Talk:St Catherine's Hill, Dorset

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Review: April 12, 2022. (Reviewed version).

A fact from St Catherine's Hill, Dorset appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 8 April 2014 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that St Catherine's Hill in Dorset was the site of a Cold War nuclear bunker?

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St. or St ?

You need to work out if it is "St." or "St"? The Hampshire article is called St. Catherine's Hill, Hampshire. See for example St. Catherine. I have done two disambig pages: St. Catherine's Hill, St Catherine's Hill so both possibilities are covered. Also I set up St. Catherines Hill, St Catherines Hill as redirects as there's no certainty that the apostrophe would be included in a Wiki search by a user.--Penbat (talk) 17:32, 5 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I think the Manual of Style says, St (without the full stop) but currently I can't find where.--Ykraps (talk) 19:00, 5 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Photos with date

The photos File:Disused quarry, St Catherine's Hill, Dorset..JPG and File:St Catherine's Hill, Dorset, west side..JPG were taken with a camera that added a watermark with the date and hour of the photo at the corner. It may be better if those things are removed, to improve the quality of the article. The guys at Wikipedia:Graphics Lab/Photography workshop may be able to help. Cambalachero (talk) 02:28, 6 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Yeh, I agree with you. Unfortunately I forgot to turn the option off on that day. I was in two minds as to whether to take the photographs again or to try and edit them with photoshop. I'll ask the guys at the graphics lab which they recommend, good suggestion, thanks.--Ykraps (talk) 16:40, 6 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:St Catherine's Hill, Dorset/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 17:47, 15 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! I'll be reviewing this article to help reduce the good article nomination backlog and to gain points in the WP:WIKICUP. Although quid pro quo is not required, if you fancy returning the favor, I have a list of articles in need of review here. — Ghost River 17:47, 15 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Infobox and lede

Comma after "ancient monuments sited there"
Done.--Ykraps (talk) 17:17, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Toponomy

Should specify that it's Catherine of Alexandria in the text, not just the WL, as there are Lots of St Catherines
Done.--Ykraps (talk) 17:10, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
probably means 'Great Hill' in what language?
Old English. Added.--Ykraps (talk) 17:10, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"indicates a 'hill'" reads strangely; should either be rephrased as "means 'hill'" or the single quotes around 'hill' should be dropped
Removed in copy edit (see below).--Ykraps (talk) 17:10, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Split first sentence of second paragraph after the second parentheses and then begin next sentence with "The latter was located north ..."
Removed in copy edit (see below).--Ykraps (talk) 17:10, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
From Harbour to Harbour should be italicized as the name of a book
Removed in copy edit (see below).--Ykraps (talk) 17:10, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Obviously Bell clearly believes this, so where is the source to indicate that it is an erroneous belief?
Hodges discusses the debate but makes no judgement as to whether Richedon and Rishton are the same. He does point to a farm north of the hill called Rishton which he says may be a source of confusion. I have rewritten the sentence.
Link River Stour, Dorset and Moors River
Removed in copy edit.--Ykraps (talk) 17:10, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

History

Capitalize and link "Ice Age" to the one that's most appropriate (see disambiguation page
Changed to last glacial period. --Ykraps (talk) 19:41, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Comma after "discovered on the hill"
Done.--Ykraps (talk) 19:41, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"and a few Paleolithic tools" → "and a few from the Paleolithic" to reduce repetition
Rewritten.--Ykraps (talk) 19:41, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"but if they visited the hill, there is no direct evidence remaining" → "but no direct evidence remains of their potential visitation"
Rewritten.--Ykraps (talk) 19:41, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"currently" runs afoul of MOS:DATED
Removed.--Ykraps (talk) 19:41, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Used as a lookout post by whom?
Romans, Tudors, the Royal Observatory Corps. This is explained later in the article. I have rewritten slightly. Please see what you think.
with its commanding views not neutral
Removed. Although, I would humbly suggest that as the highest point in the area, its commanding views are undeniable.--Ykraps (talk) 08:22, 19 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Delink Stour river here, since it should be linked above
No longer relevant; sentence rewritten.--Ykraps (talk) 08:22, 19 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Fix passive voice throughout the paragraph beginning Exploratory trenches were dug
Done.--Ykraps (talk) 08:22, 19 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Comma after "A number of artefacts were found"
Done.--Ykraps (talk) 08:22, 19 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
It is said by whom?
Everyone. It is an often repeated local legend. Added. --Ykraps (talk) 08:29, 19 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
No comma after "Shore Beacons"
This is one of a pair of parenthetical commas. I have added the other after Warren Hill.--Ykraps (talk) 08:53, 19 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The military has made extensive use of the hill for training purposes When? the Crimean War is one example, I don't believe that qualifies as "extensive"
The article goes on to explain how it was used for trench warfare in WWI and tank manoeuvres in WWII. The sheer scale of the trenches constructed alone would, in my opinion, qualify as extensive but if you think it ought to be removed, I will comply.--Ykraps (talk) 08:53, 19 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Removed--Ykraps (talk) 18:03, 28 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

20th century

Link World War I
Done.--Ykraps (talk) 09:34, 19 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Mixed semicolon/comma use in the list of the first sentence
@GhostRiver: I read that as if the observation and machine gun posts, dressing stations, latrines etc are part of the second line trench system. Do you think a colon is more appropriate?--Ykraps (talk) 09:34, 19 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Rewritten to avoid. --Ykraps (talk) 18:03, 28 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Link Second World War
Done.--Ykraps (talk) 09:34, 19 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"After the war, a nuclear bunker was built into the hill by the Royal Observer Corps." → "After the war, the Royal Observer Corps built a nuclear bunker into the hill."
Done.--Ykraps (talk) 09:34, 19 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Sand and gravel extraction has taken place over various parts of the hill When?
Reliable sources don't indicate when quarrying started but it occurred on an industrial scale in the 20th century. The sentence is in the 20th century section. Does anything else need adding, do you think?--Ykraps (talk) 09:34, 19 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Added 20th century. --Ykraps (talk) 18:03, 28 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
is today MOS:DATED
Changed to 2012.--Ykraps (talk) 09:34, 19 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Comma after "Gravel extraction continued until at least 1933"
Done.--Ykraps (talk) 09:34, 19 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"4,000,000" → "four million" per MOS:LARGENUM
Done.--Ykraps (talk) 09:34, 19 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Today

Section as a whole needs some MOS:DATED qualifications
Added that the info comes from a 2012 report.--Ykraps (talk) 07:04, 20 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"70%" → "70 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
Changed to per cent (Br Eng).--Ykraps (talk) 07:04, 20 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Semicolon would be better served as a period, and then "Although prohibited, off-road ..."
Changed.--Ykraps (talk) 07:04, 20 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Geography

The eastern slopes and foot of the hill, an area referred to as the Town Common, is almost Subject/verb agreement issues. Subject is plural (slopes and foot) but is then qualified as a singular, making it a bit of a mess
Done.--Ykraps (talk) 19:03, 22 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"and are believed to have been"
Done.--Ykraps (talk) 19:03, 22 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Don't like parentheses in the main text if it can be avoided, as in all others were formed in a marine environment
Removed.--Ykraps (talk) 19:03, 22 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
If this is so If what is so?
That the strata were deposited by a river or estuary. I've rewritten. See what you think.--Ykraps (talk) 19:03, 22 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"Mossy Stonecrop" should be lowercase and the scientific name should be italicized
Done.--Ykraps (talk) 19:03, 22 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"provide habitats" {[right arrow}} "provides habitats" (singular "mix" is the subject of the sentence)
Done.--Ykraps (talk) 19:03, 22 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

References / Bibliography

Oh boy.

Use the SFN template on all the "Hodges", "Stannard", and "Hoodless" refs (for an example, see Arthur Guinness)
Done. All these citations are in a consistent sfn format. It is normally considered unhelpful to add citation templates to an article that already uses a consistent system without templates. See Wikipedia:Citing sources#Variation in citation methods.--Ykraps (talk) 07:41, 23 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Most of these sources are from the Management Plan, so that should go in the biography and the SFN template should be used for page numbers
Done.--Ykraps (talk) 07:41, 23 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Both [3] (Surrey Record Society) and [4] (Bell) appear to be books, so the titles should be italicized
Fixed.--Ykraps (talk) 07:41, 23 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

Images all look good
No stability concerns in the revision history
Earwig score looks good

Broadly, the prose gives me pause, as there are many MOS:WTW about time (MOS:REALTIME) and the conference of authority (MOS:WEASEL). Most of the latter are caused by passive voice throughout this article. It's going to take some serious work to get into shape. Putting on hold for now. Feel free to ping me with questions, and please let me know when you're finished. — Ghost River 20:54, 17 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@GhostRiver: Do you have further comments?--Ykraps (talk) 07:45, 23 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@GhostRiver: Are you intending to return to this review? --Ykraps (talk) 18:08, 28 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I will look at this again tomorrow. I have been dealing with some of the uglier symptoms of my bipolar disorder. — Ghost River 04:36, 30 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I got pinged to have a look at it since the reviewer hasn't been active for a week. I've done a bit of a copyedit, but other than that I don't think there's any reason it can't pass a GA review now, except to note I have not checked many of the references to ensure the claims in the article are factually accurate. Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 14:51, 8 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

No more serious concerns. Passing now. — Ghost River 18:28, 12 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]