Talk:Huangling Anticline
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Hello Lydia, I have some suggestions on making your page better:
1. May elaborate more on the origin/ formation of the Huangling Complex, as it is controversial, it is fun to know how the models explain this structure differently
2. References could be added into the section ‘The origin of the Haungling Complex’, so the work of the researchers is acknowledged and more complicated details could be obtained by readers who are interested.
3. May create your own graphics, which simplify some of the pictures presented here. Like the structural geology map, you may exclude the small-scale information to highlight the overall structural characteristics.
Keep it up!
Manngaa Jenny (talk) 07:33, 19 October 2016 (UTC)
Hey, the 3 suggestions are:
- Add brief description of the strata from the Geology of Neoproterozoic to Jurassic sedimentary rocks section just like you did on the one above.
- Add bold characters for your name of title on the introduction. Most Wikipedia page bold their title name in the introduction as well.
- Link certain key phrases on your article to other wikipedia pages.
Perry — Preceding unsigned comment added by 11lawpt1 (talk • contribs) 08:51, 21 October 2016 (UTC)
Hi Lydia, I hope the following suggestions could help making your page a better one
- It would be better if you can link some key phrases on your article to other wikipedia pages. For example, you can link Yangtze block to the page yangtze plate.
- You've mentioned three evolutionary models in the section 'the origin of Huangling complex'. I think you could indicate which model is more well-developed and explain briefly with a paragraph under the model.
- I think you've made a spelling mistake in the title of 'origin huangling complex'. It should be huangling instead of haungling:D
- I think that the the sections 'geology of Archean to Paleoproterozoic metamorphic rocks' and 'geology of Neoproterozoic to Jurassic sedimentary rocks' could be merged into one section as they both are explaining the geology of huangling complex. And then you can subdivide the section into metamorphic rocks and sedimentary rocks.
Robertalau951228 (talk) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Robertalau1228 (talk • contribs) 06:25, 23 October 2016 (UTC)
Review from Jeffrey
Hello Lydia, your topic is quite interesting and i think it can be improved by the following ways:
1) Grammar and sentence structure - I dont really care about minor grammatical mistakes, but here i found there are plenty of them and those mistakes really hinter my understanding of the article. For exmaple, in the first paragraph, "It is an asymmetrical anticline dome-shape with Archean metamorphic core in N-S direction", do you asymmetrical dome-shaped anticline with fold axis along N-S direction or the metamorphic cor is dome-shaped? Also in first paragraph, " Non-conformity between the metamorphic basement and Cretaceous Neoproterozoic to Jurassic sedimentary rocks lying around the core", so where is the non-conformity? which units are you referring to, Cretaceous or Neoproterozoic to Jurassic?
2) In your 2nd figure, the black lines seem to represent both boundary between different geological suites and faults, which sometimes make readers confuse about which one is a fault and which one is not a fault.
3) Diagrams - - While I saw that there are some figures about different models for the formation of Huangling massif, I strongly encourage you to add one or several schematic cross-sections to illustrate the dome-shaped structure and stratigraphy at the start of your article. It is really really hard to understand the spatial distribution of different geological units, such as the basement rock, location of non-conformity and the shape of the core (a simple cross-section without explanation on the formation process will do). Also, you may also consider drawing out the location of the basins (Zugui, Dangyang Basins) on your existing map of Huangling complex geological map (2nd diagram) to enhance understanding of the reader. This problem is obvious when readers cant really understand what you mean in your words(1st problem) and try to find a graphic representation of it.
Hope that you can improve your articles. Cheers! Jeffrey. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jeffreyfung (talk • contribs) 07:59, 20 November 2016 (UTC)
Suggestions from Beth
Hi Lydia, I think your page is good and well structured in order of time making it easy to follow. It is difficult to know what needs explaining and what can be expected that the reader knows. In a few cases I think you need to explain things more but this is difficult to know what is the best level. Here are some things that I think will improve your page.
1. Some repetition of words, incorrect sentences and changes to capital letters could make your page easier to read. Some suggestions are: 1) in the first sentence ‘is located at’, shouldn’t it be ‘within’ or ‘is part of’ instead of ‘at’ because the Yangtze Block is a defined area not a place; 2) where it says ‘distributed in’ shouldn’t that say distributed ‘across’ or ‘covers’; 3) there is a lot of repetition of ‘lies’ in the opening paragraph. You could change these to ‘is found’ or ‘can be seen’ etc. so it changes the words but still has the same meaning; 4) a few sentences are not complete, eg. “Cretaceous fluvial deposits lying on the surface”, if you copy it into word it will underline these in green and 5) should massif in ‘Huangling massif’ have a capital?
2. Although you have put in links to other Wikipedia page, sometimes I think it would be better if you put in a small description too so the reader can have it explained as they read your page. Here are some that I think you should look at: 1) add in a short sentence outlining what zircon dating is (or provide an appropriate link for this one). 2) Snowball Earth may need a small description in the text just to outline what it was. This sentence does not make sense either, maybe if you say ‘depositing’ or ‘which resulted in deposition of’ then it would read better. 3) For the 'Late Mesozoic eastern Eurasia extension' section I think you could put more description into the deformation strata sentence. Possibly break up the sentence, as it is difficult to follow if you are not as familiar with the terms used such as deformed strata, growth strata, grabens and horsts.
3. On your diagram of the Huangling Stratigraphy I think it would be better if you put the legend in order of time. So the TTG gneisses at the bottom, then the granitoids then carbonates and shales on the top.
Just things that will make it read better, other than that I think its great. Thanks, Beth — Preceding unsigned comment added by EHitchcock (talk • contribs) 03:47, 21 November 2016 (UTC)
Review from Jup :D
Your page is really good and very easy to follow! :D Here are some minor suggestions:
1. I am not sure if you are fitting the diagrams and text on mobile vision or not. I read your page on my desktop screen ,and found that the diagrams are very small and the words on the diagrams cannot be read clearly. You may want to enlarge them.
2. For the "Huangling Stratigraphy", as Beth mentioned , you may want to add the order of time to it so readers can relate that to your text. If you don't want to amend the stratigraphic diagram, you may also make a simplified diagram with geological time and corresponding formations.
3. it is just a very minor suggestion (as I cannot think of any more useful suggestions D:). You may want to put your diagram in the table to the middle and you can also want to hide your frame of the diagram, using the advance setting in the "edit" of your diagrams.
jupmira104 (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 17:42, 21 November 2016 (UTC)
Review from Skylar
The article provides lots of information and illustrations, which are attracting. But I am not quite interested in knowing regional geology of places, sorry. Some are some suggestions for the article.
1. The topic of this article is Hungling Complex, but the lead is descripting Huangling anticline. Is it equivalent or something else? The lead is quite unclear with too many names of the units suddenly poped up. I recommend splitting the paragraph even for the short size. Inserting cross-sections may help readers vistualise the locations of all the units.
2. Better perform a grammar check. Some of the sentence is quite lengthy because of the names and it may cause misunderstanding. Using semi-colons to seperate each unit may help. And what does 'Cretaceous Neoproterozoic' means?
3. Some of the evidence and interpretations are not referenced. Betther provide citation right after each of them are presented for readers to follow the topic in the future.
4. Further explanation or wiki links should be added for terms like Snowball Earth. And 'The oldest zircon in trondhjemitic gneiss in Kongling Complex was dated to be 3.3 Ga in the Archean Era.' may make reader misunderstand what is zircon. One of tha alternatives is 'gneiss is dated with zircon dating...'
5. Nice and comprehensive stratigraphic colume, but I suggust enlarging the image for better look. Also for other images.
6. Few explanation and evidence are provided for the models. May compare them in terms of paleoenvironment and geological activities.