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Stegosaurus[edit]

After recent extensive remodelling by the Wikipedia:WikiProject Dinosaurs team, this article needs looking-over by someone unfamiliar with the subject, or at least by users willing to offer suggestions for improvement. --Firsfron of Ronchester 03:19, 16 August 2006 (UTC)

  • It is quite interesting but unbalanced - not enough on aspects other than the plates and far too much weight given to the popular culture section in comparison to the "technical" sections. Some more specific comments:
    • It could so with some images - there are plenty at wikimedia commons (some of which seem to have been in the old version).
    • Lead:The phrasing of the meaning of "Stegosaurus" is clunky - the explanation of the Greek is disconnected from English translation. It also differs slightly from the translation in the next section ("roof-lizard" v "roof(ed) lizard")

**Lead:"Stegosaurus is the State Dinosaur of Colorado." - trivia at best, I wouldn't put it in the lead(done)Cas Liber 02:32, 17 August 2006 (UTC)

    • Lead:The second section of the lead reads like "here are some dinosaur names but there are others as well". Try and work in a connection to Stegosaurus - did they share a habitat, compete for resources, was it a prey animal for some? (good point, working on this)Cas Liber 02:39, 17 August 2006 (UTC)
    • There is a lack of inline citations for a great many claims. I've added {{fact}} tags to some but there are a lot more needed (although there is considerable improvement from the state of the old article).
    • References should follow punctuation according the manual of style (I think I've moved most of those).
    • There are a lot of weasel phrases: "more recent", "probably" etc.
    • The second point in Plate arrangement looks out of place as it doesn't indicate the arrangement first (as the other 3 do).
Hope this helps. Yomanganitalk 13:01, 16 August 2006 (UTC)
It does indeed help Yomangani. Thanks. I will work on fixing these this afternoon (that is, unless someone from the group beats me to it). --Firsfron of Ronchester 18:14, 16 August 2006 (UTC)
  • Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ t 23:40, 16 August 2006 (UTC)
Thanks Andy. I'm pasting them here so we can work our way thru the list. --Firsfron of Ronchester 02:49, 17 August 2006 (UTC)

The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, and may or may not be accurate for the article in question.

   * Per WP:CONTEXT and WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.
   * Per WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.[9]
   * Please alphabetize the interlanguage links.[10]
   * There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
         o it has been
         o apparently
         o apparently
         o might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please strike this comment).[17]
   * Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
         o Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
   * Please provide citations for all of the [citation needed]s.
   * Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a. [16]

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, 71.251.36.207 19:25, 16 August 2006 (UTC)