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Requests for Feedback

This page provides comments and constructive criticism about articles that you have drafted, created, or substantially changed. This is not a general help page. To seek assistance or ask a question, see Wikipedia:Questions. If you are seeking an outside opinion about a dispute, please follow the steps in Wikipedia:Dispute resolution. Please note that this page is patrolled by volunteer editors just like you and it may take several days to review your request.

Before you request feedback

There are certain things which come up again and again so it may help if you deal with them before requesting feedback: Does your article have reliable sources? These are important in terms of both verifiability and notability. Do you have a conflict of interest that may harm your ability to produce a neutral article? If you would like a beginner's guide to these sorts of issues, take a look at the article wizard. If you are unsure about how to edit Wikipedia articles, take a look at this tutorial. For a more general discussion of writing your first article, see "Your first article".

How to post a request

Place a Wikilink, with the title of the page inside [[ and ]] - for example, [[User:Example/Lipsum]] or [[Cats]] - in the box below. Click Click To Add Request In the new article, Write a brief summary of your work or what in particular you need help with, but do not post the whole article here. If you have rewritten an existing article, you may wish to provide a diff link from that article's history that shows your changes. Check regularly for responses to your request; they will most often be made here. ↓ Post your request using the box below. Replace "Untitled" with a wikilink to your article - e.g. [[User:Example/Lipsum]] or [[Cats]] ↓

After Receiving Feedback

Check back here often, as you will receive a response here. Respond to the feedback, either with a simple thank you, to ask for help with anything mentioned, or, after you've made some of the improvements, what they think of them. Consider helping out here in the future - anyone can read up on what articles should be like and provide constructive criticism.

Are you providing feedback?

Please consider notifying the user whose article you are providing feedback for by placing a message on their talk page, so they will be able to read it in a timely manner and reply if necessary. You can use.. {{Feedbackreply-sm}} A template asking the user to check back here and consider responding {{Feedbackreply-alt}} A more personal version of the first offering your help with developing, moving to mainspace, etc.

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Index of all requests for feedback

user :James W. von Brunn

How do I get user: James W. von Brunn on Wikipedia website. Also I have a letter from Professor Revilo Oliver pertaining to Willis Carto that I want to attach. ??????? James von Brunn (talk) 22:18, 10 May 2009 (UTC)

The first step I'd suggest is reading WP:My first article, which has lots of information on how to write an article, what to put in it, and what not to put in it. It's the first stop for anyone who wants to write an article. You could also try taking a look at articles about similar people to get ideas of what is and is not acceptable for a Wikipedia article.

However, there is one thing I'd like to point out- your username implies you are either this person or closely connected with them. In that case, I strongly suggest you read WP:COI, as you have a conflict of interest. If this is true, it may be best for you to request the article, rather than writing it yourself. You may also wish to read WP:Notability to see if this person should have an article (per Wikipedia guidelines). I hope this helps! --Alinnisawest,^{Dalek Empress} (extermination requests here) 00:33, 20 May 2009 (UTC)

Pentecostalism

I and a few other editors have substantially improved the article from the doctrinal point of view. However, the history sections are lacking and we haven't done much work there. I would like a review to give us a different perspective on what we should add, expand, remove, and/or rearrange. Thanks. Ltwin (talk) 04:27, 17 May 2009 (UTC)

I suggest that whenever you want a review for an article, you take it to peer review. There it will be listed along with other articles that people routinely stop by and review. Cheers. Mm40 (talk) 11:04, 24 May 2009 (UTC)

Adyar

I made some substantial edits to the page Adyar against the three problem areas - references, wikification, peacocking. I think I've kinda taken care of these. Can I get some feedback before I remove the tags? -SpacemanSpiff (talk) 02:02, 18 May 2009 (UTC)

You have taken care of all three things. Good work! And you did the right thing to remove the wikification and peacock tags. I am a little hesitant as to the removal of the unreferenced tag. Perhaps it would have been better to change it to a refimprove tag. Debresser (talk) 23:56, 20 May 2009 (UTC)

New Entry for Semantic Designs

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Clinternet/Semantic_Designs

I am trying to set up an entry for this company. I have started the page, but would appreciate suggestions on improving it so it is suitable for posting

-Clinternet —Preceding unsigned comment added by Clinternet (talk • contribs) 15:25, 21 May 2009 (UTC)

User:Dawn Bard already gave a good summary of what the problem is with the article on your talk page. The article lacks proof of notability. The only reference returns a "page not found". To improve the article, fix the reference link and add more references of independent and reliable sources that show the relevance of this company. There are some minor issues as well: don't hyperlink in the the text section of the article. The history section should be expanded. bamse (talk) 01:01, 26 May 2009 (UTC)

NA'AMAT USA

I am requesting that NA'AMAT USA be included in the list of Women's Organizations and Jewish Women's Organizations.

NA'AMAT USA is part of the internation movement which supports the work of NA'AMAT Israel, Israel's largest women's movement. It provides social services for women, youth, children and families in Israel including Jewish, Arab, and Druse citizens of Israel.

Services include Israel's largest network of day care centers, technological high schools for at-risk youth, women's centers, legal services and much more. The web site of NA'AMAT USA is www.naamat.org

Sylvia Lewis, National Vice President NA'AMAT USA —Preceding unsigned comment added by Syllewis1 (talk • contribs) 14:37, 25 May 2009 (UTC)

Cold distillation new page

Hi,

I'd like to add a page describing Cold distillation. I have drafted Cold distillation [1] as a user page. can i have some feedback on it before submitting to publish please?

Many thanks

Tom Jefferies —Preceding unsigned comment added by Tomjefferies (talk • contribs) 15:53, 27 May 2009 (UTC)

Please add references and wikilink the article. What is OXLEY gin? At the moment it is hard to say if "Cold distillation" is a commonly used term or just marketing. It is also not clear what the difference to vacuum distillation is. Maybe you could expand the article to explain the different stills. Don't wikilink section headings. The first sentence is a bit confusing: "...reduce the pressure to temperatures of between....". bamse (talk) 00:46, 28 May 2009 (UTC)

Nocturnes Op. 37 (Chopin)

This is an article about a pair of Chopin's nocturnes for piano. The article includes excerpts, summarys, the significance of these nocturnes, as well as quite a few other things.

After I started the article, many people significantly expanded it. I believe it is quite comprehensive now.

I am wondering if the B rating is appropriate. Also, how can this article be prepared for GA Assessment. Any improvements.

--Edward130603 (talk) 20:21, 27 May 2009 (UTC)

One way to see what the article needs for GA is to look at articles of the same kind that are already Good Articles. A categorized list of Good Articles is at Wikipedia:Good Articles. Best of luck. Diderot's dreams (talk) 01:39, 28 May 2009 (UTC)

Thanks, I will do that. Does anyone have any specific comments?--Edward130603 (talk) 19:17, 28 May 2009 (UTC)

Warren Cormier

Warren Cormier is the CEO of the National Association of Retirement Plan Participants. He is also the President of Boston Research Group (BRG), and Co-Founder of the RAND Behavioral Finance Forum.

Warren Cormier's research and professional experience is in qualitative and quantitative experience in financial services research for investment companies, banks and the insurance sector.

His work includes projects that focus on strategic marketing issues, market segmentation, product development, customer satisfaction, consumer learning, decision-making processes, distribution issues, competitive assessments and marketing communications.

Mr. Cormier's work covers a broad segment of the Defined Contribution Industry including the issues of plan providers, intermediaries, plan administrators and participants. Mr. Cormier is the creator of the DCP 2000-2009 plan sponsor satisfaction and market dynamics study. 401(k) record keepers representing 95% of all 401(k) assets and plans subscribe to BRG’s DCP study. DCP scores are requisite data for most DC industry plan provider search RFPs.

This is my first attempt at an article, any feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thanks.

National Association of Retirement Plan Participants - NARPP

The National Association of Retirement Plan Participants (NARPP), founded in 2009 is an advocacy Group that, according to its mission statement, has a goal to "help 401(k) plan participants make informed decisions about their retirement, to provide them with a platform for discussion, and to advocate on their behalf with employers, 401(k) plan providers and Washington policymakers."

NARPP functions as an independent association supported solely by members and does not sell any financial products or represent any financial institutions. NARPP has an advisory board containing a mix of industry, research and academics from behavioral economics

69.227.225.41 (talk) 17:09, 28 May 2009 (UTC) jackmartinb 69.227.225.41 (talk) 17:09, 28 May 2009 (UTC)

Introduction to quantum mechanics

I am earnestly seeking non-experts to assess a subject about which they probably know very little. There are two WP articles concerning quantum mechanics. One, Quantum mechanics, is designed to be a full exposition of the subject for those who wish to explore the topic at depth. The other, Introduction to quantum mechanics is, in the words of the WP:Hatnote, designed to "an accessible, non-technical introduction to the subject. For the main encyclopedia article, see Quantum mechanics." The present user, your obedient servant, rewrote the article in what to him was the spirit of its title and introduced it on 27 May 2009. It was reverted with the suggestion WP:BRD. You can see the difference between the older, longer, article and the new one here (you have to scroll all the way to the bottom). The comments of the entire Wikipedia community, not just physicists, are welcome, and indeed, sought. Yours sincerely, GeorgeLouis (talk) 16:53, 29 May 2009 (UTC)

Economic history of China

I've worked on this article for three months, bringing it from a stub(which I deleted) and brought it to the current status. I'd like some feedback on ways the article can be improved.(Note: This inquiry is limited to pre-1911). Teeninvestor (talk) 02:05, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

Frank D'Angelo

I've written Frank D'Angelo, and am interested in getting some feedback on what research I can do to make it better. Anything helps... this is my first page and I want to get into some good habits.

Alexthepuffin (talk) 16:32, 30 May 2009 (UTC)