Wikipedia:Peer review/Harry Potter fandom/archive2
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Harry Potter fandom[edit]
Just ready to send this off to WP:FAC. The only thing I could see that needs work (as mentioned in the last peer review) is that the end of the Roleplaying section needs references; however, I wonder if this is uncontroversial information. The thing is that most of it comes from forums and from playing the RPGs themselves, not a specific page with rules. Anyway, if anyone has any suggestions on how to cite it, as well as on the rest of the article, it'd be much appreciated. --Fbv65edel / ☑t / ☛c || 04:19, 7 May 2007 (UTC)
Comments from Guiltyspark[edit]
Done I don't like the way the passage in the middle of the intro talking about security measures on the books. In the intro, this needs only a passing reference. Consider replacing it with a slightly more detailed overview of the activities the fans take part in - mentioning cosplay, fan fiction etc
Done The intro passage to 'pottermania' has (in my opinion) far too many statistics.
Done In general, the structure could do with some work. Some paragraphs just don't seem to sit well under their headings.
- Overall, this is a nice article, very well referenced and with interesting pictures.
guiltyspark 12:24, 9 May 2007 (UTC)