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Revision of tone needed (reads like a children's book report)

First of all, thank you to the people who contributed so heavily to the content of this article.

While the article is easy to understand and fairly well organized, it reads much like a children's book report in format, and the tone is lacking in professionalism and maturity.

For example, the "Themes" section reads very much like a book report outline. In other places throughout the article, details and linear thought are difficult to follow or are unclear.

I am recommending/requesting a significant revision of this article to meet Wikipedia's standards. The contents do not need altering; instead, the style, voice and other minor grammatical elements require attention in order to make this article more professional-sounding.

In the near future I will make the necessary changes to meet the vision I've set forth for this article.

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 == Revision of tone needed (reads like a children's book report) ==
-First of all, thank you to the person who contributed so heavily to the content of this article.
+First of all, thank you to the people who contributed so heavily to the content of this article.
 While the article is easy to understand and fairly well organized, it reads much like a children's book report in format, and the tone is lacking in professionalism and maturity.