Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Hal Block/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by SandyGeorgia 14:16, 24 April 2010 [1].

Hal Block[edit]

Nominator(s): BashBrannigan (talk) 01:14, 9 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured article because... This was a significant figure in early television history. However, while there was much material in newspapers and books about him, little had ever been collected together. This article presents a balanced view of this controversial figure. I was careful to verify everything with citations and to leave my own opinions out of it. BashBrannigan (talk) 01:14, 9 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments. ~~You have a link to a dab page, John Daly.~~ The external link to http://www.greatgildersleeve.net/ is dead, perhaps temporarily. Ucucha 01:20, 9 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed the Daly dab. The gildersleeve link was working a couple weeks ago so it could be temporary. However, I've added a second live link as a backup.BashBrannigan (talk) 01:33, 9 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. Ucucha 01:40, 9 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Gildersleeve link still not active after week. Removed and left backup link which is still live. BashBrannigan (talk) 04:30, 17 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

images three non-free images....no FU rationales Fasach Nua (talk) 22:56, 16 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

To be sure, I assume the three are the Follow the Girls poster, the USO logo and the Take it or Leave It poster? If necessary, they could be removed as it would still leave the article with 3 other images. BashBrannigan (talk) 01:51, 17 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Added FU rationale to Take It or Leave It poster.BashBrannigan (talk) 03:38, 17 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Added FU rationale to Follow the Girls poster.BashBrannigan (talk) 04:26, 17 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Removed USO logo. Non-essential to article and already an image for that section. BashBrannigan (talk) 00:18, 18 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: The article, presently classed as C, has been brought to FAC without undergoing any previous review, and in some respects appears to be unready. Here are some specific issues:-
- The brief lead section is not in accordance with WP:LEAD in that it does not summarise the whole article;
- The layout is odd for a biography, with (very brief) personal information squeezed into a short section at the end;

I found little about his personal life, either his childhood or adult relationships. He seemed to have a thing for the ladies, but was a lifelong bachelor. I found a couple items about relationships with women. They were too brief and in gossip columns, so I didn't include them. Besides, speaking for myself, I'm usually interested in a person's work life and not personal life. BashBrannigan (talk) 23:03, 19 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

- Direct speech is shown in italics, which is not WP style.

Removed the italics.BashBrannigan (talk) 23:03, 19 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

- After a quick glance, the prose looks reasonably good, but needs detailed checking. I saw several minor points, e.g. The New York Times written, unitalicised and unlinked, as "the New York Times"; wikilinks within quotations; a section title "Legacy of Hal Block" which breaches MOS by including the article name in a section title (in any event, the section hardly describes a "legacy"). These are examples. It probably needs a fresh pair of eyes to go through the whole prose.

Removed Block's name from section title. Leaving as Legacy and uncertain at the moment what else to call it.BashBrannigan (talk) 23:03, 19 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Work needed on alll of these points. Brianboulton (talk) 18:00, 19 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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