User talk:ShivaniBhatt
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[edit]Nice work on your article. A few things you could improve
- "
It is also known as Poverty Related Diseases(PRDs).
" Alternative titles should be immediately after the main title, so something like "Diseases of poverty (also known as poverty related diseases)..." Don't capitalise terms that aren't proper nouns. - Make sure you copyedit your work. While you might have meant "the term" when you said "it is also known as", the reference there appears to be to diseases, which is plural. Be careful with potentially ambiguous constructions like that. You also left a space before the parentheses - it's a small thing, but typos make your work look much less professional.
- Wikipedia articles are about things, not terms, so you should rephrase the first sentence to talk about the thing, not the term.
- Make sure you're using the best sources available, and make sure that the source you're using actually supports the statement. For example, you use this source:
Loppie, Charlotte; Wien, Fred (2009). Health Inequalities and Social determinants of Aboriginal People's Health. National Collaborating Centre for Aboriginal Health.(Report). University of Victoria
. This a report issues by a body, so it probably hasn't gone through peer review. You should try and find a recent, peer-reviewed source. In addition, you're using a source about aboriginal peoples to make a general statement about poverty. As far as I can tell, the source doesn't talk about poverty outside of aboriginal people, so it might not be the best source to make statements about poverty broadly. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:57, 16 November 2018 (UTC)