Template:Did you know nominations/Rohani Darus Danil

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: withdrawn by nominator, closed by Jeromi Mikhael (talk) 10:06, 2 August 2020 (UTC)

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Rohani Darus Danil

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  • ... that the first female mayor of Tebingtinggi, Rohani Darus Danil, refused to wear kebaya, the Indonesian traditional blouse-dress, and preferred wearing short-sleeved shirt like her male counterparts? Source: Rahmadhani, Wahyu (2016), Peranan Hj. Rohani Darus Danil terhadap Pembangunan Kota Tebing Tinggi (1990-2000) (in Indonesian), Medan: UNIMED, p. 45

Created by Jeromi Mikhael (talk). Self-nominated at 17:00, 30 June 2020 (UTC).

  • Comment: Is the source really needed? Because it's quite hard reading the DYK with the source. Jeromi Mikhael (talk) 17:03, 30 June 2020 (UTC)
    • Date fine, length ok. AGF on offline source and hook is just ok in length at 199 characters. QPQ not needed as this is their second nomination. No close paraphrasing. Good to go. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 08:34, 21 July 2020 (UTC)
  • Hi, I came by to promote this, and did a light edit for English grammar. I added a few tags where people's last names but not first names are mentioned. It's not clear what you mean by her "works". I also tagged the lead for not summarizing the key points of the article, per WP:LEAD. As for the hook, it is 199 characters long. Would you like to mention one or the other of the types of clothes she wore so the hook will be punchier? Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 00:23, 24 July 2020 (UTC)
  • Actually, the hook is 200 characters long, since shirt should be plural. Yoninah (talk) 00:26, 24 July 2020 (UTC)
I don't understand what should I do here. Jeromi Mikhael (talk) 13:26, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
  • @Jeromi Mikhael:
    1. Expand the lead by adding key points from the article. You could briefly mention her education, election as mayor, a couple of achievements, and nomination as governor.
    2. Use another word instead of "Works". Do you mean "Achievements"? "Activities"?
    3. Please shorten the hook.
  • Thanks, Yoninah (talk)
Why Rudini and Achyar in the article is tagged with who? Jeromi Mikhael (talk) 13:38, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
  • ALT1: ... that the first female mayor of Tebingtinggi, Rohani Darus Danil, refused to wear kebaya and preferred wearing short-sleeved shirts like her male counterparts? Source: Rahmadhani, Wahyu (2016), Peranan Hj. Rohani Darus Danil terhadap Pembangunan Kota Tebing Tinggi (1990-2000) (in Indonesian), Medan: UNIMED, p. 45
  • Thank you. Restoring tick for ALT1 per The C of E's review. Yoninah (talk) 09:29, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
I've been asked to pull the current hook from prep. A new hook is needed. "She was credited for doubling the per-capita income and the regional income in her term." from the lead certainly seems like it'd make a good basis for a new hook. The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 08:39, 2 August 2020 (UTC)
@The Squirrel Conspiracy and Yoninah: Thank you for your help and understanding. Jeromi Mikhael (talk) 10:06, 2 August 2020 (UTC)
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