Talk:Threlkeld Quarry and Mining Museum

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Possible promotional language/inappropriate tone

Parts of this article do not feature the correct Wikipedia tone. These may need correcting/changing.

Examples of incorrect tone include:

Listing target audience of attraction in opening paragraph about article
language such as
- "comprehensive [...] museum"
- "extensive quarry site [with] ample space for the display"
- "mineral panning is optionally available"
- "guided tour [...] is one of the highlights of the museum"
- "continues to expand through the dedication of staff"
The description of "unique collection" is repeated in the article. And similar phrasing is also used elsewhere

Perhaps the most obvious brochure style advertisement in this article is: "dependant on weather and staff availability. To be confirmed by phone" - surely this is far from the correct style of article, and feels more suited to their own website/advertisement.

The article also features unreferenced content. Examples follow

Second paragraph of Quarry section, which I suspect is a later edition, as it follows the advertising style of other parts of the article
Parts of the Railway section do not have enough references
The Underground Mine section is entirely unreferenced, and has a similar incorrect tone.
The Mining Room section could perhaps link to another Wikipedia page explaining ores and mining in the lake district, as opposed to listing items in a display.
The Quarry Room section is unreferenced
The Open Air Exhibition section could perhaps be better titled - Gallery

Due to the style of this article, I suspect sections include a non neutral standpoint, primary research, and possible advertising (although this may, of course, be entirely unintentional). I am looking to re write aspects of the article in a better tone, while ensuring all information is correctly sourced and referenced. Mxtt.prior (talk) 08:05, 30 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Following further research, I've discovered large parts of this article are indeed copy-pasted directly from the website of the museum https://www.threlkeldquarryandminingmuseum.co.uk/about-us-1/. This helps explain my above comment, and why the article contains an inappropriate tone. Using Earwig's Copyvio Detector https://copyvios.toolforge.org/ returns a 59% confidence of possible copyright violation, due to the large volume of copy-pasted text. As before, I will look to re write certain aspects of the article to fix the problems, and any comments are welcome. Mxtt.prior (talk) 08:19, 30 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Copyvio/text paste issues seem to be cleaned up now. Dl2000 (talk) 21:41, 9 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]