Talk:Victorian Age: Vampire

Victorian Age: Vampire has been listed as one of the Sports and recreation good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Review: October 20, 2020. (Reviewed version).

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The following references may be useful when improving this article in the future:

Escribá Gómez, Marco (February 2004). "Edad Victoriana: Vampìro presentación" [Presentation of Victorian Age: Vampire]. Dosdediez (in Spanish). No. 27. La Factoria. pp. 24–25.
Padilla, José (November–December 2002). "Victorian Age Vampire". RPG Magazine (in Spanish). No. 9. Edge. p. 9.
López, Marcos (January 2003). "Edad Victoriana: Vampiro" [Victorian Age: Vampire]. RPG Magazine (in Spanish). No. 10. Edge. pp. 15–17.
Dosdediez V2 #29 (Jun 2004) p. 13 (review of novelization)
Dosdediez V2 #29 (Jun 2004) p. 24 (feature about novelization)
Gwiezdny Pirat #1 (2002) p. 15
D20 Magazine #9 p. 15
D20 Magazine #13 p. 6
D20 Magazine #14 p. 7

Suggestion

I suggest that this article be deleted. Comments? TheSeven 16:29, 29 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Legitimate article, needs love and attention.Darker Dreams 07:51, 16 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Expansion

Excellent work! When I first saw this article, it looked like this. :) BOZ (talk) 16:08, 8 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! As you know, I've been cataloguing WoD coverage in RSs for a while, and thought that this would be an "easy article" to begin working on due to its smaller scope compared to something like Werewolf: The Apocalypse.--Alexandra^IDV 16:12, 8 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Kudos on this, and on your WoD work in general. :) BOZ (talk) 16:16, 8 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Victorian Age: Vampire/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: The Most Comfortable Chair (talk · contribs) 05:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hello. I will have the review shortly. Thank you. — The Most Comfortable Chair 05:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Text only character size of the article is "7631", as of this edit. — The lead should be condensed into two paragraphs per MOS:LEADLENGTH.
- Very well.--Alexandra^IDV 23:27, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Overview

"The Victorian Age: Vampire rulebook does not contain complete rules, and as such the game requires another rulebook from the series, such as Vampire: The Masquerade Revised Edition or Dark Ages: Vampire, to be played." — "to be played" hangs out a little awkwardly at the end. Consider removing it or writing it earlier, such as → "The Victorian Age: Vampire rulebook does not contain complete rules, and as such the game requires another rulebook from the series to be played, such as Vampire: The Masquerade Revised Edition or Dark Ages: Vampire."
- Cheers, this subtle change does make a big difference.--Alexandra^IDV 23:27, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"While the series until then had largely been written from an American perspective," → "While the series had largely been written from an American perspective until then," — Reads a bit more smoothly.
- Done.--Alexandra^IDV 23:27, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"form of 2003's Kindred of the Ebony Kingdom." → "form of Kindred of the Ebony Kingdom in 2003." — To make it sound more formal.
- Done.--Alexandra^IDV 23:27, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"social reform" — If there are any particular issues it focuses on, mention that instead.
- The source only says "social reform - both violent and diplomatic". I have incorporated this bit, but it doesn't mention specific issues.--Alexandra^IDV 23:27, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"supported it with two supplements." — Could their contents be mentioned briefly?
- They are mentioned in the table just below this paragraph - I feel it would be a little much to have it repeated that soon.--Alexandra^IDV 23:27, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Related media

"A trilogy of novelizations was written by Philippe Boulle, consisting of 2002's A Morbid Initiation and 2003's The Madness of Priests and The Wounded King." → "A trilogy of novelizations was written by Philippe Boulle, consisting of A Morbid Initiation (2002), The Madness of Priests and The Wounded King (2003)." or "A trilogy of novelizations was written by Philippe Boulle, consisting of A Morbid Initiation in 2002, and The Madness of Priests and The Wounded King in 2003."
- Done.--Alexandra^IDV 23:27, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

That should be all for now. It is compact and written well, and it should pass. Thank you. — The Most Comfortable Chair 18:38, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@The Most Comfortable Chair: Thank you for the review! I have implemented your suggestions, with one exception, which I left a comment for above.--Alexandra^IDV 23:29, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Final

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
The article is concise and flows really well. It is as interesting as the game, and meets the criteria. Thank you for all everyone's efforts! — The Most Comfortable Chair 03:30, 20 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]