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Too Much Information

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The summary of the short film is pretty good, but at one point I think we go into too much detail:

Donald pays to get his hair done. However, instead of giving him a haircut, it flips him over, removes his hat, and given his bottom a cut, wrapping his rear end in a towel, cutting off his tail feathers, cleaning his bill, coating his face with shoe polish, sifting through his bottom feathers, applying a wet towel to it, slapping his blackened face with a cloth, combing his bottom with a comb, making a gap through it, smoothing it out and finally, giving him a pig tail design.

I think this has too much details, which make it hard to understand what happens. How about the shorter and simpler:

Donald pays to get his hair done. However, he accidentally gets flipped over, so the machine washes and combs Donald's rear-end and applies shoe-polish to his head. For the final irony, the machine puts Donald's hat on his rear-end before releasing him, which as usual attracts the butler robot demanding "Your hat, sir!"

Nyh (talk)