Talk:VanossGaming/Archive 1

Archive 1

Semi-protected edit request on 27 May 2016

Associated acts SeaNanners, Tom Syndicate i think you should change this to H20 Delirous and IAM Wildcat Mackdanger (talk) 01:19, 27 May 2016 (UTC) Mackdanger (talk) 01:19, 27 May 2016 (UTC)

Not done: as you have not cited reliable sources to back up your request, without which no information should be added to, or changed in, any article.
We also have articles on SeaNanners and Tom Syndicate but H20 Delirous and IAM Wildcat are not even mentioned in any article, let alone have their own articles. - Arjayay (talk) 09:14, 27 May 2016 (UTC)

Semi-protected edit request on 19 June 2016

info: VanossGaming was once working with the unpopular youtube channel nuke4prez a long while ago

Blakkthunderr (talk) 06:02, 19 June 2016 (UTC)

Not done: it's not clear what changes you want to be made. Please mention the specific changes in a "change X to Y" format. @Blakkthunderr: st170e^talk 12:57, 19 June 2016 (UTC)

'Mini Ladd' Grammar

Okay so in the 'history' subsection of 'YouTube career', the spelling is 'Mini Ladd', but in 'Other Projects' it's put as 'MiniLadd' without the space. Which of these conforms to the MOS and should be used? MM ('"HURRRR?) ^(Hmmmmm.) 14:20, 9 February 2017 (UTC)

"Mini Ladd" is now used across the page Idiosincrático (talk) 18:08, 28 June 2023 (UTC)

Quote Edits

Obviously, Evan has been playing more games than Call of Duty and Grand Theft Auto, but the quote that contained these two games kept getting edited with games not listed in the original quote.

Unfortunately, the page is currently locked to prevent any further vandalism, but the original quote is now marred by content not in the original quote.

To add extra games that Evan plays, they MUST be added outside the quote. MDGLee (talk) 05:21, 18 July 2018 (UTC)

Semi-protected edit request on 31 August 2018

Hello, I am the operations manager for Vanoss Gaming, the company to which this Wikipedia article refers to. Evan Fong is the founder and CEO, but this wikipedia page in current form conflates information about the company with personal information about Evan Fong as an entertainment personality. We believe that there should be a clear differentiation between the two (as is customary between any notable company and its CEO), and with that in mind have the following change requests to make to the Vanoss Gaming page.

1.) ORIGINAL Evan Fong (born 31 May 1992), better known through his YouTube videos as VanossGaming (or simply Vanoss), is a Canadian video game commentator and internet personality. He produces content on YouTube centered on playing popular video games with other YouTube collaborators. As of June 2018, Fong's channel has over 9 billion video views and 23 million subscribers on YouTube,[1] making it the 25th most subscribed channel on YouTube.[2]

1.) CHANGE REQUEST Vanoss Gaming is an entertainment company producing various content on YouTube including original animations, video game commentary with other YouTube collaborators, and live-action shorts. As of June 2018, the Vanoss Gaming channel has over 9 billion video views and 23 million subscribers on YouTube,[1] making it the 25th most subscribed channel on YouTube.[2]

2.) ORIGINAL History Fong created the VanossGaming channel on YouTube on September 15, 2011. The name "Vanoss" comes from VANOS, a variable valve timing system produced by German automobile company BMW; Fong's father used the alias "vanoss62" on the PlayStation 3, which his son later adopted for his own.

Fong has been known to do work with other popular YouTubers such as H2O Delirious, I Am Wildcat, Adam "SeaNanners" Montoya and Tom "Syndicate" Cassell. Fong first appeared on camera in July 2013, in a video celebrating one million subscribers.

In January 2015, Fong began to receive mainstream media attention as he approached 11 million subscribers and a ranking within the top 25 most subscribed channels on YouTube, with commentators identifying him as a central figure in the growing video game commentary subculture.[3] Speaking at the time, he suggested that his success could be credited to the fact that "Viewers really like the authentic type of content from regular people just playing games because they can relate to that".[3] In March 2015 he appeared on his first gaming convention panel, the "YouTube Gaming Evolution" panel at PAX East in Boston, Massachusetts, alongside collaborators I Am Wildcat, Lui Calibre, and Mini Ladd.

On April 30, 2015, Fong announced on Twitter that he had signed with Jetpak, a multi-channel network founded by Adam "SeaNanners" Montoya and Tom "Syndicate" Cassell.

On November 26, 2015, Fong announced that he was releasing a new logo for the VanossGaming brand. He released the logo later that day along with limited edition merchandise released the day after. The logo was a white minimalistic design of an owl on a black background. There is also a diagonal cut through the design, creating a black letter "V". The owl design represented the owl mask on Fong's character model in Grand Theft Auto Online.

2.) CHANGE REQUEST The Vanoss Gaming channel was created by Evan Fong on September 15, 2011. Fong also voices the central character of Vanoss, an owl with a human body, used throughout the channel’s content. Vanoss Gaming has been known to collaborate with other popular YouTubers such as H2O Delirious, I Am Wildcat, Adam "SeaNanners" Montoya and Tom "Syndicate" Cassell. In January 2015, Vanoss Gaming began to receive mainstream media attention as the channel approached 11 million subscribers and a ranking within the top 25 most subscribed channels on YouTube, with commentators identifying Vanoss as a central figure in the growing video game commentary subculture.[3] Speaking at the time, Fong suggested that its success could be credited to the fact that "Viewers really like the authentic type of content from regular people just playing games because they can relate to that".[3]

On April 30, 2015, Vanoss Gaming joined Jetpak, a multi-channel network founded by Adam "SeaNanners" Montoya and Tom "Syndicate" Cassell.

On November 26, 2015, a new logo for the Vanoss Gaming brand was announced. along with limited edition merchandise released the day after. The logo was a white minimalistic design of an owl on a black background. There is also a diagonal cut through the design, creating a black letter "V".

3.) ORIGINAL Other projects On July 25, 2015, Fong announced that he had been working on a game called Dead Realm for "the last six or seven months" as a creative director, alongside other YouTube collaborators such as Daithi De Nogla, Terroriser, MiniLadd, and TheSyndicateProject. It was released via Steam as an early release on July 30, 2015.[5]

3.) CHANGE REQUEST On July 25, 2015, Vanoss Gaming announced a collaboration on a game called Dead Realm, alongside other YouTube collaborators such as Daithi De Nogla, Terroriser, MiniLadd, and TheSyndicateProject. It was released via Steam as an early release on July 30, 2015.[5]

4.) ORIGINAL On August 25, 2017, Fong released a remix of "U-Rite" by hip-hop group They under the name Rynx. Fong released his debut single "Want You" featuring Miranda Glory on December 12, 2017. On April 18, 2018, Fong released the official music video for "Want You". On June 27, he released the music video for his second single "I'm Alright" featuring Jimi Ono. On August 15th, he released a remix of the Alison Wonderland song, “Cry.”

4.) CHANGE REQUEST - please delete this as Rynx is completely separate entity that has nothing to do with Vanoss Gaming.

5.) ORIGINAL Personal life Born and raised in Toronto, Canada, Fong is of Asian descent, his mother being Korean, and father Chinese. Fong graduated from Richmond Hill High School. Fong claims that he was not introduced to video games at a young age, but that he played games "here and there" which included children's adventure and puzzle titles such as Freddi Fish and Pajama Sam. After attending high school, Fong studied economics in college, but later dropped out in his second year to focus on his YouTube channel as a full-time commitment.[3] Fong claims that his parents were initially concerned that he was neglecting his studies in favor of producing content for his YouTube channel, admitting that "Even though there's a lot of potential for somebody starting a YouTube channel it's obviously not a guaranteed path."[3] Outside of his YouTube career, Fong continues to play ice hockey recreationally, and also plays the guitar as another hobby. Along with that he is known for owning the most massive pair of balls in history. — Preceding unsigned comment added by SlidPitGaming (talk • contribs) 21:10, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

5.) CHANGE REQUEST. Please delete as this is not relevant to Vanoss Gaming as a company. This information could go on a seperate Evan Fong, entertainment personality, entry. Garethupton (talk) 00:26, 1 September 2018 (UTC)

Thanks for disclosing your conflict of interest. I've moved your request over to the COI edit request queue to get editors with that expertise looking at this request. ‑‑ElHef (Meep?) 19:14, 3 September 2018 (UTC)

Reply 03-SEP-2018

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Semi-protected edit request on 4 September 2018

<Resubmitting below to the COI edit request queue with references now included. These are the same references cited in the current published article>

Hello, I am the operations manager for Vanoss Gaming, the company to which this Wikipedia article refers to. Evan Fong is the founder and CEO, but this wikipedia page in current form conflates information about the company with personal information about Evan Fong as an entertainment personality. We believe that there should be a clear differentiation between the two (as is customary between any notable company and its CEO), and with that in mind have the following change requests to make to the Vanoss Gaming page.

1.) ORIGINAL Evan Fong (born 31 May 1992), better known through his YouTube videos as VanossGaming (or simply Vanoss), is a Canadian video game commentator and internet personality. He produces content on YouTube centered on playing popular video games with other YouTube collaborators. As of June 2018, Fong's channel has over 9 billion video views and 23 million subscribers on YouTube,[1] making it the 25th most subscribed channel on YouTube.[2]

1.) CHANGE REQUEST Vanoss Gaming is an entertainment company producing various content on YouTube including original animations, video game commentary with other YouTube collaborators, and live-action shorts. As of June 2018, the Vanoss Gaming channel has over 9 billion video views and 23 million subscribers on YouTube,[1] making it the 25th most subscribed channel on YouTube.[2]

2.) ORIGINAL History Fong created the VanossGaming channel on YouTube on September 15, 2011. The name "Vanoss" comes from VANOS, a variable valve timing system produced by German automobile company BMW; Fong's father used the alias "vanoss62" on the PlayStation 3, which his son later adopted for his own.

Fong has been known to do work with other popular YouTubers such as H2O Delirious, I Am Wildcat, Adam "SeaNanners" Montoya and Tom "Syndicate" Cassell. Fong first appeared on camera in July 2013, in a video celebrating one million subscribers.

In January 2015, Fong began to receive mainstream media attention as he approached 11 million subscribers and a ranking within the top 25 most subscribed channels on YouTube, with commentators identifying him as a central figure in the growing video game commentary subculture.[3] Speaking at the time, he suggested that his success could be credited to the fact that "Viewers really like the authentic type of content from regular people just playing games because they can relate to that".[3] In March 2015 he appeared on his first gaming convention panel, the "YouTube Gaming Evolution" panel at PAX East in Boston, Massachusetts, alongside collaborators I Am Wildcat, Lui Calibre, and Mini Ladd.

On April 30, 2015, Fong announced on Twitter that he had signed with Jetpak, a multi-channel network founded by Adam "SeaNanners" Montoya and Tom "Syndicate" Cassell.

On November 26, 2015, Fong announced that he was releasing a new logo for the VanossGaming brand. He released the logo later that day along with limited edition merchandise released the day after. The logo was a white minimalistic design of an owl on a black background. There is also a diagonal cut through the design, creating a black letter "V". The owl design represented the owl mask on Fong's character model in Grand Theft Auto Online.

2.) CHANGE REQUEST The Vanoss Gaming channel was created by Evan Fong on September 15, 2011. Fong also voices the central character of Vanoss, an owl with a human body, used throughout the channel’s content. Vanoss Gaming has been known to collaborate with other popular YouTubers such as H2O Delirious, I Am Wildcat, Adam "SeaNanners" Montoya and Tom "Syndicate" Cassell. In January 2015, Vanoss Gaming began to receive mainstream media attention as the channel approached 11 million subscribers and a ranking within the top 25 most subscribed channels on YouTube, with commentators identifying Vanoss as a central figure in the growing video game commentary subculture.[3] Speaking at the time, Fong suggested that its success could be credited to the fact that "Viewers really like the authentic type of content from regular people just playing games because they can relate to that".[3]

On April 30, 2015, Vanoss Gaming joined Jetpak, a multi-channel network founded by Adam "SeaNanners" Montoya and Tom "Syndicate" Cassell.

On November 26, 2015, a new logo for the Vanoss Gaming brand was announced. along with limited edition merchandise released the day after. The logo was a white minimalistic design of an owl on a black background. There is also a diagonal cut through the design, creating a black letter "V".

3.) ORIGINAL Other projects On July 25, 2015, Fong announced that he had been working on a game called Dead Realm for "the last six or seven months" as a creative director, alongside other YouTube collaborators such as Daithi De Nogla, Terroriser, MiniLadd, and TheSyndicateProject. It was released via Steam as an early release on July 30, 2015.[5]

3.) CHANGE REQUEST On July 25, 2015, Vanoss Gaming announced a collaboration on a game called Dead Realm, alongside other YouTube collaborators such as Daithi De Nogla, Terroriser, MiniLadd, and TheSyndicateProject. It was released via Steam as an early release on July 30, 2015.[5]

4.) ORIGINAL On August 25, 2017, Fong released a remix of "U-Rite" by hip-hop group They under the name Rynx. Fong released his debut single "Want You" featuring Miranda Glory on December 12, 2017. On April 18, 2018, Fong released the official music video for "Want You". On June 27, he released the music video for his second single "I'm Alright" featuring Jimi Ono. On August 15th, he released a remix of the Alison Wonderland song, “Cry.”

4.) CHANGE REQUEST - please delete this as Rynx is completely separate entity that has nothing to do with Vanoss Gaming.

5.) ORIGINAL Personal life Born and raised in Toronto, Canada, Fong is of Asian descent, his mother being Korean, and father Chinese. Fong graduated from Richmond Hill High School. Fong claims that he was not introduced to video games at a young age, but that he played games "here and there" which included children's adventure and puzzle titles such as Freddi Fish and Pajama Sam. After attending high school, Fong studied economics in college, but later dropped out in his second year to focus on his YouTube channel as a full-time commitment.[3] Fong claims that his parents were initially concerned that he was neglecting his studies in favor of producing content for his YouTube channel, admitting that "Even though there's a lot of potential for somebody starting a YouTube channel it's obviously not a guaranteed path."[3] Outside of his YouTube career, Fong continues to play ice hockey recreationally, and also plays the guitar as another hobby.

5.) CHANGE REQUEST. Please delete as this is not relevant to Vanoss Gaming as a company. This information could go on a seperate Evan Fong, entertainment personality, entry.

References 1. statsheep.com. Retrieved June 28, 2017. 2. "vanossgaming YouTube Stats, Channel Statistics". Socialblade.com. Retrieved September 17, 2016. 3. "Toronto man draws millions playing games on YouTube". Canadian Broadcasting Corporation. January 14, 2015. Retrieved June 17, 2015. 4. Sarkar, Samit (November 21, 2014). "Here are the nominees for The Game Awards 2014". Polygon. Retrieved June 17, 2015. 5. "3BLACKDOT Releases Early Access STEAM Horror Mega-Hit 'Dead Realm'". www.prnewswire.com. Retrieved 2015-11-22. Garethupton (talk) 17:17, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

 Not done: None of the sources provided mention VanossGaming as being a separate company. Saucy^{[talk – contribs]} 21:25, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

Semi-protected edit request on 26 January 2020

According to his Trackalytics page, Vanoss reached 10 million subscribers in 2014, not 2015. And I'm talking about the "Play buttons" section in the infobox. 2A02:2F0D:D0A:AE00:68D6:74D4:8ABB:650D (talk) 13:52, 26 January 2020 (UTC)

 Done Idiosincrático (talk) 18:08, 28 June 2023 (UTC)

Semi-protected edit request on 15 May 2020

I simpl wan to add a link that takes you to a playlist of all of his available outro songs in the music section, https://open.spotify.com/playlist/1ldjj4t27RYeUfhXu1tdNY?si=LugS5WyZQ--WS8qM4UuHyg Giblet30 (talk) 02:25, 15 May 2020 (UTC)

 Not done: Inappropriate EL. Spotify requires registration so this would be incorrect per WP:ELNO no. 6 RandomCanadian (talk | contribs) 02:34, 15 May 2020 (UTC)

Semi-protected edit request on 14 October 2020

vanoss on twitter recently came out as homosexual and supporting the lgbtq+ community Ahahhhahha (talk) 00:19, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

 Not done: please provide reliable sources that support the change you want to be made. Eggishorn (talk) (contrib) 03:18, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

Semi-protected edit request on 18 January 2021

Evan the vanossgaming himself has asked in a recent video of his to have his father edited to Mr. Sark, if you would so kindly do so, i would greatly appreciate it. 49.183.39.75 (talk) 03:41, 18 January 2021 (UTC)

 Not done: please provide reliable sources that support the change you want to be made. A request from the subject of the article is not a reliable source. Jack Frost (talk) 05:49, 18 January 2021 (UTC)

Semi-protected edit request on 18 January 2021 (2)

According to his video https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=87ArAfB7RbI he wants to have his wiki change to say that he mr. stark is his father Newplayer in the comments (talk) 05:38, 18 January 2021 (UTC)

 Not done: please provide reliable sources that support the change you want to be made. A request from the subject of the article is not a reliable source; I want a million dollars, asking for it in a youtube video is highly unlikely to result in it happening, as is the case here. Jack Frost (talk) 05:51, 18 January 2021 (UTC)

Semi-protected edit request on 18 January 2021 (3)

136.158.30.173 (talk) 09:09, 18 January 2021 (UTC)

Father: Mr. Sark

 Not done: No. See above. Jack Frost (talk) 09:38, 18 January 2021 (UTC)

Semi-protected edit request on 26 June 2021

On the "Dead Realm" tab, I stumbled upon a typo in "The Terroriser" Brian's real name. I can't edit it, otherwise I would have corrected the typo myself. Chimpanzzi (talk) 14:17, 26 June 2021 (UTC)

Done. Delta fiver (talk) (UTC) 14:23, 26 June 2021 (UTC)

Semi-protected edit request on 23 August 2021

Update subscriber count to 25,6 85.228.164.167 (talk) 20:01, 23 August 2021 (UTC)

Done. Updated.

vanoss

vanoss dad is tony stark — Preceding unsigned comment added by 216.110.254.6 (talk) 16:12, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

 Not done: No. Idiosincrático (talk) 18:08, 28 June 2023 (UTC)

Suggestion: Remove Mini from Associated Acts

Despite the controversy of Craig Thompson, suggest to remove Mini Ladd from the list. 2001:4451:8795:E00:56D:1766:6D9D:46DF (talk) 04:14, 2 August 2023 (UTC)

They've collaborated significantly in the past, if Nogla were to stop collaborating for whatever reason, he wouldn't be removed as they've collaborated significantly before. Idiosincrático (talk) 04:30, 2 August 2023 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:VanossGaming/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Czarking0 (talk · contribs) 22:54, 28 September 2023 (UTC)

Hello I will be reviewing this article for GA Czarking0 (talk) 22:54, 28 September 2023 (UTC)

I am failing this due to style concerns, some sections I suspect lack notability, in some areas the sources are not so good. Many specifics listed below Czarking0 (talk) 00:07, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

EarlyLife

This sentence is out of the WP:MOS since "claimed" brings doubt. "He claimed that he was not introduced to video games at a young age as his parents encouraged him to play ice hockey and to focus on school work." Source 1 is himself claiming this which is not sufficient citation for this claim. The cbc article does not say his parents encouraged him to play ice hockey. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Czarking0 (talk • contribs) 23:09, 28 September 2023 (UTC)

• Addressed – I've removed the sentence and references altogether. Idiosincrático (talk) 07:47, 18 October 2023 (UTC)

   Done Czarking0 (talk) 17:28, 11 November 2023 (UTC)

Ice Hockey

Is this actually a notable part of his life? A person mentioning a part of their childhood on their social media does not seem to meet the WP bar for notability even if that social media has a lot of following. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Czarking0 (talk • contribs) 22:57, 28 September 2023 (UTC)

• Addressed – I've condensed this section a little bit and combined it with the early life section, I still believe his participation in the Ontario league, his teams and stats are notable. I also removed the statement on him reminiscing online about it. I'd like to think this is enough, please let me know if it isn't. Idiosincrático (talk) 07:47, 18 October 2023 (UTC)

  I'll defer to the author since Canadian Hokey culture is not a knowledge area for me.  Done Czarking0 (talk) 17:29, 11 November 2023 (UTC)

Images

This article has very little to do with the University he dropped out of after two years. I would remove that image. I like the images of other people you included. Some of his logos would be nice to have. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Czarking0 (talk • contribs) 23:10, 28 September 2023 (UTC)

• Addressed – I've removed the image, I've tried in the past to add his current logo, however it is under copyright and could only be included in the infobox, the infobox imo is big enough. I'm pretty happy with the amount of images on the page.

Youtube Channel

"During his early years on YouTube, he met several other creators who would eventually feature frequently in his videos. His channel achieved popularity soon after, and by 2014 it had surpassed 10 million subscribers." When are the early years? "soon after" is against WP:MOS — Preceding unsigned comment added by Czarking0 (talk • contribs) 23:13, 28 September 2023 (UTC)

• Addressed – Removed completely

"with commentators identifying him as a central figure in the growing video game commentary subculture." Your source does not say this

• Addressed – Removed completely

Your source does highlight how this is very different from what is available on TV. I think that is notable. You say that he was formerly partnered with Machinima but never mention that partnership starting. If it is worth saying he was partnered with them then it is worth saying how that started and when. You say Jetpak is a subsidiary of 3Blackdot, why is that notable I have no idea who 3Blackdot is.

• Addressed – I've mentioned the "tuning out of TV" from the CBC source. I've mentioned he joined Machinima early in his career as I don't have a source too say exactly when; I've shaped the paragraph to fit your points. I removed the mention of 3Blackdot, it is covered only in the other projects section.

This is not encyclopedic style: "Fong's social impact on boys and adolescents was analysed and published in the New Media & Society journal in 2018, his content was said to reflect a "broader shift in youth culture among the contemporary generation," whereby Fong and PewDiePie reportedly explore complex "shades of grey" in masculine performance.[15]"

• Addressed – I removed the comments after mentioning the publication, leaving only: "Fong's social impact on boys and adolescents was analysed and published in the New Media & Society journal in 2018"

Don't tell the reader what he doesn't do. This section of the article has far too much narrative style. Including the sentence following this quote: "Fong rarely uploads 'let's play' content, in which the viewer experiences most elements of a gameplay session, including parts which might be considered boring or uninteresting.[‡ 5] Whilst he doesn't upload in this style, he acknowledged in 2015 that it is a popular format and that audiences may want "that full experience where they actually feel like they're sitting next to the guy playing in his living room and watch the whole thing, even the slow downtimes".[‡ 5]"

• Addressed – I agree, I've completely removed the narrative writing in this section.

Does he do his own editing? This would be the time to mention the editorial team.

• I imagine he has an editorial team, however I have no source which discusses this. The only mention of something similar to this is what I've already mentioned from the PAX convention, which is that he can spend large amounts of time perfecting the format and editing style of his videos etc.

"VanossGaming was named one of the top influencers within the gaming industry in 2017 by Forbes;[20]" This is not encyclopedic style

• Addressed – reworded

"In a survey published by Variety in July 2015, Fong was ranked among the most influential content creators on YouTube for American children aged 13–17 in accordance with criteria including approachability and authenticity.[23]" Ditto

• Addressed – removed

Czarking0 (talk) 23:15, 28 September 2023 (UTC)

Other Projects

"In 2021, Fong was reportedly still active within the brand partnership, merchandise and social media sectors of the company." This is out of WP:MOS

• Addressed – removed.

"On November 2, 2016, it was announced that Fong was going to feature in a computer-animated series entitled Paranormal Action Squad, written by Michael Rowe" Passive voice also just a bad way to encyclopedicly explain something that happened.

• Addressed – changed to "Fong featured in a computer-animated series..."

"The show received mixed reviews, Brittany Vincent from Decider called the show "dim-witted" and "the worst kind of comedy",[47] whereas Walter from Bubbleblabber praised the show's writing, casting and plot line, leaving an overall rating of 9/10.[49]" Not encyclopedic

• Addressed – removed.

" The piece is a dubstep, trap and heavy electronic dance song which demonstrates Rynx's capacity to deliver "lush melodic build-ups" according to EDM Sauce." ditto

• Addressed – removed

"Commenting on his "Read My Mind" single featuring Mainland, he told British magazine Wonderland" ditto

"I wanted to make a song that had a very human feel within the electronic realm. That’s why the whole song was based off an upright bass line. I combined that with some slab bass textures and real electric and acoustic guitars. All while still being held together with electronic drums and synths." This is quote about one song he wrote. Is this really that notable?

• Addressed – removed

"In September 2019, he announced on Twitter that he would be going on tour in October and November at selected locations in the United States and Canada including San Francisco, New York, Chicago, Los Angeles and Toronto.[‡ 6] On October 15, Fong stated on Twitter that he was ruining his health as a result of his tour preparation,[‡ 7] he later announced on YouTube that his tour was delayed (except the Los Angeles trip) until February 2020.[‡ 8]" I am guessing the tour never happened? Is this notable?

• Addressed – I'm pretty sure it happened right before covid, but I agree and I've removed it...

Is a list of songs he remixed actually notable?

• Addressed – removed

Czarking0 (talk) 23:52, 28 September 2023 (UTC)

Thank you for your review, I've left a note on your talk page @Czarking0. Idiosincrático (talk) 08:24, 18 October 2023 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:VanossGaming/GA2. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Czarking0 (talk · contribs) 17:41, 11 November 2023 (UTC)

Working off comments on GA review 1. I think you addressed all these.

I think the wikiproject tags for business and hokey should be removed. I don't think mentioning topics within a person's bio indicates that the page is of interest to that wikiproject.

• Done – Thanks for taking the time to review the article :) Idiosincrático (talk) 00:50, 12 November 2023 (UTC)

@Idiosincrático: Unfortunately it looks like this review is abandoned as the reviewer hasn't edited since minutes after they started the review. Probably best to either try to find a new reviewer or request that this review be marked as abandoned. -- ZooBlazer 00:58, 8 January 2024 (UTC)

I think its pretty clear that I've assassinated my reviewer. Idiosincrático (talk) 02:19, 8 January 2024 (UTC)

GA Review

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: Zippybonzo (talk · contribs) 08:11, 10 January 2024 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it well written?

   A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

   B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:

2. Is it verifiable with no original research?

   A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

   B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):

   A lot of the sources could be considered as unreliable, however the primary sources are indicated as primary sources in the references section, however there are inline citations.

   C. It contains no original research:

   D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:

   Couldn't find any copyvios

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

   B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):

4. Is it neutral?

   It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:

5. Is it stable?

   It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:

6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

   All image copyright tags look to be in order.

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

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