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The list was promoted by Matthewedwards 01:43, 10 May 2009 [1].

2009 WWE Draft[edit]

Nominator(s): Truco''
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I am nominating this for featured list because... after working on it for about a week, I feel that I have met the criteria for featured lists. This is in a way based on its predecessor FL, but not entirely. Unlike the other FL, this is set up a bit different and I hope it is more comprehensible. It was copyedit by Mattisse and Nikki (thanks alot), so hopefully only few mistakes are found. Happy reviewing. Note: I don't think stability will be an issue since the event is completely over now, and will not be affected heavily by future events.--Truco 01:55, 25 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Note: I, Truco, am taking a semi-leave from Wiki at the time I'm typing this. Any further comments will be addressed by members of WP:PW. Thanks!--Truco 03:30, 29 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from KV5
Comments from KV5
  • "The Draft took place on two days" - over two days
  • "the first day was televised lived" - televised live
  • "The Draft took place on two days: the first day was televised lived for three hours on April 13 on WWE's program Raw, on the USA Network in the United States[A1]; the second part, the "Supplemental Draft", was held on April 15 on the Internet, at WWE's official website." - this feels like a really long run-on. Though grammatically correct, aside from the comments above, it seems too lengthy with the colon and semicolon connecting. I might split out the broadcast devices into a seperate sentence. Example: The Draft took place over two days: the first day was televised live for three hours on April 13; the second part, the "Supplemental Draft", was held on April 15. The first day was broadcast on WWE's program Raw on the USA Network in the United States[A1], and the supplemental draft was available on the Internet, at WWE's official website.
  • "Twelve were made on television: Raw (five), SmackDown (four), and ECW (one). Twenty-four were made during the Supplemental Draft: SmackDown (10), Raw (nine), ECW (five)." - these sentences aren't grammatically correct. If you remove the parenthetical phrases, the sentences don't mean anything. Suggest Twelve selections were made on television; five were made by Raw, four by SmackDown, and one by ECW. and so forth.
  • "28 males (10 drafted on television) and 8 females (two drafted on television)" - all quantities here are comparable per MOS:NUM, so they should be alike
  • "Also during the Draft" - all of these events are during the draft. Additionally might be a better word here.
  • "resulting in Raw housing both Tag Team Championships." - I think hosting is a better word than housing
  • "night after Backlash (2009) (April 27th)." - Backlash should be piped, and April 27, not 27th.
  • "because they are not top rated programs," - change comma to semicolon.

Hope this helps. KV5 (Talk • Phils) 12:47, 25 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

  • Everything has been completed. Some of the grammar stuff resulted from the copyedit. The last statement in the AM section I did not include, I think another IP or user added it, but I sourced it with a blog from WWE Commentator Jim Ross, who is reliable as he works backstage and on WWE programming. Thanks for the review!--Truco 15:05, 25 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Additional comments (KV5)
  • "in the United States[A1]," - move footnote after punctuation
  • "and one by ECW.." - double punct
  • "All the draftees were wrestlers" - All of the draftees...
  • "Raw obtained the first overall pick in the Draft" - how? Were they otherwise un-entitled to it?
  • "Additionally ," - extra space

A good-looking list. KV5 (Talk • Phils) 15:58, 25 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

  • Done. Thanks so much for that.--Truco 16:16, 25 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Support from KV5 (Talk • Phils) 16:20, 25 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from Giants2008
Comments -
  • Would you mind linking legitimate to the appropriate page here? That comes off as an element of jargon that could use the further explanation that a link provides.
  • Background: "A Supplemental Draft was announced to be held on April 15." The "was announced to be held" part is a little awkward.
  • Changed to 'announced for'--Truco 02:50, 29 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Aftermath: "they carried their title over to their new brand." Should "title" be plural.
  • "two secondary championships switched brands for the first time in WWE's history." This could use a cite if it isn't in one of the general references.
  • Its verified by the history itself really, as WWE does not have a direct source stating so. Plus, the title has been on Raw since the original draft and its the first time it switches brands as a result, same for the women's titles.--Truco 02:50, 29 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the draft would not come into an effect until the after...". Remove "an" and "the".
  • Reworded statement.--Truco 02:50, 29 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support - Note that I made a sentence structure improvement myself before coming here. I was ready to support when I saw it, and figured it would be easy enough to fix it myself. Giants2008 (17-14) 02:22, 30 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support, all issues resolved. Dabomb87 (talk) 22:23, 8 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved issues, Dabomb87 (talk)
Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)
  • "and the Supplemental Draft was available on the Internet" So it's not available anymore?
    • No because its over now, the results are still available but thats different from what is stated in the context.--Truco 01:42, 6 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and split various tag teams."
  • "who was sidelined with a legitimate injury" I'd love it if you provided a brief explanation of "legitimate"—why depend on the link?
    • I added non-scripted, will that work?--Truco 01:42, 6 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Hyphens in the footnotes should be en dashes.
  • "top rated programs"-->top-rated programs Dabomb87 (talk) 02:06, 2 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    • I've gotten concern number 2, 4, and 5. The rest, I'll let someone take care of that. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 03:27, 3 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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  • Comment Would it be feasible to add embedded images in the tables? After all, a large portion of the wrestlers do have free images. -- Scorpion0422 21:08, 8 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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