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:Mostly nitpicks, by the looks of it. Very well done. — [[User:Crisco 1492|Crisco 1492]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]])
:Mostly nitpicks, by the looks of it. Very well done. — [[User:Crisco 1492|Crisco 1492]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]])
:''Some addressed comments moved to talk''
:''Some addressed comments moved to talk''
*'''Support''' on prose. Very good job; impressive safety record. — [[User:Crisco 1492|Crisco 1492]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]]) 14:39, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
*Suggest splitting the first few paragraphs of Vietname era to a new section (Pre-Vietnam era?)
**Good idea: done (Ian, does the heading look OK?) [[User:Nick-D|Nick-D]] ([[User talk:Nick-D|talk]]) 08:10, 7 July 2013 (UTC)
***I think it works. Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 10:06, 7 July 2013 (UTC)
*Standardise use of <nowiki>&nbsp;</nowiki> between No. and the squadron number/task force number
**I'll leave this to Ian as he knows what he's doing here [[User:Nick-D|Nick-D]] ([[User talk:Nick-D|talk]]) 08:10, 7 July 2013 (UTC)
***Think I've caught 'em all. Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 10:06, 7 July 2013 (UTC)
*More later.&nbsp;—&nbsp;[[User:Crisco 1492|Crisco 1492]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]]) 07:46, 7 July 2013 (UTC)
**Thanks for these comments - I have to own up to most of the issues being in sections of the article I wrote! [[User:Nick-D|Nick-D]] ([[User talk:Nick-D|talk]]) 08:10, 7 July 2013 (UTC)
***Tks Crisco for comments and Nick for actions. Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 10:06, 7 July 2013 (UTC)

*"International Air Aid" - Notable?
**I'd not heard of it before this, might leave to Nick. Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 06:55, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
***Yeah, notable - link added. [[User:Nick-D|Nick-D]] ([[User talk:Nick-D|talk]]) 10:39, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
*[[Boeing 707]] [[aerial refueling|tanker-transports]] - should be avoided, per [[WP:SEAOFBLUE]]
:*Even easier, aerial refueling is a duplicate link and can be removed easily.&nbsp;—&nbsp;[[User:Crisco 1492|Crisco 1492]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]]) 03:08, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
::*True, it was just suggested in an earlier review that "tanker" should be linked for the uninitiated... Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 06:55, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
*soldiers were subsequently embarked - or should it be soldiers subsequently embarked
**Latter looks okay to me. Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 06:55, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
***Done. Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 11:18, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
*Consider standardising linking of political bodies (you link some countries, i.e. East Timor, but don't link several states and major cities).
**In general I tend to link all city names, and states when used in isolation (i.e. "flew to [[Townsville]], Queensland" and "flew to [[Queensland]]"). I don't think countries need to be linked unless they're either obsolete (e.g. [[East Germany]]) or newish political entities (so [[East Timor]] seems fair enough). Anyway, we'll check the article over for consistency. Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 06:55, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
***Reviewed, think the links are consistent with the above-mentioned std now. Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 11:18, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
*deep maintenance - anything to link to (so we can see how it's different than regular maintenance)?
**Don't remember there being something to link to but I might be able to add some sort of brief description. Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 06:55, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
***If we used the term "heavy maintenance", would that be better? Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 11:18, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
****Good idea: I linked to [[Aircraft maintenance checks#D Check]] in the C-17 in Australian service article for the same thing, and have just done the same here. [[User:Nick-D|Nick-D]] ([[User talk:Nick-D|talk]]) 11:37, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
*Iraq War and recent operations - the paragraph immediately preceding this one has some information about Operation Slipper (i.e. the Iraq War). Should it be reorganised?
**Think that makes sense: Op Slipper sentence can certainly move to the next section, Bali Bombing one as well probably. Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 06:55, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
***I've just made this change [[User:Nick-D|Nick-D]] ([[User talk:Nick-D|talk]]) 10:39, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
*An American contractor travelling on an Australian C-130 in Iraq was killed on 27&nbsp;June 2004 when the aircraft was struck by gunfire shortly after it took off from Baghdad. - Is this the first combat fatality in an Australian Hercules? You don't seem to mention any earlier ones, or crashes
**Can't be sure this was the first fatality on an Australian Herc (unless one of Nick's sources has that) but definitely been no crashes. I thought we covered that by saying "accident-free flying hours" or words to that effect when each model was retired but perhaps we need to revisit that. I'm not sure if we have a recent source highlighting that no Herc of any model has had an accident, but we can check... Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 06:55, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
***No source Ian or I could find identifies any of the RAAF's C-130s as having suffered a significant accident (and I went looking for this). Ian and I discussed this during the article's development, and we also couldn't find anything which remarks specifically on the type's apparently excellent safety record in Australian service, so not much more can be said. No source stated that the death in 2004 was the first on the type - it seems likely that some soldiers being evacuated from Vietnam would have passed away in-flight given the types of aeromedical evacuation missions which were being conducted, but again no source confirms this. [[User:Nick-D|Nick-D]] ([[User talk:Nick-D|talk]]) 10:39, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
*Australian Government - I think this should be Australian government, as it's not a proper name, but rather a generic noun
**Not sure about this one, when we say "Australian Government" we usually mean the specific Federal one I think... Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 06:55, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
***The "Australian Government" is the common name for the national government these days. [[User:Nick-D|Nick-D]] ([[User talk:Nick-D|talk]]) 10:39, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
*Comprehensiveness: Number of crashes, accidents, incidents, and/or combat losses? Fatalities?
**Per earlier response -- they actually have a remarkable safety record, we'll just see if we've overlooked any recent source that spells it out. Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 06:55, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
*Duplicate links: aerial refueling, Operation Slipper
**See response above re. first, second we can definitely tweak. Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 06:55, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
***Op Slipper dup eliminated. Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 11:18, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
*Otherwise that looks to be it.&nbsp;—&nbsp;[[User:Crisco 1492|Crisco 1492]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]]) 02:26, 8 July 2013 (UTC)
**Tks again Crisco. Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 06:55, 8 July 2013 (UTC)

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Lockheed C-130 Hercules in Australian service (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)

Nominator(s): Nick-D (talk) and Ian Rose (talk) 02:42, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Nick and I have a long history of editing and reviewing each other's articles, but this is the first time we've actively collaborated. The idea developed spontaneously as I was expanding No. 86 Wing (long-time operator of the C-130) and Nick was working on Boeing C-17 Globemaster III in Australian service, which I reviewed at GAN. It occurred to us that a) there was an article on the C-130s' Australian service crying out to be written and b) we were just the blokes to write it, the subject and format being fresh in our minds! Anyway, this is the story of the RAAF's greatest workhorse, with a 50-year-plus history through four different models. It's recently been through GAN and MilHist A-Class Review, so have at it... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 02:42, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support on prose per new standard disclaimer. I've looked at the changes made since I reviewed this for A-class. - Dank (push to talk) 02:53, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Tks Dan. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 03:13, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks also from me. Nick-D (talk) 03:20, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Retrolord

Support Thanks, RetroLord 06:12, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  1. "The type" In the second sentence of the intro, why does it say that instead of "The aircraft" or something simpler?
    "Type" is common aviation terminology and was used as a variation on "aircraft", which we employed at the end of the previous sentence. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:29, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  2. " replacing its venerable" That seems extraodinarily subjective. Would you mind pointing out where in the article that is referenced?
    "Venerable" is used simply in the sense of "old" but I don't particularly mind losing it. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:29, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    The second sentence of the "Initial selection and purchase" section covers this: the Dakotas were a long-serving and highly successful type within the RAAF. Nick-D (talk) 06:37, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    Tks Nick, clean forgotten we mentioned that -- so I think we're covered for both the "old" and "respected" meanings of "venerable"... ;-) Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 07:09, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  3. "quantum leap" Could this perhaps be replaced with something more 'encyclopedic'? It just seems a bit out of place in a wikipedia FA
    Not sure how it's unencyclopedic. Elsewhere the source uses the term "quantum advance" to describe a similar leap forward in fighter technology; in this case we're talking three generations of capability in one bound. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:29, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  4. " In 1986, No. 37 Squadron transported the Popemobiles during John Paul II's tour of Australia; its other unusual cargoes have included a Murray Grey stud bull presented to the Chinese Government in 1973, kangaroos and sheep for Malaysia, and archaeological exhibits from China" I have a problem with this sentence. It really does seem like a list of strange things that have at one time been in a C-130, and reads like a trivia section. Is it really relevant to the article to mention this?
    Well I think it just illustrates the wide variety of cargo these planes have carried. However, I don't have a particular issue losing it unless Nick has another opinion. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:29, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    Published histories of the type's RAAF service consistently note these unusual missions, so I favour their inclusion. Bear in mind that carrying non-standard loads is a relatively complex task as it requires the aircrew to carefully consider how the plane should be loaded to ensure safety and good performance (this is largely done for them when carrying standard loads due to previous experience with that kind of cargo, or loading plans drawn up by the RAAF's air transport development units). Nick-D (talk) 06:37, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  5. " In April 2013 the Australian Government offered to sell five of the C-130Hs as well as spare parts and simulators to Indonesia at below their market value" Given we have mentioned this deal, was there any outcome?
    I'll have to leave this one to Nick. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:29, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    Updated slightly: the Indonesian Government has agreed to the deal, and the specifics are being negotiated. Nick-D (talk) 06:37, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Just some thoughts to consider RetroLord 06:09, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking the time to review! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:29, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Well I'm happy now that those points have been addressed. Oppose changed to Support. Have a nice day, RetroLord 06:50, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks again! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 07:09, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from John I agree that quantum was not the right word; among those in the know it means the smallest possible advance in something. Other words to watch on a FA include "additionally", "in addition", and "a number of". All in all it looks like a great article and I think I will support. --John (talk) 14:15, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • Tks for copyedit, John. I have no prob with any of the text changes except the "ones" seems to me a slightly unencyclopedic substitution for the second mention of "panels" in the same sentence -- I think in this case repetition of the word might be better. Also I think the detail in several of the images justified a somewhat larger size than normal (for consistency, we made it all of them) -- granted the fixed px size is not the best way to do it but we could use the upright parameter that allows for proportional sizing. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 02:21, 25 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - spotchecks not done

Image check - all OK (USGov, US Navy, own work, OTRS, PD-Australia, 1 fair-use). Sources and authors provided.

Prose comments from Crisco 1492

Mostly nitpicks, by the looks of it. Very well done. — Crisco 1492 (talk)
Some addressed comments moved to talk