Talk:Tropical Storm Arthur (1996)
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Along with possible corrections to the Andrew (1992) rainfall graphic, I'll look into creating rainfall graphics for Arthur tomorrow night. It was an odd oversight. Thegreatdr (talk) 20:15, 23 November 2011 (UTC)
- The graphics have been produced and are in the usual spot. Considering the format of the page, I wasn't sure if you wanted one of them included. Thegreatdr (talk) 06:02, 25 November 2011 (UTC)
- This review is transcluded from Talk:Tropical Storm Arthur (1996)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
- I'll be doing this one in a few hours. HurricaneFan25 16:11, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
- Is it reasonably well written?
- A. Prose quality:
- caused minimal flooding in The Carolinas in mid-June 1996 "The" should be lowercase. caused minimal flooding in the Carolinas in mid-June 1996
- The first tropical cyclone and first named storm of the 1996 Atlantic hurricane season Two small problems here. Since it was first for both, you can remove a few words, and since you already said it occurred in 1996, you can just say it's part of the annual hurricane season. The first tropical cyclone and named storm of the annual Atlantic hurricane season
- Arthur originated from an area of increased convection Link convection to atmospheric convection, as not all readers will know what it is. Arthur originated from an area of increased atmospheric convection
- I'm a bit concerned about the usage of "became", as the system is still, well, a system; "designated" or similar words would be better.
- Tropical Storm Arthur while just offshore of the Southeastern United States Two questions — why have the "of" (it tightens the prose if it's removed) and why is "southeastern" capitalized? Tropical Storm Arthur while just offshore the southeastern United States
- Later that day, Arthur peaked as a 45 mph (75 km/h) Clarify that it was a tropical storm at that point; it sounds awkward as it currently is. Later that day, Arthur peaked as a 45 mph (75 km/h) tropical storm
- weakened slightly before making landfall As with the above, link landfall to landfall (meteorology), as not everyone knows what "landfall" means. weakened slightly before making landfall
- early on the following day Tighten the prose a bit by removing "on". early the following day
- On June 16, 1996 satellite imagery A comma is needed right after "1996". On June 16, 1996, satellite imagery
- Once again, link convection to atmospheric convection.
- On June 17, the convection increased in organization at low-levels A hyphen isn't needed here; it's only needed when you use "level" — in the plural form, it's fine. On June 17, the convection increased in organization at low levels
- organized sufficiently to be designated as a tropical depression, the first of the season → organized sufficiently to be designated as a tropical depression, making it the first of the season
- Initially, the depression tracked north-northwest under the steering currents of the low-level flow around the western periphery of the Atlantic subtropical ridge There's a lot of jargon here; a few links wouldn't be harmful.
- cold low Add a link; they're referring to a cold-core low. cold-core low
- The tropical storm weakened to a tropical depression about 100 mi (160 km) northeast of Cape Hatteras. The depression accelerated towards the northeast when westerly steering currents increased. These sentences could be merged. The tropical storm weakened to a tropical depression about 100 mi (160 km) northeast of Cape Hatteras, and accelerated towards the northeast when westerly steering currents increased.
- though because it fell gradually, no significant flooding was reported Refs should come after punctuation. Try to squeeze a comma in there, so you can put ref #6 after it.
- In addition, a C-Man station located about 34.5 mi (55.5 km) — what's a C-Man station?
- totaling to only $1 million (1996 USD). Remove the "to" for the tightening of the prose. totaling only $1 million (1996 USD).
- B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
- A. Prose quality:
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- Pass or Fail: