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A user with 37,136 edits. Account created on 27 October 2003.
31 August 2024
- 04:2104:21, 31 August 2024 diff hist −2 Caroline Kennedy →Later childhood years: just say his name. His relationship to Caroline has already been mentioned.
- 04:2004:20, 31 August 2024 diff hist +7 Caroline Kennedy →Later childhood years: I'd argue that the "her" is somewhat ambiguous in the context of this sentence as written.
27 August 2024
- 16:3616:36, 27 August 2024 diff hist −28 Kamala Harris →Early life and career: "Surrounded the family" is an odd phrasing, sounding a bit like a hostage situation. The article does speak to their effect on the kids, but let's just state the facts in a neutral way.
- 16:3316:33, 27 August 2024 diff hist −1,113 Kamala Harris →Early life and education: Being bold and removing this WP:OR note & its editor note. There is evidence she speaks some French: https://www.latimes.com/politics/newsletter/2021-11-17/kamala-harris-france-reality-essential-politics https://x.com/grescoe/status/1815589789611196756 . And who is asking this question? It's WP:OR to have this here.
- 16:2416:24, 27 August 2024 diff hist +5 Kamala Harris →Early life and education: Not mandatory, but the preposition is doing a lot of lifting on its own with the level of detail that follows. Could be read by a skimmer as "to."
- 16:2216:22, 27 August 2024 diff hist −7 Kamala Harris →Early life and education: "rights activists" on its own is a fairly awkward phrase. By the 1970s, and based on source material, it's more neutral to call them activists rather than tying it to a more limited term like "rights".
- 16:2016:20, 27 August 2024 diff hist −2 Kamala Harris →Early life and education: "the" makes better sense again, as there's no direct referent for "their" anymore.
- 16:1816:18, 27 August 2024 diff hist −18 Kamala Harris →Early life and education: That didn't connect to anything, as there's no mention of 1971 in this section.
- 04:3804:38, 27 August 2024 diff hist 0 Highland Park parade shooting →Legal proceedings: copyedit current
26 August 2024
- 20:5720:57, 26 August 2024 diff hist 0 Kamala Harris →Attorney General of California (2011–2017): In a globally read encyclopedic article, there's no reason to use intra-California abbreviations and shorthand.
- 20:5220:52, 26 August 2024 diff hist −13 Kamala Harris →Early career: nothing at the link talks about a "skyrocketing" crime rate at that time, nor does the evidence support it: https://www.macrotrends.net/global-metrics/cities/us/ca/san-francisco/crime-rate-statistics
- 20:4620:46, 26 August 2024 diff hist +2 Kamala Harris →Early life and education
- 16:3416:34, 26 August 2024 diff hist 0 m Kamala Harris →Early life and education: Maybe this is a better word for it. Probably could use an "according to Harris" too.
- 16:3316:33, 26 August 2024 diff hist −19 Kamala Harris →Early life and education: "support group" (an organized one or just a group of friends, turns out it's the latter) and "critically influenced" are vague and unhelpful. I went back to the source, and this a neutral summary of what happened, at least as relayed by Harris herself. Feel free to reword, but please let's not use the former wording.
- 16:1916:19, 26 August 2024 diff hist 0 Kamala Harris →Early life and education: I still think this is quite awkward, but at least let's put the adverb in a better position.
- 16:1716:17, 26 August 2024 diff hist +1 m Brossard →Demographics
- 14:4614:46, 26 August 2024 diff hist +34 Keith Rabois →Personal life
- 12:1812:18, 26 August 2024 diff hist −1 Kamala Harris →Early life and education
- 12:1712:17, 26 August 2024 diff hist +26 Kamala Harris →Early life and education: Later than what?? There's no obvious nearby date reference, only an awkward statement about being "helped critically," whatever that means.
- 12:1412:14, 26 August 2024 diff hist +3 Kamala Harris →Early life and education: 'More specificity than this would be fine, but "then" is super unhelpful after a paragraph that takes us to the present day.
- 12:1112:11, 26 August 2024 diff hist −2 Kamala Harris →Early life and education
- 12:1012:10, 26 August 2024 diff hist 0 Kamala Harris →Early life and education: This is quite shockingly bad writing for such an important article. I trust it was recently added.
- 12:0912:09, 26 August 2024 diff hist +7 Kamala Harris →Early life and education: Urbana, Illinois is very conclusively not in the Upper Midwest
- 05:3605:36, 26 August 2024 diff hist −4 Satellite state No edit summary current
21 August 2024
- 14:0714:07, 21 August 2024 diff hist +55 Fiserv Forum →History
- 14:0514:05, 21 August 2024 diff hist −74 Fiserv Forum →History
19 August 2024
- 04:1504:15, 19 August 2024 diff hist +14 Touch of Grey →Legacy current Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit Advanced mobile edit
18 August 2024
- 17:3417:34, 18 August 2024 diff hist −146 1968 Democratic National Convention This is too broad and actually quite a shocking statement. Non-white minorities had certainly been "involved in voting" before this convention, despite restrictions in some places. The convention itself did not suddenly change this full stop. Rephrase in a more measured, nuanced way if you need to reinclude. Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit Advanced mobile edit
- 17:3117:31, 18 August 2024 diff hist +1 1968 Democratic National Convention No edit summary Tags: Mobile edit Mobile web edit Advanced mobile edit
- 06:0306:03, 18 August 2024 diff hist +1 m Ivanhoe, Minnesota No edit summary current
16 August 2024
- 18:4118:41, 16 August 2024 diff hist −9 List of United States presidential assassination attempts and plots I think this is a clearer description of what happened. The time involved does not warrant "subsequently." One could barely utter that word in the time we're talking about. Use name instead of "he" due to closer referents. →Donald Trump
15 August 2024
- 22:4622:46, 15 August 2024 diff hist +22 User talk:197.16.203.132 No edit summary current
- 22:4322:43, 15 August 2024 diff hist +104 User talk:197.16.203.132 →Your edit to Conrad Murray
- 22:4122:41, 15 August 2024 diff hist +216 N User talk:197.16.203.132 →Your edit to Conrad Murray: new section Tag: New topic
- 22:3822:38, 15 August 2024 diff hist 0 Conrad Murray Reverting evident vandalism. This was 2013 until recently, and it's the only year that makes sense in the chronology. I'll look for who vandalized it and report. current
- 22:2422:24, 15 August 2024 diff hist −1 Orania No edit summary
- 14:0314:03, 15 August 2024 diff hist +1 QB VII No edit summary current
- 13:5713:57, 15 August 2024 diff hist 0 Exodus (Uris novel) →Criticism: US spelling for US author current
- 13:5413:54, 15 August 2024 diff hist −3 Exodus (Uris novel) →The origins of Exodus
- 13:5313:53, 15 August 2024 diff hist −9 Exodus (Uris novel) →The origins of Exodus
- 13:5213:52, 15 August 2024 diff hist +45 Exodus (Uris novel) →The origins of Exodus: that was an odd way to describe what happened
- 13:4713:47, 15 August 2024 diff hist +4 QB VII →Plot
14 August 2024
13 August 2024
- 20:3620:36, 13 August 2024 diff hist −2 Kursk Oblast There's more than one!
- 20:3520:35, 13 August 2024 diff hist +13 Kursk Oblast No edit summary
- 20:3320:33, 13 August 2024 diff hist +10 Kursk Oblast Use English word used globally.
- 20:3120:31, 13 August 2024 diff hist 0 Kursk Oblast Again, been
- 20:3020:30, 13 August 2024 diff hist +4 Kursk Oblast No edit summary
- 20:3020:30, 13 August 2024 diff hist −2 Kursk Oblast →History: present tense, as is referring to current information
- 03:4703:47, 13 August 2024 diff hist +4 m List of 1980s American television episodes with LGBT themes →Episodes current