Wikipedia:Peer review/Spain national football team/archive1
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I would to know what else can be done to make this article the best it possibly can be, and I would be incredibly greatful if someone could just give a couple of pointers on how to expand content etc. and any strong example articles/sections.
Thanks in advance! // Finns 15:39, 16 November 2010 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: The article appears to be complete or nearly so, but it's not possible to verify the information because so many of the claims lack in-line citations to reliable sources as defined by WP:V and WP:RS. The first thing to do would be to fix the sourcing problems. Here are a few more details about sourcing as well as some other suggestions.
- Although parts of the article meet the requirements of WP:V, many other parts do not because they lack sources. For example, the first five subsections of the "History" section are completely without sources. My rule of thumb is to include at least one source for every paragraph as well as sources for statistics, direct quotations, and unusual claims. If one source supports an entire paragraph, it should be placed right after the terminal period of the last sentence of the paragraph. Claims in tables as well as the main text need sources.
- Except for proper nouns and the first word, Wikipedia heads and subheads don't use capital letters for the words. Thus, "Early Years and the Effect of War" should be changed to "Early years and the effect of war". Ditto for the other heads and subheads.
- Most of the citations are incomplete. Citations to Internet sources should include author, title, publisher, date of publication, url, and date of most recent access, if all of those are known or can be found. It may be helpful to use the "cite" family of templates found at WP:CIT. If you use the templates (which you can practice with in your sandbox), don't mix the "cite" family with the "citation" family, which is also found at WP:CIT.
- In the "2010 FIFA World Cup winner" section, the images should be rearranged to avoid creating a text sandwich between images on opposite sides of the page. Since the section is not long enough to accommodate three images, you might have to delete one to avoid the text sandwich.
- It's often helpful to look at featured articles to see how other editors have handled similar topics. You will find featured articles about football at WP:FA#Sport and recreation.
Lead
- "Between November 2006 and June 2009 Spain went undefeated for a record-tying 35 consecutive matches before their loss to the United States, a record shared with Brazil, including a record 15-game winning streak and thus earning third place in the FIFA Confederations Cup." - Too complex. Suggestion: Between November 2006 and June 2009 Spain went undefeated for a record-tying 35 consecutive matches before losing to the United States. The record, shared with Brazil, included a 15-game winning streak and earned them third place in the FIFA Confederations Cup."
Other
- The tools at the top of this review page find two dead links in citations and one link in the text that goes to a disambiguation page rather than the intended target.
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 00:36, 30 November 2010 (UTC)