detector found some paraphrasing which you can see here. You need to reword the portions accordingly. Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 12:12, 24 March 2016 (UTC) Done Now reduced to 9.1% Cerevisae (talk) 04:45, 2 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Cerevisae: I believe I have completed the list of issues. Take your time and work through the issues carefully. Good luck! Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 13:04, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Sainsf: Thanks, your help is greatly appreciated! Cerevisae (talk) 22:04, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Sainsf:

Done All issues addressed! Cerevisae (talk) 04:45, 2 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I have no words for your work! I am truly happy to promote this. Congrats! Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 05:01, 2 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]