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Regards, '''<span style="font-size:75%;border:2px solid #EF2B2D;border-radius:50px;font-color:#00008b">[[User talk:Spintendo|<span style="color:#00008b;"> Spintendo </span>]]</span>''' 18:26, 24 January 2019 (UTC) |
Regards, '''<span style="font-size:75%;border:2px solid #EF2B2D;border-radius:50px;font-color:#00008b">[[User talk:Spintendo|<span style="color:#00008b;"> Spintendo </span>]]</span>''' 18:26, 24 January 2019 (UTC) |
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== Proposed revision to Political Contributions due to WP:NPOV violation == |
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''I work for Booz Allen's marketing and communications team. I would like to propose revisions to the Political Contributions section on the grounds that it currently violates [[Wikipedia:Neutral_point_of_view|WP:NPOV]]. '' |
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'''Current text''' |
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''Political contributions'' |
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In 2013 David Sirota of Salon said that Booz Allen and parent company The Carlyle Group make significant political contributions to the Democratic Party and the Republican Party as well as individual politicians, including Barack Obama and John McCain.[52] According to Maplight, a company that tracked campaign donations, Booz Allen gave a total of just over $87,000 to U.S. lawmakers from 2007 to June 2013.[53] Sirota concluded that "many of the politicians now publicly defending the surveillance state and slamming whistleblowers like Snowden have taken huge sums of money from these two firms", referring to Booz Allen and Carlyle, and that the political parties are "bankrolled by these firms".[52] |
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According to CNBC, these contributions resulted in a steady stream of government contracts, which puts Booz Allen in privileged position. Due to the company's important government services, “the government is unlikely to let the company go out of business. It's too connected to fail”.[54] Furthermore, the influence Booz Allen carries in Washington isn't restricted to donations, but to a large network of lobbyists and political insiders. According to government watchdog OpenSecrets, “4 out of 6 Booz Allen Hamilton lobbyists in 2015-2016 have previously held government jobs”. |
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'''How it violates NPOV''' |
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Both sources are biased, presenting the same argument that Booz Allen is buying influence through significant lobbying and political contributions. As a result, it puts undue weight on their opinions about the role lobbying and political contributions have on Booz Allen's business. |
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However, if you research the resource used by CNBC, [https://www.opensecrets.org/ OpenSecrets]—a database on lobbying and political contributions made by companies—you will find that Booz Allen does not spend very much money on these activities relative to not only competitors, but also top companies in other industries. |
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Between 2014 and 2018, here is a summary of political contributions and lobbying expenditures across competitors and top companies in other industries: |
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:Booz Allen: [https://www.opensecrets.org/lobby/clientsum.php?id=D000032046&year=2018 $1.23M] (lobbying) and [https://www.opensecrets.org/orgs/totals.php?id=D000032046&cycle=A $0.46M] (contributions) |
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:IBM: [https://www.opensecrets.org/lobby/clientsum.php?id=D000000720&year=2018 $22.88M] (lobbying) and [https://www.opensecrets.org/orgs/totals.php?id=D000000720&cycle=2018 $2,16M] (contributions) |
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:Accenture: [https://www.opensecrets.org/lobby/clientsum.php?id=D000000786&year=2018 $15.99M] (lobbying) and [https://www.opensecrets.org/orgs/totals.php?id=D000000786&cycle=2016 $3.38M] (contributions) |
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:Deloitte LLP: [https://www.opensecrets.org/lobby/clientsum.php?id=D000000131&year=2018 $9.47M] (lobbying) and [https://www.opensecrets.org/orgs/totals.php?id=D000000131&cycle=2018 $11.97M] (contributions) |
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:SAIC: [https://www.opensecrets.org/lobby/clientsum.php?id=D000067120&year=2018 $6.13M] (lobbying) and [https://www.opensecrets.org/orgs/totals.php?id=D000067120&cycle=2018 $1.35M] (contributions) |
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:Leidos: [https://www.opensecrets.org/lobby/clientsum.php?id=D000000369&year=2018 $4.13M] (lobbying) and [https://www.opensecrets.org/orgs/totals.php?id=D000000369&cycle=2016 $1.73M] (contributions) |
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:Lockheed Martin: [https://www.opensecrets.org/lobby/clientsum.php?id=D000000104&year=2018 $66.84M] (lobbying) and [https://www.opensecrets.org/orgs/totals.php?id=D000000104&cycle=2018 $13.51M] (contributions) |
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:Northrop Grumman: [https://www.opensecrets.org/lobby/clientsum.php?id=D000000170&year=2018 $59.32M] (lobbying) and [https://www.opensecrets.org/orgs/totals.php?id=D000000170&cycle=2018 $13.50M] (contributions) |
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:Walmart: [https://www.opensecrets.org/lobby/clientsum.php?id=D000000367&year=2018 $32.15M] (lobbying) and [https://www.opensecrets.org/orgs/totals.php?id=D000000367&cycle=2018 $7.07M] (contributions) |
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:Exxon Mobil: $55.92M (lobbying) and [https://www.opensecrets.org/orgs/totals.php?id=D000000129&cycle=2018 $5.79M] (contributions) |
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:Berkshire Hathaway: [https://www.opensecrets.org/lobby/clientsum.php?id=D000021757&year=2018 $32.86M] (lobbying) and [https://www.opensecrets.org/orgs/totals.php?id=D000021757&cycle=2018 $12.50M] (contributions) |
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:Apple: [https://www.opensecrets.org/lobby/clientsum.php?id=D000021754&year=2018 $25.53M] (lobbying) and [https://www.opensecrets.org/orgs/totals.php?id=D000021754&cycle=2018 $4.02M] (contributions) |
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I will also cite the following article which compares Booz Allen's investments in lobbying and political contributions to those of other federal contractors: |
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http://www.allgov.com/news/top-stories/big-lobbying-and-pac-spending-brought-federal-contractors-16-trillion-last-decade-160509?news=858786 |
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'''Proposed revision''' |
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''Political contributions'' |
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According to [https://www.opensecrets.org/ OpenSecrets], a company that tracks political donations and lobbying expenditures, Booz Allen gave a total of just nearly [https://www.opensecrets.org/orgs/totals.php?id=D000032046&cycle=A $458,000] to U.S. lawmakers and spent [https://www.opensecrets.org/lobby/clientsum.php?id=D000032046&year=2018 $1.23M] on lobbying activities from 2014 to June 2018. Four out of six Booz Allen Hamilton lobbyists in 2015-2016 had previously held government jobs. |
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[[User:Kemples|Kemples]] ([[User talk:Kemples|talk]]) 19:01, 24 January 2019 (UTC) |
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Page overhaul
I went ahead and did a bit of an overhaul of the page, as the sections didn't quite fit. I expanded the History section, which was lacking any information between 1940s and 1998, removed sections that were only one line long and added them into the main body of text and created a separate Controversies and Leaks section, since that made up such a large chunk of the article. I also added some more updated info about the current involvement in Saudi Arabia.
Since I'm very new at editing and this is something of a sensitive topic I would love to get feedback on the changes. - PraiseVivec (talk) 17:35, 5 November 2018 (UTC)
Proposed additions to Research and Publications section
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I work for Booz Allen's marketing and communications team. I would like to propose updates to the Research and Publications section:
Proposed additions
In 1958, Gordon Pehrson, deputy director of U.S. Navy Special Projects Office, and Bill Pocock of Booz Allen Hamilton developed the Program Evaluation and Review Technique (PERT).[1][2] In 1982, Booz Allen's Keith Oliver coined the term "supply chain management".[3]
In 2013, Booz Allen's Mark Herman, Stephanie Rivera, Steven Mills, and Michael Kim published the Field Guide to Data Science.[4] A second edition was published in 2015.[5] In 2017, Booz Allen's Josh Sullivan and Angela Zutavern published The Mathematical Corporation.[6]
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References
- ^ Barnett, William A. (2012). Getting it Wrong: How Faulty Monetary Statistics Undermine the Fed, the Financial System, and the Economy. The MIT Press. p. 69. ISBN 9780262516884.
- ^ Kleiner, Art (2004). Booz Allen Hamilton: Helping Clients Envision the Future. Greenwich Publishing Group. p. 36. ISBN 0944641644.
- ^ Karaffa, Ray (23 March 2012). "SCM30: What Can We Learn From Supply Chain Management Mistakes?".
- ^ Herman, Mark; Rivera, Stephanie; Mills, Steven; Kim, Michael (November 2013). The Field Guide to Data Science. Booz Allen Hamilton.
- ^ Williams, David (6 December 2015). "Data Science Roundup #11: Data Ethics, the Field Guide to Data Science, and Solving the Data Scientist Shortage".
- ^ Sullivan, Josh; Zutavern, Angela (6 June 2017). The Mathematical Corporation (Where Machine Intelligence and Human Ingenuity Achieve the Impossible). PublicAffairs. ISBN 9781610397889.
Proposed corrections to History section
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I work for Booz Allen's marketing and communications team. I would like to propose a correction to the History/Beginnings section:
CHANGE 1
Current text ...becoming a partnership called Booz, Fry, Allen & Hamilton in 1936, before Fry's departure in 1942 left it with the current name of Booz, Allen and Hamilton.
The issue with this text is that Booz Allen went through two name changes after Booz, Allen and Hamilton. The current legal name is actually Booz Allen Hamilton.
Proposed revision
...becoming a partnership called Booz, Fry, Allen & Hamilton in 1936. Fry's name was removed with his departure in 1942, and the name eventually evolved to its current name of Booz Allen Hamilton. [1]
CHANGE 2
Current text ...helping organize the National Football League in the 1960s.
The issue with this text is that Booz Allen did not organize the NFL. They were hired to assist with the merger
of the National and American Football Leagues, resulting in the creation of the first Super Bowl in the 1960s.
Proposed revision
...helping merge the National and American Football Leagues, leading to the first Super Bowl in 1967.[2]
Kemples (talk) 15:54, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
References
- ^ Kleiner, Art (2004-11-01). Booz Allen Hamilton: Helping Clients Envision the Future (PDF). Greenwich Publishing Group, Inc. p. 20. ISBN 0944641644.
- ^ Kleiner, Art (2004-11-01). Booz Allen Hamilton: Helping Clients Envision the Future (PDF). Greenwich Publishing Group, Inc. pp. 50–52. ISBN 0944641644.
Reply 24-JAN-2019
Edit request partially implemented
The "and" has been dropped.
As of the writing of this review reply, the term National Football League appears nowhere in the article.
Regards, Spintendo 18:26, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
Proposed revision to Political Contributions due to WP:NPOV violation
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I work for Booz Allen's marketing and communications team. I would like to propose revisions to the Political Contributions section on the grounds that it currently violates WP:NPOV.
Current text
Political contributions
In 2013 David Sirota of Salon said that Booz Allen and parent company The Carlyle Group make significant political contributions to the Democratic Party and the Republican Party as well as individual politicians, including Barack Obama and John McCain.[52] According to Maplight, a company that tracked campaign donations, Booz Allen gave a total of just over $87,000 to U.S. lawmakers from 2007 to June 2013.[53] Sirota concluded that "many of the politicians now publicly defending the surveillance state and slamming whistleblowers like Snowden have taken huge sums of money from these two firms", referring to Booz Allen and Carlyle, and that the political parties are "bankrolled by these firms".[52]
According to CNBC, these contributions resulted in a steady stream of government contracts, which puts Booz Allen in privileged position. Due to the company's important government services, “the government is unlikely to let the company go out of business. It's too connected to fail”.[54] Furthermore, the influence Booz Allen carries in Washington isn't restricted to donations, but to a large network of lobbyists and political insiders. According to government watchdog OpenSecrets, “4 out of 6 Booz Allen Hamilton lobbyists in 2015-2016 have previously held government jobs”.
How it violates NPOV
Both sources are biased, presenting the same argument that Booz Allen is buying influence through significant lobbying and political contributions. As a result, it puts undue weight on their opinions about the role lobbying and political contributions have on Booz Allen's business.
However, if you research the resource used by CNBC, OpenSecrets—a database on lobbying and political contributions made by companies—you will find that Booz Allen does not spend very much money on these activities relative to not only competitors, but also top companies in other industries.
Between 2014 and 2018, here is a summary of political contributions and lobbying expenditures across competitors and top companies in other industries:
- Booz Allen: $1.23M (lobbying) and $0.46M (contributions)
- IBM: $22.88M (lobbying) and $2,16M (contributions)
- Accenture: $15.99M (lobbying) and $3.38M (contributions)
- Deloitte LLP: $9.47M (lobbying) and $11.97M (contributions)
- SAIC: $6.13M (lobbying) and $1.35M (contributions)
- Leidos: $4.13M (lobbying) and $1.73M (contributions)
- Lockheed Martin: $66.84M (lobbying) and $13.51M (contributions)
- Northrop Grumman: $59.32M (lobbying) and $13.50M (contributions)
- Walmart: $32.15M (lobbying) and $7.07M (contributions)
- Exxon Mobil: $55.92M (lobbying) and $5.79M (contributions)
- Berkshire Hathaway: $32.86M (lobbying) and $12.50M (contributions)
- Apple: $25.53M (lobbying) and $4.02M (contributions)
I will also cite the following article which compares Booz Allen's investments in lobbying and political contributions to those of other federal contractors: http://www.allgov.com/news/top-stories/big-lobbying-and-pac-spending-brought-federal-contractors-16-trillion-last-decade-160509?news=858786
Proposed revision
Political contributions
According to OpenSecrets, a company that tracks political donations and lobbying expenditures, Booz Allen gave a total of just nearly $458,000 to U.S. lawmakers and spent $1.23M on lobbying activities from 2014 to June 2018. Four out of six Booz Allen Hamilton lobbyists in 2015-2016 had previously held government jobs.
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