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Nickelodeon (TV channel)

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I've listed this article for peer review because this may be reached to FA or GA status because it is one most popular teen and children's television channel including iCarly and SpongeBob SquarePants. Any comments are welcome here.

Thank for your time. Regards, JJ98 (Talk) 05:08, 3 June 2011 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for your interest in improving this article. I do not think it is anywhere near ready to pass as a GA, so here are some suggestions for improvement.

• A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow. Paramount Television Network is a FA and may be a useful model
• The disambiguation links finder in the toolbox on this page shows several dab links and circular redirects that need to be fixed - see here
• There are also at least two dead external links that need to be fixed
• Biggest problem I see is that there are many places that need references but do not have them. For example the second and fifth paragraphs of the Relaunch as Nickelodeon and national expansion (1979–1990) section do not have any refs and need them. Other paragraphs have a ref followed by one or more sentences that are not referenced - these sentences need refs too. The Movies and Nickelodeon Kids' Choice Awards sections have no refs at all. This would be cause for a quick fail at GAN or FAC
• My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
• Many of the references given are incomplete and do not have all the reuired data. Some Internet refs are just bare URLs, but they need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
• Make sure the sources used meet WP:RS - for example, what makes fredalan.org a reliable source?
• Make sure the See also links follow WP:See also - generally this is for links not already in the article
• Headers need to follow WP:HEAD
• Use of bold text needs to follow WP:ITALIC
• Language could use a copyedit in places - one example In 1990, Nickelodeon opened Nickelodeon Studios, a television studio/attraction at Universal Studios Florida in Orlando which many of its sitcoms and game shows were filmed and entered into a multimillion-dollar joint marketing agreement with international restaurant chain Pizza Hut, which provided Nickelodeon Magazine for free at participating Pizza Hut restaurants (which was put on hiatus for three years).[11] This is a run on sentence and should be split. It is also unclear what the antecednt of which is - what went on hiatus? When did the three years start?
• The article has many short (one or two sentence) paragraphs and sections which interrupt the narrative flow. WHere possible, these should be combined with others or perhaps expanded
• Focus on the article topic - Sister channels seems to go into way too much detail
• Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia:Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 14:59, 16 June 2011 (UTC)