Template:Did you know nominations/Mike Daniels (American football)

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The result was: promoted by Carabinieri (talk) 14:19, 24 May 2012 (UTC)

Mike Daniels (American football)

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... that Green Bay Packers rookie Mike Daniels was first noticed by the team a year before when they were looking at other defensive linemen?

Reviewed: Grrrrrrrrrrr!!

Created/expanded by Skater (talk). Self nom at 07:28, 21 May 2012 (UTC)

— Yeah, it's good to go. --Thine Antique Pen (talk • contributions) 07:33, 21 May 2012 (UTC)

That was quick!--SKATER ^{Is Back} 12:32, 21 May 2012 (UTC)

Heh. 5 mins. -- (tomtomn00 renamed, Thine Antique Pen (talk • contributions) 16:15, 21 May 2012 (UTC))

Hola, admins and DYK staff, not so fast. Don't promote this until it has been properly proofread, and the prose made more acceptable (two different things). That goes for the hook as well, which is a bit of a clunker. Drmies (talk) 00:58, 22 May 2012 (UTC)

Ill make the changes to it later when I actually have some sleep to go on.--SKATER ^{Is Back} 05:38, 22 May 2012 (UTC)

I've made some changes to the prose a litte bit, I think it reads a bit better now. As for the hook --SKATER ^{Is Back} 13:39, 22 May 2012 (UTC):

Alt1... that Mike Daniels, now a rookie for the Green Bay Packers, was first noticed by the team when they were scouting other Iowa linemen?

Thanks. But see my recent edits--I think you need to go over this with a very fine comb again. I noticed just now that there's a minor error in the very first sentence: see if you can find it. (Oh, note the comma I added to the hook.) And as you can see there were some issues with the citation from The Gazette (incorrect title, publisher, and the "news" template is more appropriate) and an ESPN citation (redundancy)--you should probably check all the citation templates. Sorry, but them's the shakes. See what you can do: my goal really isn't just to get you a nice DYK template on your talk page, but also to help you produce cleaner articles. After all, the DYK section on the front page, that's the window for our store. Good luck, Drmies (talk) 14:04, 22 May 2012 (UTC)

I understand and I appreciate your efforts. I wrote this in a night and I'm sure I missed more. I'll go over it shortly, thanks for the helpSKATER ^{Is Back} 14:25, 22 May 2012 (UTC)

Absolutely. Drop me a line if I can help. Drmies (talk) 18:36, 22 May 2012 (UTC)

I redid a large number of the citations with the proper templates. I think I found the error in the first sentance, but I'll let you see if I did :). Thank you for actually giving me a challenge to improve my article writing.--SKATER ^{Is Back} 13:25, 23 May 2012 (UTC)

Made a few more minor edits. Drmies (talk)

Thanks a bunch Drmies! See you around.--SKATER ^{Is Back} 19:46, 23 May 2012 (UTC)

Not if I get drafted first. Drmies (talk) 21:53, 23 May 2012 (UTC)