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References and periods again

I know I didn't follow all the discussion about this earlier, but why do some authors have periods after their names and others have the periods after the date? Examples:

Londré, Felicia Hardison. (1997)

Churchill, Reginald Charles (1958).

Tom Reedy (talk) 06:21, 13 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Alas, this is another unwanted side effect of using this kind of template, along with fixing other kinds of problems in some instances. If we want consistency here, we might have to give up trying to fix those other problems and settle for "Publisher. pp. 256–7" and that kind of thing. As I said, even with my fixes, the solution is not perfect, and you have just found one of the imperfections. This is one reason why I prefer other styles of listing references. Not that I think we should change to a different style at this late stage, but, well, just mentioning it. I'm thinking now that I might be able to figure out another way of handling cases where page ranges are mentioned; but I wouldn't be surprised if that causes some other problem. Getting late here, but I can look into it tomorrow. --Alan W (talk) 06:39, 13 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The choice and use of citation templates is a daunting subject. Here I will be thinking out loud as I try to learn more about this and consider how we can use this knowledge to our advantage. The following should not be considered as any kind of final, formal proposal.

The major problems I've seen in reference formatting come with references to chapters of books. Ideally, I would like to see (to take Bate 2002 as an example) something that looks like this (following the example in WP:Citing_sources/example_style#Books):

  • Bate, Jonathan (2002). "Scenes from the Birth of a Myth". In Stephanie Nolen (Ed.), Shakespeare's Face: Unraveling the Legend and History of Shakespeare's Mysterious Portrait, pp. 103–25. Free Press. ISBN 9780743249324

But this older form of referencing lacks some advantages that come from using templates. I see that we are using the Harvard style. The way Bate 2002 originally looked with that kind of template was:

  • Bate, Jonathan (2002). "Scenes from the Birth of a Myth". In Nolen, Stephanie (ed.). Shakespeare's Face: Unraveling the Legend and History of Shakespeare's Mysterious Portrait. Free Press. pp. 103–25. ISBN 9780743249324. {{cite book}}: External link in |chapterurl= (help); Invalid |ref=harv (help); Unknown parameter |chapterurl= ignored (|chapter-url= suggested) (help)

This is where the "Free Press. pp. 103–25." problem comes in. In order to eliminate it, I attempted to use the option whereby one may control punctuation between elements:

  • Bate, Jonathan. (2002). "Scenes from the Birth of a Myth.". In Nolen, Stephanie. (ed.). Shakespeare's Face: Unraveling the Legend and History of Shakespeare's Mysterious Portrait. Free Press,. pp. 103–25. ISBN 9780743249324. {{cite book}}: Cite has empty unknown parameter: |separator= (help); External link in |chapterurl= (help); Invalid |ref=harv (help); Unknown parameter |chapterurl= ignored (|chapter-url= suggested) (help)CS1 maint: extra punctuation (link)

Even though we now have the more desirable "Free Press, pp. 103–25." this method, as Tom has observed, creates a new problem: it moves the full stops to unwanted places, inconsistent with the formatting in other references.

Another thing I haven't yet mentioned is that I do not like the way this template organizes its elements, in particular that it appends page numbers to the publisher. I would much prefer that page numbers follow the title of the book, as in the manually formatted first example above. It certainly seems more logical that way, as well as following traditional bibliographical practice.

I tried another trick with the template, to try to force the coupling of title and page numbers, and this was the result:

  • Bate, Jonathan (2002). "Scenes from the Birth of a Myth". In Nolen, Stephanie (ed.). Shakespeare's Face: Unraveling the Legend and History of Shakespeare's Mysterious Portrait, pp. 103–25. Free Press. ISBN 9780743249324. {{cite book}}: External link in |chapterurl= (help); Invalid |ref=harv (help); Unknown parameter |chapterurl= ignored (|chapter-url= suggested) (help)

Clearly not right at all: now "pp. 103–25" appears in italics! On the assumption that long ago this article advanced past the point of no return with the Harvard template (and I'll grant the advantage it gives in linking from footnote to reference), I would suggest that now we are faced with choosing either the strictest observance of the template format, which would give us "Publisher. pp. 35–8."; or the occasional modification that would give us "Publisher, pp. 35–8." but also "Bate, Jonathan. (2002)" instead of the more consistent "Bate, Jonathan (2002)."

That's as far as I've thought the matter through right now. Any comments, of course, are welcome. --Alan W (talk) 03:08, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Are there any source templates that are problem-free? Or are the problems just different? Also it doesn't appear that the William Shakespeare article has those problems, in spite if its use of harvard nb template. It uses a loc= field for a lot of the data. Tom Reedy (talk) 04:05, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Tom, whatever problems with the references on the Shakespeare page, they do not include the one we have been focusing on, involving page sequences for portions of books, simply because somewhere along the line the community of editors decided not to give page sequences for books. See, for example, Bryant (1998). It's easy enough to avoid a problem if you avoid doing the thing that triggers the problem. Obviously, however, a certain flexibility is lost. --Alan W (talk) 05:41, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Are we looking at the same article? Cos the one I'm looking at has many refs with page sequences of books, beginning with Bevington and ending with Bloom. One other thing I noticed is that their reference entries don't end with "ref=harv", in addition to their cites using "loc=3" instead of "p=3". Tom Reedy (talk) 12:55, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
While we would have to be nuts to consider changing from harvnb at this stage, I am happy to look at whether such a change could be semi automated so required changes would at least be reliably made. Accordingly, if anyone has a suggestion for a better citation system, let them speak now...
Charles Darwin is one featured article I am aware of that uses harvnb, and it has the "Publisher. pp." problem (period following publisher's name, then lowercase "pp"). I do not think there were any other problems?
Assuming there is not some problem-free citation system available, I am thinking we should go back to "vanilla" citations (and accept a period before "pp"). For one thing, my earlier comment about fragility applies because I was looking through the wikitext of the references section of the SAQ and Darwin articles, and I saw some titles in the Darwin article which mistakenly have a period at the end (it gives a double period in the article). Then I noticed some titles in SAQ which also finish with a period, and I was thinking I would have to delete them when I realized they were part of the customizations. We need to make a decision on this soon. Johnuniq (talk) 07:11, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I agree the refs need to be formatted properly according to the style and accepting whatever problems go along with it rather than introducing new ones. Once that is done, I suggest doing a mass find/replace with "loc=(page numbers)" replacing "p=(pages number)" and "pp=(page numbers) in each cite and deleting the ultimate "ref-harv" from each reference entry and seeing what happens. As I pointed out above, the William Shakespeare article does not have any problems of the nature this article is experiencing. Tom Reedy (talk) 13:01, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I'm to blame! I adopted it in my draft because it worked snazzily on several articles I wrote, after a suggestion by the Nabster there. One would think, after all these years, that wiki had some policy on this (I don't read policy pages), re optimal citational format, with a ready-to-copy and paste standard template. In any case, I agree with Tom's larger vision that this article was to clean up a messy corner of the Shakespeare articles, resolve the chronic seepage of POV from this area into the broader field of Shakespeare articles, and, as a natural corollary, one would think that, now this issue has been settled, we should aim for an informal agreement to use, from here on in, any standard template that generates the fewest problems, and the Shakespeare article seems, for the moment, to fit the bill. Field consistency should be an ideal we all underwrite. Nishidani (talk) 16:06, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
The |loc and |ref=harv bits are red herrings; the material difference is that William Shakespeare uses the generic {{Citation}} template (that Tom/Nish originally used) rather than the specific {{Cite book}} and {{Cite journal}} etc. templates (that I added while working on the refs) in use on this article. The reason it appears to not have the same formatting issues is because it is a “dumb” (generic) template: it doesn't know what kind of work it's citing, and so it can't apply work-specific formatting, opting instead to just tack on commas between each parameter (this is an over-simplification, but covers the gist). If we decide this is preferable to the original issues Alan noticed then switching this article to use that template is a fairly trivial mechanical transformation (either I or John can do that easily).
However, I will take the opportunity to restate my opinion that we should just live with the (original) minor formatting issues and stop trying to find workarounds in this article when the issues are better addressed centrally in the template to the benefit of all articles that use it. While I sympathize with Alan's being irked by the unconventional use of capitalization and punctuation in the current output (I'm the same way with these things), the issue is a marginal one; is not critical for FAC; and is better addressed elsewhere. --Xover (talk) 21:22, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
1. What is the advantage of using the specific template over the generic?
2. Is any effort being made to address the issues in the specific template that you know of?
3. If it's a relatively simple matter to convert to the problem-free template, wouldn't it be just as simple to convert back when and if the problems are solved, assuming there are benefits to doing so? Tom Reedy (talk) 22:41, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Whoa! Tom, all—a little misunderstanding about six paragraphs up has snowballed into a sweeping plan to make mass substitutions and possibly change citation templates. Tom, you asked if we were looking at the same article. Well, yes; but we were not looking at the same part of the article. What we call "References", the Shakespeare article calls "Bibliography". And what we call "Footnotes" the Shakespeare article calls "References" (breaking out more substantive footnotes into another section called "Notes", which is another legitimate way of doing things). I am talking about their "Bibliography", which corresponds to our "References". And their Bibliography does not include page numbers for portions of books; ours does. Please look again.

I think that Xover is right about not giving up the Harvard template so fast. The generic template in my opinion (again, agreeing with Xover) is even less satisfactory in its blanket use of comma separators, in ways that don't make sense (e.g., "in deGrazia, Margreta; Wells, Stanley, The Cambridge Companion to Shakespeare,"; if a semicolon separates the coauthors, I would think we need a stronger separator than a comma to separate the second author from the title).

We may do well to live with "Publisher. pp." Though it goes against the grain with me, it does seem like the best compromise right now. As I've said, I much prefer conforming to standard bibliographical formatting and punctuation; but that would require formatting manually, using no template at all. Though also acceptable (and I've seen FAs that do this), I have to agree with what I gather is the consensus that we are too far along and have invested too much in these templates to give them up at this late stage.

I'll remind us, though, that if we want to use the Harvard template in the most proper way, we will also have to live with a few doubled periods, such as pointed out by Nikkimaria. (E.g., "In White, Paul W.; Westfall, Suzanne R.. Shakespeare and Theatrical Patronage in Early Modern England.)

Finally, If anyone still wants to experiment with different templates or usage of templates, I suggest posting a few examples here, as I did above, rather than immediately performing a programmatic mass find-and-replace operation. --Alan W (talk) 03:55, 15 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I favor using {{Cite book}} as it is the "correct" template for books and its problems should be fixed at the template, and while the glitches are irritating, they have minimal impact on the article text (I think the problem is "Publisher. pp" and some doubled periods, and those problems do not occur in the body of the article?). For interest, I will mention that while hunting around for info, I found this discussion where a couple of people strongly express the view that they (and articles) are better off without citation templates. Johnuniq (talk) 04:31, 15 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Those editors in that discussion you refer to make a lot of good points; look how much time is consumed on something as trivial as the citation apparatus, both there and here. To be perfectly honest, I prefer merely "Author, title of work, title of book or journal if needed, year, and page numbers". With those four or five bits of data anybody can find any source in the world. I think a lot of information is being added simply because it can be, not because it needs to be, and I believe Wikipedia prefers the more data-dense method in an attempt to overcome its inferiority complex. Oddly enough, Oxford publications require only those bits of data I outlined above for sourcing.
Having said that, I realise that the citation apparatus for this article is not going to change to suit me, nor would I want it to at this late stage, but I would prefer a style that favours the reader over the format. To me, neutral, verifiable content is more important than how its cited or how that cite looks to a machine reader. Tom Reedy (talk) 04:53, 15 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
So I guess what I'm saying is that I'll go along with whatever you guys decide! Tom Reedy (talk) 04:58, 15 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Johnuniq, thanks for the heads-up about that discussion on the Citing sources/example style talk page. Very relevant, and it seems to be very much a current discussion. I have now posted my own comments there, describing the issues we are debating here. That way others will be made aware of some problems that can occur with specific needs when using the {{Cite book}} template for a bibliography in an article on a literary topic. I can fully understand why some would now be arguing against use of templates. I've already stated my objections, so I won't repeat them, but I'll add that I agree that we should stick with this template now that we have invested so much time and energy in it. No, it won't have any effect on the article itself that I am aware of. And, as Xover says, it shouldn't be an impediment to, and might even help getting to, FA status. One beauty of Wikipedia is that nothing is carved in stone. Perhaps at a later time, some solution to our bibliographical problems will be found. --Alan W (talk) 04:19, 16 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I read your comment and am now watching the page, although it looks to be a difficult problem with no trouble-free solution.
What will we do in this article? We have to finalize this very soon.
If there is currently a problem in the article body that would be solved by returning to vanilla citations (i.e. remove "separator" and the other tweaks performed by Alan), I think that would be best. Final opinions please!
@Alan: Are you saying we should restore vanilla citations (if so, do you want to do that?), or do you want to stay with the current customizations? Johnuniq (talk) 06:40, 16 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
We might want to restore vanilla citations within the {{Cite book}} template, but we don't have to do this immediately. I got a response on that template talk page, and that user has posted something on the page where the template programmers will see it. It is possible that someone will be able to give us the appearance we want, even with the plain-vanilla citations, and then of course we should restore those. I should be able to do that easily enough, since I have kept an offline record of the changes I made. If you think that, regardless, we should revert to vanilla now, please say the word and I will do so at my earliest convenience. I'll say that I agree with you that this problem does not look easy to solve. CharlesGillingham might be a bit too cheerfully optimistic about this. --Alan W (talk) 00:38, 17 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
OK, I am watching the discussion with interest, but I am similarly skeptical about a fix coming any time soon (mainly because of the possibility of messing up lots of articles by even the simplest change to the template). By all means let's wait for a day or even two, but we should aim to achieve article stability very soon. My understanding is that it would be highly desirable for there to be only minor editing for a significant period before presenting the article for FAC, and I think it would be useful to finish known issues ASAP, and I'm hoping you will restore the vanilla citations soon, assuming nothing turns up re cite book. Johnuniq (talk) 10:04, 17 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
That sounds reasonable. I just answered another posting on that talk page, and it looks like the debate could go on a long time before anyone even makes an attempt to change the parsing and display of the template. Also, I'm thinking now that those working on templates are probably not familiar with standard punctuation in literary biographies. These templates are a "one size fits all" approach, which doesn't entirely work, as different fields of study have different requirements and traditional practices. I hope to be able to clean up the templates ("clean up" from a purist perspective, where we should not have any punctuation in the template fields unless the punctuation is actually part of someone's, or some work's, name) at the latest over the weekend, and I may be able to get to it sooner than that. --Alan W (talk) 03:22, 18 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Well, I ended up doing this now, after all. When I looked through the records I kept, and checked a diff or two as well, it didn't seem as daunting a task as I had expected. I don't think I missed anything. If I did, one of us will catch it. Now I can focus on other things, including reading through the article at least one final time. --Alan W (talk) 04:05, 18 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, that's great. It looks like some generic conversations are going to occur, without much progress. Perhaps later if you feel like it we could examine the issue some more (currently I have only looked at it superficially). We could even consider making our own "Cite book2" template at least as a trial to see what is involved (then we could fiddle without worrying about breaking other articles). That would be a month or two after FA! Meanwhile, a last read through would be helpful (but the image problem discussed elsewhere on this page remains). Johnuniq (talk) 06:59, 18 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
That is a good idea, about making our own "Cite book2" template. Maybe Xover, who seems to know a lot about that kind of thing, could provide some input as well. And I see from your user page that you're like a fish in water in this area. Despite all the computer- and programming-related matters I deal with in my current day job, I have not hitherto involved myself in this aspect of Wikipedia at all, but I would certainly be willing to do this in such a good cause. Yes, of course, as you say, first FA for SAQ; then we can see what we want to do about the template issue. Once we make FA (I'm being optimistic), there is no Wiki rule prohibiting anyone from improving articles still further. --Alan W (talk) 11:06, 19 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

This looks like a well done article (congratulations to you all). I am curious about your citation issues (and somewhat overwhelmed by all the discussion here), and wonder if someone could summarize why use of the {{citation}} template was not deemed suitable. - J. Johnson (JJ) (talk) 20:40, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Shakespeare on trial and Other candidates emerge

The sections Shakespeare on trial and Other candidates emerge seem to be rather unbalanced in terms of sheer length (the former is a single paragraph long); and, perhaps more to the point, they seem to be grouped according to different principles: Shakespeare on trial is a thematic grouping where Other candidates emerge is a chronological one. I think we either need to first merge these two sections only to split them into two entirely new sections by some suitable chronological period; or we need to strengthen the Shakespeare on trial section into a thematic one that can stand on its own (which would make it analogous to the top level History and The case for/against…, and hence seems a poor fit to me). My strong preference would be for merging and then splitting rather than retaining a strengthened Shakespeare on trial section.

I've as yet not found a good way to merge + split the two, but barring dissent here I intend to have a go at it as soon as I find some way to attack the problem. Also, if someone who knows the material better than I do would like to have a go at this then that would probably be preferable: I'm simply not sufficiently versed in the topic to see the best temporal categorization here. --Xover (talk) 01:08, 22 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Xover, I think it would benefit from the editing on someone not all that familiar with the topics, since it's a structural problem, not one of content, so by all means go ahead and let's get this thing wrapped up.
On another topic, it appears that we're right back where we were two months ago. Tom Reedy (talk) 05:22, 22 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Originally I wrote two thematic sections, since these two elements, unearthing proof, and trial by moot court, were constants in the RS. I still think organizing those parts of the material by theme the best way to sustain the reader's interest through what is a long article, though Xover is right that a certain anomalous tension might be felt in the jar between chronological and thematic treatments. As Tom says, decisions on this are best left to third parties here.Nishidani (talk) 12:16, 22 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I raised almost the same issue here [1] . I think 'other candidates emerge' is too long. Interesting comment from Tom. I think the best process is a collaboration of experts and nonexperts. I agree with Nishi here, I think a thematic split is more readable than a dull, long chronological list of events. Poujeaux (talk) 13:09, 22 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I took out the para about WW2. Many things declined in WW2 so it is hardly surprising if Oxfordanism did. Poujeaux (talk) 17:41, 22 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I don't think that a good (since generic and analogous) reason for the removal, but, we're a community here, so let's see what other editors think of the move.Nishidani (talk) 18:21, 22 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Poujeaux, please don't unilaterally remove whole paragraphs from the article at this point in the game. That you comment on your removal in this thread suggests that you think there is some discussion of a length issue here. There isn't. The concern discussed here is how we chunk up into sections the material in the article; not how long it is. If you believe there is a general length issue, or that there is some specific part of the article that does not belong for some reason, please make a case for those specific changes. --Xover (talk) 18:54, 22 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Poujeaux's statement "Many things declined in WW2 so it is hardly surprising if Oxfordanism did." is one of the most bizarre statements I can remember reading on Wikipedia. Many things declined. Many things rose. The power of Germany and Japan rose and then declined. Pimpernel Smith challenged the Nazis with Oxfordian arguments, but I really doubt it was a major concern during the war. Still, this just shows that the sentence "Oxfordism and anti-Stratfordism declined in popularity and visibility during World War II" is itself problematic. The war is a watershed event in the 20th century. It's used as a signpost for cultural change, justs as decades and regimes are, but we should not suggest that the war was responsible for change. Paul B (talk) 19:49, 22 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I can see how both grafs could be combined into one, but I don't think it would appreciably reduce the text enough to bother with it. We don't want an article so condensed that it has to be unpacked like a poem explication to appreciate the full meanings. The eye needs to breath and take in information at a more leisurely pace but without dawdling, and I think we're very close to optimal on that score. Tom Reedy (talk) 05:44, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Well I think there are several problems with that para. As well as Paul B's point, there is "Copious archival research had failed to turn up the expected confirmation..." - expected? By who? And the last sentence "..claiming to find myriad hidden clues.." is another example of the sneery biased opinionated style. Xover, it has already been discussed that this sec is too long, because it has a main article that's hardly any longer. In fact you yourself commented on 'main article' sections here [2]Poujeaux (talk) 09:21, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Claimed by who? By various Baconians and Oxfordians, that's who. I don't think we need to list them by name. This is well documented in Shapiro and other sources. They were looking for manuscripts and letters mainly. Proponents of Baconism regularly claimed to find coded messages hidden in Shakespeare's works. This was not initially a part of the Oxfordian argument. More recently it has become characteristic of Oxfordians. I don't think the facts are in dispute, but if you think the language is "sneery" change the tone. Paul B (talk) 09:36, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I think merely removing the adjectives would address P's concerns. For some reason the use of sibilants seems to convey contempt. The adjective "assiduously" was objected to for much the same reason when it was used in the lede to describe the efforts of anti-Stratfordians to promote their theories, and I believe that bias has expanded so that the use of almost any seldom-used word is considered to be a mark of intellectual elitism. Tom Reedy (talk) 13:34, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Blame is starting to be whispered abroad about using descriptive language that is echoed throughout sources. We are supposed to write neutrally but not so flatly that readers get sleepweary after two sentences. The objections are beginning to look nugatory, or negligible. Familiarity with the vast outpourings (myriad: 5000 items just down to 1949), or with Looney, who lead his disciples to expect results from archival foragings. What's sneering about saying clues are hidden? And opinionated is a bizarre word to describe prose that has striven to get into neutral language what RS authorities unanimously aver. Nishidani (talk) 14:24, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
The adjectives I was referring to were "copious" and "myriad". If you look in the archives, "assiduously" was objected to as POV in much the same manner, as were other descriptive terms. I don't understand it myself, because the descriptions were accurate (anti-Stratfordians certainly work assiduously to promote their candidates), but then again most of the objections have come from those who shy away from bald, reality-based description in favour of softer, more euphemistic language. It goes back to the differences between scholarly and promotional, IMO. Tom Reedy (talk) 16:26, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Oh, rodents! And there I was just fiddling with the idea of finishing my annotations to Lycophron's Alexandra, which must have the greatest number of hapax legomena in any poem of the Western bazooka.Nishidani (talk) 14:09, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Ok, I've fiddled around a bit with this. The Shakespeare on trial bit is now the middle paragraph of the preceding section (Searching for proof), where I think it fits reasonably well both chronologically and thematically. I've also merged the first two subsections of the History of the authorship question section into a new subsection called Rise of bardolatry and precursors of doubt. The two were each very short and they were thematically sufficiently close that they fit well together. And finally I've merged some of the short paragraphs in the Other candidates emerge section. This section doesn't feel quite so unbalanced (length-wise) when the surrounding sections have been merged into more comparable lengths, and making it more compact alleviated this even further. Merging the paras also softened the listyness of the section quite a bit, to the point I think it is now acceptable. I've tried to copy-edit out any awkward segways resulting from this, but it would probably be a good idea for someone else to have a look and try to smooth any remaining jagged edges. --Xover (talk) 21:23, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks to Nikkimaria for making the wording there more NPOV and less sneery! Poujeaux (talk) 14:03, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Derby section

I think this section is a bit of a rag-bag. I'd suggest that the bit on Honigmann should go. He's not a Debyite and in any case the claim dates at least as far back as Lefranc's 1919 book Sous the masque... (possibly further). Do we need the assertion that Derby appears in group theories? So do they all - sometimes. A. J. Evans accorded him the chief role, but I don't think it's a widespread view beyond his book. The whole section seems choppy. Paul B (talk) 13:18, 22 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Paul,the Derby Wedding thesis was first advanced by Sir Sydney Lee in the mid-1890's. Lefranc clearly acknowledged this. How often do you ever read the authors, or materials, on which you profess to be commenting here? This section and the Lefranc biography would seem less of a rag bag if you did.Neil Hayman (talk) 23:48, 22 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Well Charles, sorry, Neil, do you ever read the authors you comment on? The words were, "in any case the claim dates at least as far back as Lefranc's 1919 book Sous the masque... (possibly further)." I referred to the earliest reference I knew of off the top of my head: the relevant facts being that it is a heck of a lot earlier than Honigmann, and it is from a Derbyite, which were the points at issue. If you can improve the section or the Lefranc biography please do. You know, you do bear a remarkable resemblance to Sydney Carton. Paul B (talk) 08:23, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Good ear, Paul. Tom Reedy (talk) 22:03, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Only a close friend of Sydney Carton would spell Sidney Lee's name with a Y. Paul B (talk) 18:49, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Wider input on idiom required

Xover, myself and Alan have been discussing on my page the comparative merits of 'came to be regarded as' vs. 'become regarded as' in the text. Could readers (I note the page has suffered an extraordinary bounce from 40 to 140 over the last few weeks?) tell us which of the two they would prefer in the text?Nishidani (talk) 00:05, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I edited the sentence in question to read "The authorship question emerged only after Shakespeare became regarded as the English national poet and a unique genius in a class by himself", which uses neither construction (however grammatical they may be), easier to understand, and (IMO) doesn't throw the reader off with an awkward-sounding construction. Tom Reedy (talk) 02:58, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Tom I agree that your edit has improved the sentence. But you are sidestepping the question: Is "became regarded" or "came to be regarded" more idiomatic English? To Nishidani and myself, "came to be regarded" sounds more natural. To Xover, "became regarded" is better. May I infer from your response that "became regarded" is fine, and we should just let it be? Maybe we're nitpicking here, and I can understand your impatience for us to just get through this thing and prepare the article for FA nomination. For my part, I have been meaning to do at least one more complete read-through, but I have put it off, as the article seems to have lost some stability in the last few days. Once I am assured that things have settled down, I'll do the read-through, if only to provide yet another pair of eyes and possibly make some additional minor contribution to the process. --Alan W (talk) 03:31, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I don't see any difference in meaning between the two constructions, so to me the simplest is best and to my mind more idiomatic. Try substituting another verb for "regarded": "Bill wasn't cold until he became naked" vs. "Bill wasn't cold until he came to be naked". Both are technically correct, but the first is certainly an improvement and conforms to Rule No. 14 of good writing: "eschew surplusage". Tom Reedy (talk) 03:40, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Fine, then you cast your vote with Xover. Fair enough. We're evenly divided (unless someone else cares to cast a vote). I would still maintain that in not substituting another verb or abstracting the phrase from its broader context, one might feel that "came to be regarded" lends some helpful overtones that "became regarded" does not. But that is perhaps straying too far into subjectivity. Enough with these quibbles, and back to improving the article as a whole! --Alan W (talk) 05:26, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I vote for 'came to be regarded'. Poujeaux (talk) 08:54, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks, Poujeaux. Now "came to be regarded" has taken the lead. Nishidani has posted on his talk page a justification of this phrase from a very different perspective, as well. I suggest that we let this simmer for a while, but then maybe a bit later on we will be inclined to restore this phrasing. Last night I began my promised read-through of the entire page and made a couple of minor edits. I will continue as I find the time. This I consider my highest priority right now (at least on this article). --Alan W (talk) 04:25, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
As I think I've mentioned elsewhere, I am not particularly invested in which variant is employed here. I believe they are both correct, as such, so whichever is preferred, on whatever grounds, can be used. --Xover (talk) 15:23, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Became regarded" sounds awkward to me, but keep in mind a) this may just be an issue of different dialects, and b) I'm certainly no one to talk about awkward phrasing. Kaiguy (talk) 06:37, 26 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
On the contrary, Kaiguy, edits like this show your solid grasp of idiomatic English, and I wish you had contributed more; no need to be so self-deprecating! Nor is it a manner of dialect here. Nishidani is clearly British and I am American, and we agree on "came to be regarded". (Poujeaux "lives in the UK", so I assume he is British as well.) Similarly, supporters of "became regarded" very possibly grew up speaking different dialects of English. --Alan W (talk) 16:53, 26 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Out of curiosity (because I don't care which phrase is used), what is it about the addition of the infinitive that makes it less awkward? To my mind "became" and "came to be" make exactly the same statement. I don't remember where I picked it up, but I try to get rid of cut as many prepositions, adverbs, adjectives, and infinitives as possible without destroying the sense. Tom Reedy (talk) 17:35, 26 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Clearly this is not our most pressing issue. If "became regarded" ends up gathering more votes after all, I won't lose sleep over it myself. To answer your question (and just, of course, speaking for myself; Nishidani presents his thoughts in detail on his talk page), to me, "became regarded" suggests a rapid transformation; "came to be regarded" suggests a slower, evolutionary change from perhaps complex or unobvious causes. I do not deny the subjectivity in this, and I am glad Nishidani posted the question here, to see how others feel—in this case "feel" is very much the operative word. Xover makes some interesting points on Nish's page, too, in his arguing against "came to be" that have nothing to do with conciseness. I agree with you in principle that, all other things being equal, concise is better. To me, and evidently to some others, however, the two expressions are not exactly synonymous. --Alan W (talk) 03:49, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Agree with the above. And "became regarded" sounds awkward to me (maybe it is a Brit/US thing). --GuillaumeTell 11:56, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It's natural for two editors with finely tuned antennae for linguistic nuance, and therefore I well expect that some phrase like William James' about a 'mind debauched by learning' for making 'the natural seem strange' (Psychology. Briefer Course, 1920 p.394) would be a fair crack of the whip if they dissent on reading the following!
(a) 'Shakespeare became regarded as the English national poet'.
subject+(verb) become+ past participle
(b)'Shakespeare came to be regarded as. . .'
subject+ (verb)come + infinitive+past participle = passive voice
I said the former was context restricted earlier. The rule-by-thumb in cases like this is to generate similar examples with the same structure, and see how they work.
For (a) we would have
  • With fermentation, soya became prepared as an edible food.
  • Stratford became visited as the hometown of Shakespeare.
  • Potatoes became eaten as the Irish national food.
  • commoners' shoes became polished as a sign of rising domestic respect for gentlemen's fashion.
  • The Beijing dialect became spoken as the default form of Chinese for natives speaking mutually unintellible languages.
  • The Vatican became built as a cynosure for Christendom's faithful.
  • Vergil's 4th Eclogue became read as a premonition of Christianity's birth.
  • gunboats became sent as a measure of British imperial power's global outreach.
  • yachts became sailed as a token of conspicuous wealth.
  • whales became killed as a quintessential assertion of Japan's cultural rights over certain forms of endangered species.
  • The Moorish chiefs became beheaded as an encouragement of others.
  • The helots became murdered as proof of a youth's attainment of Spartan manhood.
  • beer became drunk(en) as as a palliative to the high-salt content of preserved foods in northern Europe.
It is a curiosity of language that, once we repeat and vary an idiomatic structure in our native tongue, it looses its initial strangeness as use domesticates it. Some of the above may read as quite acceptable. Quite a few of them will appear problematical. 'became polished' (Oh really, I thought they were rather rough and uncouth), 'became sent', 'became sailed' ('yachts always have sails,' a peruser would murmur in pausing over the phrase'), 'became beheaded', 'became murdered', 'became drunk' (intoxicated beer!) etc., being the most conspicuous.
The point is 'become+past participle' has a restricted use, whereas 'come+to be+past participle' functions in most contexts because the 'infinitive+ past participle' is equivalent to the stand passive form of any active verb. The as following plays some role in this as well, not to speak of considerations over the difference between past participles which retain their verbal implication and those which have lost them on the way to adjectivalization. If you insert as substitutes the 'come+to be+pp.' in any of the dubious examples I have thought up randomly, then the slight or marked oddness of the other form is lost and they make, thus adjusted, immediate and unambiguous sense.
That said, 'become regarded as' in now ineludibly a part of my by now expanded natural English syntax, for which I owe a debt of thanks to Tom and Xover.Nishidani (talk) 17:47, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
A tour de force of linguistic analysis, Nishidani! --Alan W (talk) 23:43, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Wording issues

Some recent edits to the Other candidates emerge section may need some attention (I am comparing the current text with that at 05:52, 23 February 2011).

  • The section now starts "Towards the turn of the century...". We can't assume the reader understands which century. Perhaps "In the late 1800s...", or "In the 1890s..."?
On examination the phrase seems necessary, (unless we substitute 'By the turn of the century' which would cope with Ziegler (1895) and Bleibtreu (1907). think we should expect readers, even in this dour days, (Alan Bloom 1987) to understand contextually which century is being referred to. Nishidani (talk) 12:42, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why start the following with "And": "And after World War I..."?
Why indeed. I've removed it.Nishidani (talk) 12:42, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • The text "Yet another candidate..." was just "Another candidate...". The "Yet" is of course accurate, but it seems an unnecessary NPOV problem.
A bit 'nice' but nice distinctions are what we all love. I've tried to emend in order to expunge any perceived hint of NPOV problems.Nishidani (talk) 12:42, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • The sentence starting "But in the period after World War II..." seems unconnected with the preceeding text (the sentence was previously a new paragraph). Also, starting with "But" is a problem?
I've butted 'but'.Nishidani (talk) 12:42, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • The sentence starting "In 1913 John M. Robertson..." was in the earlier version, but the sentence reads oddly to me. Given the section, it should be about another candidate, but it seems to be just a refutation of an anti-strat argument. Since the argument (that the author would have to be a legal expert) is not in the section, I think the refutation should be removed.

I am not sufficiently confident of my opinions to edit these myself, and am hoping someone might comment or do some tweaking. Johnuniq (talk) 02:53, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Valid points, but I would retain Robertson, whose work Vickers, writing almost a century later, judged to be the best study of the (Baconian) 'delusion', and therefore merits mention in this historical section. You certainly do have a point regarding the flow of the paragraph, whose subject concerns the drift away from Baconism. I think the problematical sentence, in this context, is not so much the one dealing with Robertson, as with Twain. We have Bleitreu suggesting one candidate, Greenwood dismissing Shakespeare but withholding judgement on who the 'real author' might have been. Then, almost as an aside Twain is mentioned, because he is influenced by Greenwood, yet favoured Bacon (the author whose decline as a candidate is being analysed here). So Twain is going against the tide described. He's only on the page because of his promotional value is so highly regarded in the anti-Stratfordian literature. This is how i'd try to iron out the slight jarring of themes in the sequence of sentences.

Unaffiliated anti-Stratfordians also began to appear. The German literary critic Karl Bleibtreu supported the nomination of Roger Manners, 5th Earl of Rutland in 1907.[147] British barrister George Greenwood, whose work influenced Mark Twain's own anti-Stratfordian beliefs,[148] sought to disqualify William Shakespeare in his The Shakespeare Problem Restated (1908). Greenwood, unlike Twain, who still favoured Bacon,[149] withheld support for any alternative authors, thereby sanctioning the search for candidates other than Bacon and setting the stage for the rise of candidates such as Marlowe, Stanley, Manners, and Oxford.[150). In 1913, John M. Robertson in his The Baconian Heresy: A Confutation, disposed of the key Baconian contention that Shakespeare must have had expert legal knowledge by showing that legalisms pervaded Elizabethan and Jacobean literature.[151]

Nishidani (talk) 12:15, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • The time period is, I think, reasonably clear from context (it continues from the previous paragraph, and is almost a strict chronological progression), but can in a pinch be fixed by simply naming which century.
  • “And”, “Yet”, and “But” are connecting words, that I otherwise agree should never start a sentence unless absolutely necessary, that are here used to try to soften the listyness of this section. This was always a problem but became more glaring when I merged the separate single-sentence paragraphs into larger paragraphs, and the connecting words were a first approximation to softening this (see also next bullet).
  • The sentences that appear disconnected (including the NPOV problems you read into them) are a result of the listyness. The thread connecting the section is the various publications and events that occurred in this time period that were significant to the Authorship question; but this thread is never made explicit—the framing narrative is missing—resulting in a section that is effectively a list without the actual bullet points. Thus, what you perceive as a refutation of an anti-Strat argument is actually just us making note that Robertson published a book pertaining to Authorship (that just happened to be one that refuted it rather than supported it). It is entirely apropos both thematically and chronologically, but the problems with the prose makes it appear malapropos.
  • Unrelated to any specific point you make, I take the impression that recent events have perhaps made us overly sensitive to perceived NPOV problems in the text. The previous bullet marks one such instance, and the noted “Yet” is equally apposite: there is no inherent value judgement in the word “yet”, it merely speaks to quantity, and it is an objective fact that the quantity of proposed candidates and theories was a) greatly increasing (which point we make in this section), and b) already rather large in absolute terms. It is a perfectly valid and value-neutral formulation to use here. Starting the sentence with “Yet” has, of course, other problems (related to prose quality); but being non-NPOV is not one. --Xover (talk) 15:20, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It is perfectly acceptable to begin sentences with conjunctions if it is called for. Not having looked at the points above I can't say if they are OK, but objecting to them purely on stylistic grounds is insufficient. Tom Reedy (talk) 16:25, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Contested Will

I raised this before (see archive 22), but I don't think the issue was resolved. The article contains this para:

In 2010 James Shapiro surveyed the authorship question in Contested Will: Who Wrote Shakespeare?, marking the first time a recognized Shakespeare scholar devoted a book to the topic. He approached the subject from a sociological standpoint and found its origins firmly rooted in traditional scholarship going back to Edmund Malone, and he criticised academe for ignoring the topic and effectively surrendering the field to anti-Stratfordians.

I know that name variations occur, but the article is Edmond Malone and we should use that spelling.

The main problem is that the meaning of the last sentence is unclear. What is a "sociological standpoint"? The "firmly rooted" can be read as saying that anti-Stratfordian arguments are valid because they are based on traditional scholarship. Readers should not be expected to know that "traditional" is here used to mean "bad". Johnuniq (talk) 03:08, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Perhaps we should use the term historicist instead of sociological. His point is that anti-Stratfordism is a product of its historical time.
I don't understand why you say "firmly rooted" = valid, but we can change that to "its origins are based in the same methods used by early Shakespeare scholars that have since been superseded by more valid methodology" or something along that line. Tom Reedy (talk) 03:19, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
We talk about the 'sociology of knowledge', how social circumstance inflects perceptions of what we (think we) know. Really, what Shapiro is doing is what is now generically spoken of as 'cultural history' (I'm just reading Stephen Kern's A Cultural History of Causality, which has a similar approach), but it would be awkward to write, since we are not writing the German article (vom geistesgeschichtlichen Standpunkt!!), 'from a cultural-historical standpoint'.Nishidani (talk) 13:39, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I too felt unhappy about "firmly rooted". It does seem to imply something like "solidly based" , as if Shapiro has discovered that there is a firm basis for A-S arguments. How about "evolved from"? Paul B (talk) 12:01, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I've had a shot ('tantamount to' could be deleted, leaving just 'surrendering' to be adjusted to 'surrendered'.
What about 'including creating several articles on Wikipedia'. The kissing echo of those two 'ings' worries my ear, but don't wig me if this strikes you all as wankishly finicky.Nishidani (talk) 13:00, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"broached by a vein" is too indirect and diffusive. Tom Reedy (talk) 13:49, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
With the caveat that I haven't finished Contested Will yet, what I've assumed this paragraph to refer to is the first chapter (ish) of the book. Here Shapiro rakes Malone over the coals for being the first to read autobiography into the works, particularly in his note on Sonnet 93 IIRC, and thereby legitimizing all the following attempts to do so. Since the various Authorship theorists tend to do this to an extreme degree (where mainstream scholars commit the same sin to a lesser degree), that aspect of the Authorship question can be said to more or less directly stem from Malone. In addition, of course, Shapiro takes pains to say that he's not so interested in the various specific arguments and bits of evidence presented—that is, he's not so engaged in what they believe—but rather he's interested in why they believe what they do; which is what I think all the “sociological standpoint”, “cultural-historical”, and “sociology of knowledge” phrases are trying to say. --Xover (talk) 14:57, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
he's interested in why they believe what they do
Exactly, and the article should say that. I had hoped that some wording from a review of the book, or an interview with Shapiro, could be used to clarify what is meant (the review/interview being a reference) but I can't locate anything particularly helpful. Recent changes have improved the text, and if others are happy, then it's ok by me. Johnuniq (talk) 23:19, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Time to stop churning?

I'm of the opinion that we're to the point that we're finding problems that were caused by fixing problems we found earlier that originated in fixing problems found previously. IOW, we're churning things that probably aren't even mildly important, much less critical.

I've just now been able to devote some time to the page, and to my mind the only semi-major point that needs to be addressed is the Oxford section. Several objections were brought up during the arbitration that I think deserve consideration. I think we should fix that and then stand back and let the FAC reviewers tell us what needs to be done. I'll post some suggestions later today for discussion. Tom Reedy (talk) 16:22, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'd just wait till Alan, Xover and Johnuniq finish their rereadings - they seem to be almost through - and ask them (I've also dropped a note on Hamiltonstone's pge, but he is on wikibreak) if they think we're all ready. I still think Johnuniq had a strong point on the slight dyscrasia caused by introducing the pro-Baconian Twain, in a section dealing with the emergent disavowals of Bacon, but won't harp on it unless others think something along the line readjustments I suggested is worth the several seconds' effort to perform. Otherwise, I pretty much agree. For an article of this length it looks fairly good to me. But then, I know eff-all about what degree of pertinacious meticulousness FA pages and editors require. Nishidani (talk) 16:55, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I have only the candidate sections left to go through, and those are unlikely to ever be “perfect” until their respective Main articles are FA-quality. Of the previous issues brought up there's whatever is left to do with the images (I haven't checked whether you fixed all of them yet?); and finally there's the External links section that I plan to assault with vigor once I'm through the candidate sections. Other than that I'd say we're pretty much ready to go to FAC (you're absolutely right, we're in imminent danger of turning our Crème Chantilly into butter). If John and Alan are doing their final readthroughs now we should probably aim for this weekend (or however long they take to finish) and, barring anything major cropping up, just take the plunge.
As for the FAC reviewers, you can pretty much assume that whatever level of obsessive meticulousness the article has achieved, they will require one step further. Their perspective when reviewing the article will, quite appropriately, be to shine a spotlight on every single flaw they can find (in order to make it as good as it can get): I'd be far more worried that we fail to catch the interest of reviewers (no reviews = no consensus for FA) than that they will find fault with it (loads of review comments just means there's loads of nice easy todo-list items for us to address i order to reach FA). My one concern is that we haven't had a master like Qp10qp or Awadewit copy-edit the article; those two can untangle the thorniest patches of prose, and we have some briars in there that could easily be too rough fare for the tender palates at FAC. --Xover (talk) 17:40, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Awadewit is too busy and I haven't even thought about asking Qp. I'll see if he can take a look. Tom Reedy (talk) 17:55, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
And it appears he's busy doing other things also. Tom Reedy (talk) 18:06, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah, and I think we're generally ok, so I'm not going to fret about it. The only reason I worry about it is that the one problem that's a real bitch to discover while at FAC is copy-editing (because it's damnably hard, and finding a good copy-editor takes more time than FAC usually affords). --Xover (talk) 18:19, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Ammappa'oh, che jella! My innate pessimism about all this (I imagine a chorus of cherubic cheers from the darker wings of wikipedia's twilight zone if it fails), conjoined to Spanish-Joycean eyes, read todo-list as a list to (re) do everything! Nishidani (talk) 18:57, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
We could try Roger Davies. Wrad (talk) 20:44, 24 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I have finished. When the others are done, we need a period of at least a week where almost no changes occur before going to FAC. I noticed one point that someone might want to fix: the article has one "front-man", one "frontman", and three "front". Perhaps make all just "front"? Johnuniq (talk) 00:10, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks indeed, Johnuniq. Yes, there is an incongruency there. I'd long thought that a little variation on these terms might be useful, using, for example, a 'blind' ('Any thing or action intended to conceal one's real design' (O.E.D. (1989) vol.2 p.288 column one, 6.) 'Front' alone is fine (referring to the person, not an action or thing'), and is used twice. 'Frontman/front-man, front man'. The O.E.D. notes (vol.VI (1989) pp.214 (col.2)-215 col.2) that it is a US idiom (and indeed, paradoxically, in its list of example, only gives one example of 'front-man' from the British Spectator), but registers it without hyphenation. I have adopted this unhyphenated form on their authority, but language is slippery, and perhaps conventions have changed since then.Nishidani (talk) 11:53, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I am well along in my reading, which has thus far resulted in a miscellany of edits, mostly fairly minor, but has turned up nothing that really alarmed me. A couple of things for consideration here while I plod along through the rest:
The section titled "Rise of bardolatry and precursors of doubt"—when I first noticed this merged header, my impression was that it was about the rise of bardolatry and the rise of precursors of doubt. If no one else is made the least bit uneasy by this (and I'm not claiming it's bad in any serious way), then, well, never mind! I don't mean to make too much of it.
In the Overview: "They attempt to disqualify William Shakespeare as the author due to perceived inadequacies in his background, and they offer supporting arguments for a substitute candidate and postulate some type of conspiracy to protect the author's true identity.[20] The latter is also used to explain why no documentary evidence exists for their particular candidate and why the historical record confirms Shakespeare's authorship.[21]" I'm not happy with these sentences. "They attempt...due to" is founded on marginal grammar and to me sounds very awkward. The second clause crams a bit much into the sentence. (Come to think of it, it's two clauses, with an implicit "they".) And the next sentence begins: "The latter is also..." The latter what? Probably should be "last" whatever, anyway, since there are more than two—claims? arguments? postulations? explanations?—in the previous sentence. I'll tackle restructuring this if no one else volunteers. I just didn't try it yet as I'm not quite sure how, and, also, the Overview is a very prominent part of the article and thus a sensitive area. --Alan W (talk) 01:34, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I've had a dash at it, though it may not be 'sausage-factory'. Fixing burst water-pipes in chill weather is not conducive, unlike standing one's turn at the tumbril, to concentrating one's mind on things like the niceties of English usage.Nishidani (talk) 15:18, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Maybe repairing broken English sentences is closer than you think to repairing broken water pipes, Nishidani. Be that as it may, I'd say you've fixed the problems. Thank you! --Alan W (talk) 05:36, 26 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I've done all I can for now (I did make a complete pass through of the article, though toward the end I was fuzzy-headed enough to have probably overlooked things I otherwise might not have). I do hope my questions, including the one I just posed in the section below, will be addressed; otherwise, I think we might be ready for the next major step. Overall, it's really quite good, I'd say. --Alan W (talk) 05:40, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

As to "front", "front man", and "front-man": "Front man" with or without the hyphen to me means the guy who sings in a rock band. I think "front" should suffice. Tom Reedy (talk) 18:04, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Ciphers

A very active evening on the SAQ page in the Western Hemisphere. Nikkimaria and I have been busy at the same time, as I first discovered when I found that an edit I was just thinking of making was done, as if by magic, by the time I clicked "Edit".

Many truly excellent edits, Nikkimaria! There is one point, however, on which we disagree, as I found when you silently reverted an edit I had just made. I think this is sufficiently important that it should be brought up here, where those who have been immersed in this material for years can best judge which way is better.

In "Search for Proof", before this evening (when it was "Searching for Proof", but I'm not disputing that change), this is how this sentence read:

Ciphers became important to the theory, with thick books such as Ignatius L. Donnelly's The Great Cryptogram (1888) promoting the approach.

Nikkimaria edited this to:

Ciphers became important to the alternate-authorship theories, with thick books such as Ignatius L. Donnelly's The Great Cryptogram (1888) promoting the approach.

This does not seem right in this context. We are reading the history. At this point, only Francis Bacon has been proposed as an alternate-authorship candidate. Donnelly's book was only about ciphers linked to Bacon's life. True, as I understand it, ciphers were at least to an extent brought in to justify other candidates. But not by Donnelly, and not until years later. So I edited this to:

Ciphers became important to the Baconian theory, with thick books such as Ignatius L. Donnelly's The Great Cryptogram (1888) promoting the approach.

A bit later, I noticed that Nikkimaria had changed this back to:

Ciphers became important to the alternate-authorship theories, with thick books such as Ignatius L. Donnelly's The Great Cryptogram (1888) promoting the approach.

I do not think that this statement should be made this way at this point in the narrative. As I, however, am far from an expert on the subject matter, I appeal to those among us who are (or at least know more about it than I do): which way is better here? Or should yet other wording be substituted? --Alan W (talk) 05:31, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Ah, I suspect this may have been unintentional. Nikkimaria was copy-editing the whole article, which makes edit-conflicts both inevitable and very hard to resolve. I noticed a few instances of Nikkimaria changing back exactly to the previous wording, where you'd recently made a change; and that looks a lot like just the edits clashing than actual disagreement over the wording. IOW, I suspect these were by accident. --Xover (talk) 10:08, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Alan has a point - at this time there is only Bacon as major writer (but many other writers were named in the 'group theories' enunciated at the time), but so does Nikkimaria, whose edit focused on 'became', which here has a futuritive implication ('were to become'). IG's ryptogrammic approach set off a wave of similar speculations which were to 'infect' many later theories, not only those versions within the Baconian fold. The two perspectives can be harmonized by writing:-

Ciphers became important to the alternate-authorship theories after thick books such as Ignatius L. Donnelly's The Great Cryptogram (1888) began to promote this approach.

Nishidani (talk) 11:55, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Ciphers were important before Donnelly came along, so "with" is more appropriate.
I join Xover in praising Nikkimaria's copy-editing. It is excellent. Tom Reedy (talk) 12:42, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks! Alan, I did notice one edit conflict while I was copy-editing, but it didn't concern this passage and it was on a sentence I was already altering, so I just saved my version. I'm very sorry if I overlooked or unintentionally undid other changes of yours - as Xover mentioned, that's a consequence of the way I've been editing. I'll try to do smaller-scale edits to avoid those sorts of issues. Nikkimaria (talk) 13:15, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
No, keep to the large-scale edits. It's easier to do. The problems generated by your comprehensive review are miniscule, and can quickly be fixed.
Tom. Not in dispute, and I hope none of us is thin-skinned enough to think these exchanges bear any semblance to the pettiness of the pre-Arbcom state of affairs. The discursive sea-change effected of late on this page marks as radical a differences that which distinquishes the repartée of an Enlightenment salon from the style of barbaric sniping, or washerwomen's raillery, of the dark ages!
I had checked the lit before making that suggestion, and read Wadsworth's remark:-

'The importance of Donnelly's theories can be measured by the number of imitations they inspired. Sparked by his electric, if incomplete ideas, an army of scholars began to search for a more satisfactory cipher, with the result that occultism became a major characteristic of Baconian activity from 1888 on.' (p.57)

There were anagrams and acrostics before, yes. I am not familiar with precedents for the kind of ciphers that Donnelly devised.
Alan simply and correctly said that this took place in the age where alternative candidates (except as members of a group or coterie) were not available, as that is understood after single subjects came to challenge the Baconian ascendency (post 1895).
Nikki. I might add that (an issue I had with the language here a year ago) 'alternate-authorship theories' is slightly solecistic to my ear, though, I admit (cf. the 'become regarded' issue) that 'alternate' is now used as a synonym for 'alternative'. 'Alternate-authorship theories' in classical prose would refer to theories in which two candidates alternate for ascendency, since 'alternate' implies a field of two, which 'alternative' does not.Nishidani (talk) 15:14, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Wadsworth was selective and misogynist in his history. Mrs. Pott was way ahead of Donnelly, and in fact Donnelly cribbed much of his early material from her. It is more accurate to say "with". Tom Reedy (talk) 17:58, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Oh, fair suck of the sav. That's coming the raw prawn, to take politically correct Pott shots at Wadsworth with a link that reads:
'The subject of ciphers(so needful in a secret society) has been so long suppressed, that we note with pleasure the interest stimulated by a more general comprehension of this intricate subject. The pioneer efforts of Mr. Donnelley in this new old art or science, stimulated Mr. Wigston, Mr. Cary, Mr. Gould, Dr. Owen, Dr. Pryer, the Hon. H. Gibson, Mr. Bidder, Mr. E.V. Tanner and others, to prosecute this beguiling study.'
My memory of this is that Pott's word parallels influenced Donnelly, not ciphers. But we can drop it. I think everyone must be wondering if I need to detox on this surfeited infection contracted by promiscuous lounging in the fringy groves of suburran theories.Nishidani (talk) 21:13, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Indeed your memory may be better than mine; I often cognitively conflate and delete. I'll delve further. Tom Reedy (talk) 21:25, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
She only briefly mentioned them in her first book and pointed out their importance in a later work, a few years after Donnelly, whose work she knew intimately, so my memory was at fault. Carry on! Tom Reedy (talk) 21:46, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
No worries, Nikkimaria, about any possible editorial clashes yesterday. I can see that that reversion was unintentional. I agree that it is best if you continue to edit in your fashion, as I will in mine. It all helps, and in the end it's all for the best. I haven't checked yet today, but already yesterday you had made a substantial contribution to the collective effort, and, as you see, it is appreciated. I think the article is in pretty good shape at this point. --Alan W (talk) 04:59, 26 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Perhaps not worth adding in, but for the record

I overlooked, in writing on the theme of excavating proof, that Donnelly had, following Bacon's precedent, endeavoured to do this. Shapiro mentions it. If for completeness, this needed to be added, then it would run like this

From hints in his code, Donnelly believed that important manuscripts had been secreted underground and sought permission to excavate the estate of one of Bacon's heirs, the Earl of Verulam. His bid was unsuccessful.[1][2]

Where Ridge's ref would be.

But I don't suppose this is worth worrying about (save for the fact that those following in his wake, like Orville Owen, get some coverage for doing the same).Nishidani (talk) 15:59, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

We had this in before the great trimming, but sourced to Shapiro, IIRC. Tom Reedy (talk) 17:59, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

External links cleanup time

Ok, as I've hinted several times, we need to take a nice long critical look at the External links section. In order to get everyone off on the right foot—:-)—I've deleted the lot of it! (cue scary music)

The original links that were there can be found in this diff.

I've removed all the links from the article so that we can have a quick discussion of what type of links we should have there, and so that the “burden of proof” (so to speak) is on each link to be included; and so that we don't just pick our favourites from the existing links and lock in on those; a clean slate. The relevant guideline is WP:External links and the sections: What can normally be linked, Links to be considered, and Links normally to be avoided.

A few choice quotes from the guideline:

This page in a nutshell: External links in an article can be helpful to the reader, but they should be kept minimal, meritable, and directly relevant to the article.

…and…

Some acceptable links include those that contain further research that is accurate and on-topic, information that could not be added to the article for reasons such as copyright or amount of detail, or other meaningful, relevant content that is not suitable for inclusion in an article for reasons unrelated to its accuracy.

Some external links are welcome […], but it is not Wikipedia's purpose to include a lengthy or comprehensive list of external links related to each topic. No page should be linked from a Wikipedia article unless its inclusion is justifiable according to this guideline and common sense. The burden of providing this justification is on the person who wants to include an external link.

This guideline concerns external links that are not citations to sources supporting article content. If the website or page to which you want to link includes information that is not yet a part of the article, consider using it as a source for the article, and citing it. Guidelines for sourcing, which includes external links used as citations, are discussed at Wikipedia:Reliable sources and Wikipedia:Citing sources.

…and…

Links in the "External links" section should be kept to a minimum. A lack of external links or a small number of external links is not a reason to add external links.

…and…

There are several things that should be considered when adding an external link.

  • […]
  • Is the site content proper in the context of the article (useful, tasteful, informative, factual, etc.)?
  • […]

Each link should be considered on its merits, using the following guidelines. As the number of external links in an article grows longer, assessment should become stricter. […]

And so forth, but you get the idea.

I'd like to see some thought put into what general type of link we should have in the article in light of the above. Not “this link is good” etc., but “A link to one website that provides and overview and further details on <the subject of the article>”. And keep in mind that this article is itself an overview article (so there is limited need for other overview material), and that its subject is the Shakespeare authorship question (and not Oxfordian, Baconian, Marlowite, or Derbyite theory; and neither is it about the organizations promoting those theories). That's not to say that it's verboten to link to such, but it suggests that we should perhaps rather be aiming for a link rather than a complement of links. Go! --Xover (talk) 12:45, 26 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Seems pretty straightforward. Remove all of the specific candidate links to the relevant pages, and you get:
Stratfordian

*"Truth vs. Theory", Theodore Dalrymple

General Non-Stratfordian
I'd strike out only Dalrymple, which makes one excellent point, but fails the test. It is not a comprehensive review of the problem.
As to the bibliographical section, I leave that to others. Nishidani (talk) 14:41, 26 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I have done quite a lot of EL pruning (mainly to resist linkspam). In a good article like this, such pruning is a problem: a long list of good links can be very useful, yet such lists contradict WP:EL (the guideline) and are an invitation for passers by to add further links. I think this list should be heavily pruned to suit WP:EL and to avoid a potential FAC issue.
Re the "Primary sources" that were in "External links": Bacon's William Shakespeare and his Plays and Taylor's The Praise of Hemp-seed link to the actual source. The others link to a Google book which may or may not reveal some/all of the source. I can think of no reason for EL to have links to Google books. The other two sources are interesting but do not warrant an EL. These sources are in no way comprehensive, so I think they all should be removed.
Re the "Stratfordian" links above:
  • The Nelson link strikes a WP:EL zealot as dubious because the page does not contain information useful for a fuller understanding of the SAQ topic (it contains links to such pages). Given Nelson's position, the link should probably be retained, but it would be hard to defend against a zealous EL pruner.
Actually, whatever the look of the pages, Nelson was, along with Matus, one of the two orthodox analysts of the problem who patiently and politely engaged over many years, with the heterodox schools, and was, (perhaps still is) invited regularly to give talks at their various forums and conferences. He is, in short, (despite Nina's recent protestations) acceptable to the non-academic 'opposition' as a knowledgeable orthodox scholar on their views.Nishidani (talk) 10:55, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • I would remove the Claremont Shakespeare Clinic EL because it is not high value, and it is available via the "The Shakespeare Clinic" citation which already contains a link ([3]), and the target includes the www.cmc.edu link at the bottom.
  • Result: Keep "The Shakespeare Authorship Page" and "All Things Shakespeare" and probably Nelson's page.
Re the "General Non-Stratfordian" links above:
  • The first two suffer from the problem I mentioned about Nelson's page (the target of the link does not actually contain useful information).
  • The "Shakespeare Authorship Coalition" link is dubious because it is just an advocacy page (a petition); it appears to have no useful information on the topic of this article. Further, the article includes Declaration of Reasonable Doubt which has the external link.
  • Despite what I have just said, I would be inclined to keep all three links to demonstrate NPOV and to avoid future pointless arguments. Or, if the "pro" links were pruned to just two, then also prune the "con" links to two.
I agree that the links for other candidates do not belong on this page.
The standard WP:EL way of dealing with long lists of links is to insert a single "Open Directory Project" (aka ODP or dmoz) link. Fortunately, the dmoz target already exists (see "My EL section" just below).
It is possible to request additions to the dmoz page, so if we wanted to brutally prune links from here, someone could request that they be added to the dmoz page. The great thing about the dmoz link is that in the future, when someone tries to add a dubious link, they can be told that the correct procedure is to have it added to the dmoz page.
We should consider removing the section headings. Possibly a brief description of each link could be added. My EL section would look like this:
Johnuniq (talk) 03:57, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Ok, my take on this... Kathman/Ross, Matus, and Nelson are all RS in their own right and they provide further information that cannot reasonably be incorporated into the article. Nelson doesn't host a lot of the material, but you might think of him as an editor in collecting and selecting the links. Kathman/Ross is the most comprehensive collection of information on the subject of the article on the web. The Shakespeare Authorship Coalition is pure advocacy and does not belong here. The Shakespeare Authorship Roundtable, while it does provide some links and a reading list, does not have significant information content. I was more ambivalent of The Shakespeare Authorship Trust because they are clearly (by definition) and advocacy organization; but I've come down on the side of inclusion because they actually provide a nice overview of the candidates, including summaries of the bios and cases for, as well as a reading list per candidate. They also uncritically link to The Shakespeare Authorship Roundtable (and a few others) from every candidate page, in what I can only assume is an effort to promote it, but I don't think that's a big enough issue to disqualify them. I am not in favor of a link to dmoz. So… my proposal would then be:
Which seems a reasonable selection both in terms of coverage and in number of links. --Xover (talk) 21:02, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
We should get this decided and on page fairly expeditiously. I think Xover's finbal proposal well reasoned, and support it.Nishidani (talk) 19:37, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I copied Xover's links to the article (but I used "organisation") since the article is now at FAC. Johnuniq (talk) 02:34, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Theorists and supporters

This list is idiosyncratic, and looks random. If it were comprehensive, we would have a full list of the Declaration of Doubt, or, even whittled down, a cast of hundreds of major and minor folks. As it is we have, it's a short Foucaldian laundrey list, expunging a big name like Nietzshe in favour of the learned counsel for the pirates of Penzance chucked in with Robin Williams, a computer geek specializing in manuals for Macintosh, who's recently revived Sidney's candidature, with absolutely no impact on opinion, alongside a handful of the usual suspects. There seems to be no criterion for exclusion/inclusion, and this aleatory aspect would worry me, were I a worrier, which(who?) I ain't.Nishidani (talk) 14:49, 26 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Its purpose is purely promotional to elevate its visibility. What other theory, scientific or non, would think to have such a list? Look around Wikipedia and you won't see any such template sections. Tom Reedy (talk) 16:02, 26 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Well, perhaps it would help to think of it as an aide to navigation rather than as a part of the informational content of the article. I'm sure it could be improved, but in general it looks fair enough for what it is. --Xover (talk) 20:33, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
That's the authorship template, which is strictly not really part of this article. It justs lists people whose articles discuss the matter in sigfnificant detail. There would be no point adding Nietzsche. I think Walt Whitman should certainly go. He made a passing remark, that's all. Mark Twain wrote a booklet, so maybe he should stay. However, Whitman's passing remark gets the full Smatprt treatment in his article. Twain's never mentions the subject. Paul B (talk) 20:55, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
You must be psychic. [4] [5] Tom Reedy (talk) 16:16, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It's that slightly weird phrase "proponent of the Shakespeare authorship question" that signals Smatprt's authorship. Paul B (talk) 18:49, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah, I changed that, since it means a promoter, and Whitman wasn't so much a promoter as a disbeliever. We've got that in our lede here. Tom Reedy (talk) 22:38, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I've made bold to remove Whitman and Williams. As it stands, we have people who made a substantial contribution to the debate (Wilde shouldn't be there though). If we allow Williams to get in because of her recent book, the precedent is set for listing a few dozen other minor blips on the advocacy screen. I think the criterion should be, do our RS treat the supporter or theorist at length (which means Wilòde should go, as well).Nishidani (talk) 15:52, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I've edited the template and added Alden Brooks, who certainly deserves a place, and proved influential (Diana Price's recent book is unimaginable without it), and he proposed a distinct candidate, plus Charlton Greenwood Ogburn, who is ignored while his son's work, which builds on his material, is showcased, rather unfairly. Thirdly I have rearranged the figures in chronological order. Nishidani (talk) 16:08, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'm a bit perturbed by the opening paragraph of this section (BTW, shouldn't it be "The case against..."?), which starts by name-checking other playwrights for whom there isn't much documentary evidence and looks like part of the case for. It seems to me that the section should start at "The lacunae in [Shakespeare's] biography are adduced to draw inferences, which are then treated as circumstantial evidence against his fitness as an author.[29]" The current preceding sentences could then be added at the end or, probably better, inserted somewhere (in a new section?) in the "[The] case for..." section. Apologies if this has been raised previously, and feel free to shoot me down in flames. --GuillaumeTell 16:57, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Commenting only on the heading: per our manual of style headings "do not use a, an, or the as the first word...unless by convention it is an inseparable part of a name (The Hague)". FWIW. Nikkimaria (talk) 18:11, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
We learn something new every day! I can see the point for article titles, but it seems rather odd for section headings. --GuillaumeTell 18:44, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I see your point, but I don't consider it a significant issue. The relevant paragraph is an introduction to the entire section, and as such helps to explain how a case can be made at all. As I've mentioned elsewhere, I think we've now become overly sensitive to this kind of issue; deathly afraid that we'll somehow offend the tender reader with Orthodoxy and that worst of all sins, Objective Fact. I'm fairly strongly inclined to leave well enough alone here. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Xover (talkcontribs) 16:10, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Are we ready to take the plunge (to FAC)?

Ok, the final adjustments, copy-edits, and polishing seem to be petering out; so I'd say we're as ready as we'll ever be to take the plunge and nominate for FAC.

Anyone who feels we're still not ready or wants more time to kick the tires please yell “WAIT!” as soon as possible.

I can take care of the technical bits of the nomination; but who wants to put their name in as co-noms? Tom and Nishidani don't get to beg off, so they'll get put in there no matter what. But who else? Paul? Alan? Anyone else? There's no need to be shy; it's more a “I support this nom and will help address issues” than some kind of “I'm the bestest editor in the whole wide world” declaration (otherwise I would have begged off myself, on the grounds that my minor contributions have been more grunt work than actual article content). Speak up!

And let me take the opportunity to give a great big “Thank you!” to everyone involved and all the great work put in; including everyone from Tom and Nishidani's spectacular work on writing it in the first place, through everyone that has contributed to greater or lesser degree, either directly or even just by commenting on the Talk page (which is also a valuable contribution!), to the wonderful fixes, trimming, and copy-editing that's gone in as we approach the finish-line. Particularly Rührfisch and Nikkimaria—who were kind to even do reviews of images and references when requested, and went above and beyond afterwards—deserve some major kudos! --Xover (talk) 21:28, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I still have a bit of anxiety about the Oxfordian section. Several points were brought up by Smatprt and Smatprt that I think deserve consideration, tho I haven't been able to stomach going back through them to harvest what is usable. (I almost completely burnt out on this.) I'll check and bring a few points up within a few hours. Tom Reedy (talk) 22:55, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Here are the points given by Smatprt in the arbitration that I think deserve consideration (the 1604 issue is completely bogus so I didn't include it):
1. contemporary reputation as a courtly poet
2. Puttenham’s inclusion of him on a list of court poets who were generally little-known (Oxfirdians take that to mean they were “hidden” poets
3. Oxford’s intimacy with Elizabethan court life
4. Oxford’s travels to places that were used as settings in the plays
5. his education and “academic and cultural achievements” (whatever those are supposed to be)
6. literary parallels between the canon and Oxford’s known works (including letters) and underlined passages in his Bible
We can check those against what we have and adjust to suit. Tom Reedy (talk) 23:38, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Tom, there was also the issue that we have the 'Mente videbor' thing is in this article, but it is not in the 'main' article. It seems that many Oxfordians think this is nonsense, so perhaps it should be dropped. Poujeaux (talk) 16:56, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It played a long part in the drift of these speculations from Bacon through to Oxfordianism down to 1999, when an Oxfordian questioned it. It was stoutly defended by one of the few Oxfordians with a Phd, Stritmatter, relatively recently. The article surveys the arguments that have been made, not the arguments as they are now made, or as favoured by certain key groups in the contemporary movements. That is the technical problem with your objection. Nishidani (talk) 17:16, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
You can find "many Oxfordians" who object to almost everything other Oxfordians believe. Currently the Prince Tudor theory and cryptograms and secret messages are hot in Oxfordania, but "many Oxfordians" think they are nonsense. The "Mente videbor thing" is certainly alive and well. Tom Reedy (talk) 17:54, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Well, in that case this point should be made more generally in the article. Currently it is only there for the PT theory. Poujeaux (talk) 18:14, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I would like add a "Thank you!" to Johnuniq for his excellent support in recent weeks. Since it wouldn't be seemly for you to thank yourself, Xover, I will single you out for special credit as well. Your unwavering devotion to all things Shakespeare on Wikipedia should not be taken for granted. As for going in as co-nom, Xover, if it will be of any help, I will do it, as I have done my own share of grunting here recently. I seem to have become more involved in this article than I had originally intended, but it often works out that way with me on Wikipedia, and I haven't really regretted any of these situations. The only reason I would hesitate somewhat here is that the FAC process is very time-oriented, and I'm not sure that I will have that much time to participate in the next few weeks. Also, I will be unable to answer questions that rely on consulting secondary sources, as I have only one in my possession right now, and even that has to be returned to the library eventually. If you still think my joining as co-nom will be helpful, then please tell me what I have to do to sign in when the time comes (though I imagine I'll be able to figure it out easily enough once I see what you do). --Alan W (talk) 23:24, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I have many of the secondary sources, as well as most of the articles quoted, so we don't need to worry about that end, anyway. (I've started putting all my books online here, but it's a slow process.) Tom Reedy (talk) 23:38, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Let's wait until there are no significant edits for a day or two, then nominate. That is likely to be soon, so planning is a good idea. Xover could make the nomination and could mention Tom Reedy and Nishidani as major contributors, or they could sign as co-noms. Or, if helpful for the process, Alan could be a co-nom. Those names seem right to me. What is important is to coordinate the nomination time so that people are able to respond to reviewer comments: responses will have to be fast. In particular, Tom and his library needs to be available. Should the nom link to WP:ARBSAQ?
Can someone fix this "citation needed": "Contemporary comments and textual and stylistic studies indicate that the author of these works is compatible with the known biography of William Shakespeare of Stratford-upon-Avon." Johnuniq (talk) 08:49, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Although I'm not familiar with the process, I would like Nishidani and myself to be co-nominators, since we both put in more than a year of work on this article with FA status as the goal. And since nobody else seems concerned about the Oxfordian section, I'll leave it as it is. Tom Reedy (talk) 13:28, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I'd prefer not to co-nominate, given my record, given the fact that there is no parity between Tom and myself, I am a(n albeit sturdy) sutler following a programmatic train he rode forth to form a one-man vanguard of, in what most oldhands thought a folly of Quixotic proportions, to bring a condemned article towards FA level, something of which I knew, at the time, nothing about. I think Paul Barlow, the quiet performer here, should take that place. Thirdly, I haven't the slightest clue about procedures, technicalities, and am hamfisted in anything regarding them, or forums requiring imput that assumes such knowledge. This has been, lastly, a long systole of trying pressures relieved by a elating diastole of companionate editing with a team of fellows who pitched in with a palkmary acuity of structural and textual judgement I've rarely had the pleasure to observe. Hats off, (chapeau!) Nikkimaria, Xover, Alan, Johnuniq, Guilliame Tell, Kanguole, Kaiguy and several others. I'll of course chip in, like Tom, Alan, if refs and book content needs to be sourced. Nishidani (talk) 15:17, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Looks to me like y'all just need to nominate it! If it passes, great! If it fails, regroup and try again. Wrad (talk) 18:25, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I'm happy to co-propose. Paul B (talk) 18:49, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Somebody show me where to sign and I'm good to go. Tom Reedy (talk) 22:39, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Go to Wikipedia:FAC, scroll down below the blue stuff and do what it says at "Nomination procedure" (a procedure written BY computer people FOR computer people - why can't they automate this so that it's easier to do?). If you'd like to see a recent example, there is Wikipedia:Featured_article_candidates/Rinaldo_(opera)/archive1 - have a look at how it's formatted and just pretend to edit it and substitute SAQ stuff for Rinaldo stuff, then move it back to the Nomination procedure in the FAC instructions ... you may need to open another couple of iterations of WP as well, in order to work out whether what you're doing looks OK and works - just keep pressing the Show Preview button after each edit until it looks OK. Good luck! --GuillaumeTell 00:33, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Well I put the template at the top but nobody told me I had to write an essay, so I haven't initiated the process yet. I hate those blind templates where you think you can work a few minutes on something but then it reveals other tasks that you don't have time to do at the moment. Tom Reedy (talk) 01:44, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Done. I hope I did everything correctly.
I want to take a few minutes here and try to communicate how grateful I am that everybody stepped in to help out. There was no way on earth Nishidani, Paul, and I could have accomplished what everybody did in such a short time. Alan, I'm glad you didn't get scared off when you first came to the page; your contributions have been invaluable and served as a lure for other editors that yes, they could come here an still stay sane! Xover, thanks for ram-rodding this effort when Nishidani, Paul, and I were laying on the mat trying to regain the will to live! Nikkimaria, Johnuniq, and all the rest: you'll never know how much I appreciate you coming in when this page was a veritable swamp with Here be dragons plastered all over the place. Paul, thanks for keeping the faith. And Nishidani, thanks for rescuing me when I was drowning. Had it not been for you showing up when you did, I would have given up the ghost long ago. Whether we achieve FA status or no, I don't think any of us knows how much impact this article will have in the future, especially after Emmerich's movie is released in September and people will be searching for an accurate and reliable account of exactly what the Shakespeare authorship question is. I hate to sound corny (me being so cool and all), but you guys are all great. Tom Reedy (talk) 02:26, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you very much, Tom. I hope, however, that I am not undermining your claim when I challenge your assertion that in remaining here I have retained my sanity. Rather, I would insist that the very fact of my remaining is strongly suggestive of the contrary. ... All joking aside, for now I am holding back from further action (except possibly some additional minor edits to the article), as I'm not sure whether it is necessary or desirable for me to jump in at this point as a co-nominator. As you say, perhaps the best co-nom would be Paul, given the article's history. But for whatever assistance may be requested, I am here and will help to the best of my ability, if, as I have said, I have the time to spare at that particular moment. --Alan W (talk) 02:55, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Actually, it was Nishidani who pointed to Paul. Paul as co-nom does make the most sense to me. --Alan W (talk) 03:02, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Tom or Paul, could you add Paul as co-nom. It's quite easy to do and I could do it, but I think that it's better that it's done by one of you or the other. And may I again congratulate everyone who put so much effort into this, often in very trying circumstances. There were many days when I couldn't face even looking at the talk page, let alone thinking about contributing. --GuillaumeTell 10:57, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I would add Paul as a co-nom if I knew what that terminology meant and how to do it. Tom Reedy (talk) 13:00, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Shapiro page needed

The sentence "Approaching the subject sociologically, Shapiro found its origins to be grounded in a vein of traditional scholarship going back to Edmond Malone, and criticised academe for ignoring the topic, which was, he argued, effectively tantamount to surrendering the field to anti-Stratfordians.[185]" is incompletely supported by the one citation to page 4 (5). I think that "Shapiro found its origins to be grounded in a vein of traditional scholarship going back to Edmond Malone" needs support by citing p. 39 (I think that this is an extremely important and intensely interesting point that Shapiro is making here). As this is in the American edition, I would ask that someone provide the page in the British edition. I did not make the edit with a "?" in this case, as we have to hew to higher standards now that we are FAC, and I didn't want to smear the otherwise highly polished veneer of the article in its current refined state. --Alan W (talk) 04:31, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Alan, I presume the point about Malone on p.39 of the American edition corresponds to this passage on p.42 of the British ed.

Malone helped institutionalize a methodology that would prove crucial to those who would subsequently deny Shakespeare's authorship of the plays.'?

If this is so, the required edit would be p=4,(5);42, (p.39) I'd do it myself but can't remember which comes first the Brit citation or the American one. And I'm such a louse at templates and stuff, I'm afraid I'd muck it up, at a delicate point in negotiations with FAC.Nishidani (talk) 10:15, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Cite needed

Re Tom's edit query if a cite is needed for this:-

Contemporary comments and textual and stylistic studies indicate that the author of these works is compatible with the known biography of William Shakespeare of Stratford-upon-Avon.

I would agree with him that it isn't, but, as Xover originally remarked, it may be queried by FAC reviewers. It is (a) self-evident to those familiar with the material (b) sums up what is laid out in detail below in the text, and (c) it is admitted by sceptics (Rubenstein and Brenda James) that the chronology of the plays and the life of Shakespeare make the best fit in overlapping closely, and this constitutes the strongest difficulty (for them) for anti-Stratfordians, who have consistently failed to produce anything like a strong case interlocking the evidence for the plays, and the evidence about the author. I vaguely recall, among the several thousand pages read on this subject over the last year, that one of our RS made the same point, and I am thinking of Elliott and Valenza. If it is queried as undocumented, I'll reread their papers. But it seems to be unnecessarily pedantic to require a cite for a summary of material already sourced in detail.Nishidani (talk) 12:10, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Since Peter Farey has objected to that phrasing, (How do "...stylistic studies indicate that the author of these works is compatible with the known biography of William Shakespeare"?))I suppose we may have, in lieu of a specific source underwriting the claim, to rephrase it according to sources. Truncating the phrase, as Peter has, makes it look as though 'stylistic studies' is the only subject and not 'contemporary comments'. He has a point since stylistic studies cannot show that 'the author' is compatible with the known biography of WS.' W£hat is required is that two elements be separately sourced (contemporary comments+ textual/stylistic studies). Textual studies just show the negative, i.e., that Shakesperare is no one else.

In sum, the First Folio informs us that the playwright William Shakespeare hailed from Stratford-upon-Avon, spent part of his life in Stratford and part in London, served under both Elizabeth and James, belonged to the same fellowship of players as John Heminges and Henry Condell, and was one of twenty-six principal actors of the company which first performed his own plays. Moreover, the First Folio tells us that Shakespeare had a limited education (he knew some Latin and less Greek), was a friend of Ben Jonson, was at least an acquaintance of Leonard Digges (also of James Mabbe and Hugh Holland), was buried at Stratford where a funeral monument was erected in his honor, and, finally, was the subject of a eulogy by the poet William Basse, who placed Shakespeare in the company of, but thought him finally superior to, Geoffrey Chaucer, Edmund Spenser, and Francis Beaumont.Nelson 2004, p. 156 (check)

What Nelson is saying here implicitly is that the William Shakespeare explicitly identified as the playwright of the plays in 1623 by his distinguished contemporaries is compatible, in terms of the details about him provided by the First Folio, with the William Shakespeare of Stratford-on-Avon whose paper trail tells us he lived in Stratford and London, served under Elizabeth and James, was one of the player in a troupe with Heminges and Condell, as a principal actor, and was buried under a funeral monument in Stratford acclaiming his wisdom and artistry. Nelson uses the word 'entirely incompatible' immediately after this statement for the Earl of Oxford, which in normal prose means he thinks the two records The First Folio and the independent paper trail of WS of Stratford are 'compatible'. Elliott and Valenza make a similar point ('By the light of the documents, Shakespeare looks much more like the Stratford man than the Earl of Oxford.'Elliott & Valenza 2004, p. 394)
As to the stylistic point Peter takes exception to, the most sophisticated computerised analysis, which hitherto has resisted all technical challenges by competent scholars, says this of Marlowe.

‘In passing, it is important to note that although one Marlowe block is much closer to Shakespeare than Bacon or Oxford, Marlowe is not a credible Shakespeare match. Marlowe One is in the same city or county with Shakespeare, not the same ballpark; Marlowe Two is in the same county or state. The closest of seven Marlowe plays might be on the same continent or planet; the other six are in different galaxies, some too distant to compute. Taken individually, most of Marlowe's works are indeed very distant from Shakespeare. When Marlowe's works are taken as a group, however, the odds that Shakespeare could have strayed by chance so persistently and so extravagantly far from his customary boundaries are far lower than the odds of getting hit by lightning or winning the Irish Sweepstakes. Fortunately, we have more than 100,000 words of Marlowe's writing to compare with Shakespeare. The law of large numbers kicks in much more conclusively for him than for Oxford or Bacon, who each have about 3,000 words of poems to test. It buries Marlowe's claim in an ocean of rejections, and despite his having one arguable near-miss, leaves him on a more distant galaxy than Oxford or Bacon. Ellliott & Valenza 2004, p. 355 (check)

Elliott and Valenza's work specifically says with regard to internal stylometric evidence that:

A handy, comfortably geocentric way to visualize the idea of comparative probability distance is to start with a ballpark and work out. All of Shakespeare's core-baseline 3,000-word poem blocks and plays, and 95% of his 3,000-word play verse blocks, would fit into the ballpark, most of them in the infield. Ninety-five to ninety-eight percent of shorter Shakespeare verse blocks would also fit into the ballpark, most of them in the infield. For every order of magnitude difference from Shakespeare's profile-boundary block for poems or play verse, the Shakespeare distance would increase a notch: ballpark, city, county, state, country, continent, planet, moon, outer planets, solar system, galaxy, and another galaxy.Elliott & Valenza 2004, p. 351

I.e., there is an internally consistent authorial identity, a Shakespeare, whose style coheres and is markedly distinct from all of the other tested candidates. This evidence does not point to WS of Stratford. It simple says that whoever wrote Shakespeare cannot be any of the 'alternative candidates' examples of whose writing survives.Nishidani (talk) 16:26, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
This is the sort of thing in the maintext, and behind Tom's drafted remarks for which a citation is being requested. I think (a) Nelson's point is absolutely clear on this, the known facts about WS of Stratford are compatible with the remarks made about the playwright by his various contemporaries in the First Folio. (2) modern internal stylistic tests exclude every other candidate, and affirm a distinctive unitarian author for most of the works. How this is negotiated, by rewriting slightly or insisting on a source for what is a summary statement amply evidenced in the main body of the text, I leave to others.
It is certainly not helpful, at this late date, to fuss overly about what is a quibble, resolvable by splitting the sentence into two parts, with two sources (Nelson and Elliott/Valenza). Nishidani (talk) 16:26, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I'm pretty sure the ref we need is in McCrea. I'll try to find it sometime today. I doubt FAC reviewers are going to jump this article to the head of the line, so we'll resolve it in plenty of time.
We might want to change "style" to "content", referring to the grammar school references and the dearth of ostentatious classical references, although to my mind Spurgeon's and Clemen's imagery studies certainly make the case. Tom Reedy (talk) 16:49, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Peter had a point, as usual. Unfortunately the last edit I just reverted was completely pointless, except if it was meant to create facts on the ground (edit-warring) to undermine article stability and imperil the FAC request. Nishidani (talk) 16:53, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
In reply to Ben Jonson's 'Why is Shapiro cited for what Ogburn supposedly said? This is like hiring the pope to talk about evolution', as you should know from repeated statements over the last year, we cited fringe sources via mainstream academic sources for this article.Nishidani (talk) 17:10, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
As you should know, "Nishidani," I got so revolted by your pettiness many months ago that I have found better things to do than beat my head against the concrete wall of your brains. You are simply playing an interminable game of "we make the rules and the definitions, so don't bother us with news of a difference." Your use of terms like "fringe" and "mainstream academic" is little better than a hoax. You removed all the references from the page to other academic forums that would have disproved your indefensible use of terminology, and revealed that "mainstream academic" journals and sources do and have published materials relevant to the authorship question, and sometimes directly on it, which do not support the future of your illusion. --BenJonson (talk) 18:27, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It's more like citing Dawkins on what creationists say. Paul B (talk) 17:15, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Obviously, stylistic studies do not tell us that anything about the "biography" of Shakespeare in one sense. They don't tell us that he was married to a woman called Anne and had three children. They tell us that the works fit the span of his known working life and his education. I think that's all that needs to be said. Paul B (talk) 17:14, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
The text in the 20:43, 1 March 2011 (UTC) version reads: Contemporary comments and textual studies indicate that the author of these works is consistent with what is known of the life of William Shakespeare.
That wording is not quite right (an author cannot be consistent with what is known). Perhaps changing "author" to "authorship" would work? Johnuniq (talk) 00:21, 2 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I think you're right to question that sentence, Johnuniq. Another case of comparing unlike things. Maybe:
Contemporary comments and textual studies indicate that what may be inferred of the author of these works is consistent with what is known of the life of William Shakespeare.
--Alan W (talk) 04:44, 3 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Hmmm. Let me check some sources and see exactly how they present it. Since it hasn't been flagged at FAC yet, we can mull this over and come up with a well-thought-out solution. (And pardon me for not being as quick to respond as usual; I've had a lot going on in the past few weeks.) Tom Reedy (talk) 16:27, 3 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I'll get this done today. Tom Reedy (talk) 16:22, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good, Tom. I think that does it. (BTW, don't you ever sleep? It must be awfully late over there. :-) --Alan W (talk) 03:42, 7 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Nishidani's vandalism

It took Nishidani five minutes, without any discussion, to remove a footnote that I supplied to a passage written by another contributor. Its obvious why Stephen Moorer got so frustrated with this inanity that he got himself banned through sheer frustration. Nishidan's comment was "neither Green nor Detobel are RS. You know this."

No sir, I don't. The two articles in question were published in a peer reviewed journal, Brief Chronicles. The present article cites James Shapiro's book, Contested Will, multiple times, in spite of the fact that is is not peer reviewed, contains no footnotes, has been documented to contain numerous and well documented errors of fact and judgment, including passing off work done by other scholars as Shapiro's own. Is that what you call RS? Your argument is ab authoritatem, pure and simple. You are contributing to the obsolescence of Wikipedia, which is a damn shame. This is not about politics, as you seem to think. Just keep going the way you and Tom and your compats are going. You're only making yourselves (and wikipedia) look foolish through your manipulation of terminology and brazen incompetence at working with informed parties who have a different perspective than your own. You live in a small room of your own construction, not understanding that there is a world outside that goes on without you. --BenJonson (talk) 18:18, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

This has been discussed ad nauseam. Shapiro is a reliable source according to Wikipedia's standards and procedures. Brief Chronicles is, shall we say, very dubious given the identity of the "peer reviewers" on its board. You live in a very very small room of your own construction, not understanding that there is a world outside that goes on without you - just as it has done for the century and a half that anti-Strats have been proclaiming the imminent victory of their long lost cause. I'll rant as well as thou but it doesn't help much. I might become he that is mad and sent to Oxfordshire. Paul B (talk) 18:27, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
The 'brazen incompetence' of a 'Vandal', sir? The Vandals sacked Rome, and in doing so had much to do with the decay of learning. Which reminds me: Ab authoritatem. That just about sums it up. Tiny Greek, less Latin. There is no such Latin word as the macaronic authoritas. You mean, one presumes, auctoritas (auctoritatem). 'b' is too far away from 'd' on the keyboard for it to be a typo. Ab sir, never takes the accusative, as we used to learn in lesson 3 when Latin was taught in primary school. You should have written: 'ad auctoritatem'. Please simply make suggestions here before editing the text. Nishidani (talk) 18:47, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Ben, “Stephen Moorer” expressed a desire to not have his real name associated with his Wikipedia account, and complained vociferously and repeatedly when Tom in ignorance did so. Unlike you he does not self-identify on his user page, so please try to respect his wishes. There is generally no need to refer to editors by other than their on-wiki usernames. And speaking of identities, since you do self-identify on your user page, as the General Editor of Brief Chronicles, you have a clear conflict of interest where it is concerned. Please refrain from adding mention, links, and references to it without getting consensus for it on the article's talk page.
Your disdain for Wikipedia suggests that perhaps you would find more productive use of your time elsewhere. If you choose to stay, I would request that you attempt to abide by the guideline Assume Good Faith and the policy No Personal Attacks. Your above post is in flagrant violation of both.
If there is a change you would like to see in the article, please try to explain what it is in a clear and cogent manner without resorting to personal attacks, assumptions of bad faith, or by references to what you perceive as deficiencies in other sources used in the article. Shapiro's work fulfills the criteria for a reliable source and is generally accepted among Shakespeare scholars. --Xover (talk) 18:56, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Brief Chronicles has been to the WP:RS/N twice [6] [7] and was rejected both times as a reliable source for this article and for Edward de Vere, 17th Earl of Oxford.
I wonder if we should put a notice at the FAC to expect more of these types of posts from authorship advocates? Tom Reedy (talk) 19:18, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Indeed the FAC page is beginning to resemble the SAC talk page before ArbCom. Tom Reedy (talk) 19:47, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Nah, the regular reviewers at FAC, and the FAC delegates in particular, are used to this kind of thing. It happens on a lot of even slightly controversial articles. The FAC process seems to deal fairly well with this type of disruption, so we should generally just sit tight and be ready to address any substantive points raised by actual reviewers. Baseless complaints like those are best ignored. --Xover (talk) 20:01, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I get somewhat annoyed at the Tom-and-his-Jerrycan-badgering about the dubious duopoly said to run this show. It's terribly unfair to the substantial work done since September, what, 6 months, when our draft started to get outside input, where many of 'our' edits were adjustments to wise advice or comments from fellow wikipedians. Pity one can't run a statitical analysis of who did what over the last half year to show the incisiveness of all of the other editors. Nishidani (talk) 20:07, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Wording on the will

A recent edit has improved wording about the will (first para of the Shakespeare's death section), but has introduced a problem:

The will also omits shares in the new Globe Theatre...

It's the mention of shares that is omitted (all wills omit actual shares). I haven't got time to ponder this now—perhaps someone will fix it. Johnuniq (talk) 06:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Fails to mention

'omits' has been provisorily emended to 'The will also fails to mention his shares in the new Globe Theatre

The language suggests to the reader that Shakespeare is known to have had shares in the newly rebuilt Globe theatre (his shares). Yet we only have records of his shares in the old Globe theatre long before his retirement. Many scholars suggest that the absence of reference to shares in the will may indicate that he disposed of them before or around the time the Globe burnt down in 1613.
For this reason I would suggest 'The will also makes no mention of any shares Shakespeare might have had in the (new) Globe Theatre.' Of course the source is Price (not a good RS, and I can't at this late hour find my copy of her book to check her language. . .Nishidani (talk) 21:53, 4 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Clickable image

Edward de Vere, 17th Earl of OxfordFrancis BaconWilliam ShakespeareChristopher MarloweWilliam Stanley, 6th Earl of Derby
Bacon, Derby, Marlowe and Oxford (Clockwise from top right, Shakespeare center) have each been proposed as the true authors (clickable image)

What would everyone think of using a clickable image for the first image in the article? Each image would be clickable, meaning that if you click on the picture of Shakespeare, you'll be taken to his article, and if you click on Bacon, you'll be taken to his article and so on. To see how it would look, check my sandbox.-RHM22 (talk) 00:16, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I think that's a good idea because many people are trained by websites to expect that such clicking would work. I have no idea how FAC reviewers may regard a clickable image: is it helpful, or is it fluff? If no other comments, perhaps make the change and see the reaction? Johnuniq (talk) 01:25, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I like it. I moved it here; we can delete it when we decide. Tom Reedy (talk) 02:52, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Question: How do we get to the original description page if people want to determine the sources for the image? Tom Reedy (talk) 02:55, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Click the gray two-box icon thingy at the right of the caption, just under the image. Johnuniq (talk) 03:24, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
You beat me to the answer, Johnuniq! I just discovered that myself. Anyway, I like it. Doesn't look like it's easy to get right, but RHM22 has just saved us the trouble. I say let's go with it! Thanks, RHM22!
As for the reaction of FAC reviewers, there is a precedent. A clickable image has been used in Samuel Johnson, and that is very much a Featured Article. --Alan W (talk) 03:39, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
No problem! I just figured out how to make clickable images, so this is actually my trial run. I added the clickable image, so please feel free to tweak the caption any way you like.-RHM22 (talk) 03:59, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Great work for a first attempt, RHM22! All: I have tentatively modified the caption (also to correct what I believe is a grammatical error). I understand that further tweaks might be desirable, but let's see how this looks. (Not this one; see the article page). --Alan W (talk) 04:15, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I think it looks great. Thanks a lot, RHM22. Tom Reedy (talk) 16:24, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
No problem! Let me know if anyone needs any other images made clickable.-RHM22 (talk) 21:04, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Alternate section titles

In an attempt to address Nikkimaria's concerns at FAC, I've tried an alternate set of section titles. These are decidedly unpoetic, but then that was a thrust of her concern. They also ruthlessly avoid including the words “Shakespeare” and “Authorship” in the headings, as these are always implied from context in this article. These are somewhat boring in the same way passive voice tends to be boring, but then that is somewhat the point: the headings should be a bit dry and factual rather than fun and poetic. Anyways, take a look at them in the link above—particularly how this looks in the Table of Contents—and chime in on whether that would be a good way to address the concerns. --Xover (talk) 13:07, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I think that perhaps you're being a bit too academic using such jargon as "alternate attribution" (which should be "alternative") and "internal evidence" instead of the more specific "against Shakespeare's authorship" and "from the works". I can see taking the duplicated phrases out in the sub-headings, even though it leaves it a bit terse IMO. Why not ask Nikkimaria exactly which titles and subtitles she meant as too "poetic"? They seem merely descriptive to me, even literally so, which I think is more suited for a general audience instead of those intimately familiar with the academic literature scene. Tom Reedy (talk) 16:21, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Completely incidental, but you may want to reread that passive voice article you linked if you feel passive voice is boring. For example, your sentence that states "as these are always implied" has a passive voice clause. Sorry, I'm always afraid Geoffrey Pullum will kidnap me in the night if I say bad things about passive voice.Kaiguy (talk) 18:42, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Interesting what you say about the passive voice and Geoffrey Pullum (someone else I now want to read, thanks to a hint by a Wikipedian), Kaiguy. But at this time that topic will not be discussed by me any further. :-) Tom, I think you are right in that we don't want to sound too dried out and technical. But I also think that some of Xover's suggested changes are good and might be seriously considered. As I've said before, I don't like "Rise of Bardolatry and Precursors of Doubt". I think "Bardolatry and Doubt" is a distinct improvement. There are a few other changes we might want to consider as well. Just my two cents, or tuppence, or however you say it in Britain these days. --Alan W (talk) 01:17, 6 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
How about "Bardolatry and early doubt"? Tom Reedy (talk) 02:28, 6 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I think that would do fine. (And, yes, lowercase except for the initial cap; you've reminded me of the Wikipedia header style. Old habits die hard.) --Alan W (talk) 03:34, 6 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comparison

Current headings Proposed headings
1 Overview 1 Overview
2 Case against Shakespeare's authorship 2 Case for alternative attribution
    2.1 Shakespeare's background     2.1 Background
    2.2 Shakespeare's education and literacy     2.2 Education and literacy
    2.3 Shakespeare's name as a pseudonym     2.3 Name as a pseudonym
    2.4 Missing documentary evidence     2.4 Missing documentary evidence
    2.5 Shakespeare's death     2.5 Death
3 Case for Shakespeare's authorship 3 Traditional attribution
    3.1 Historical evidence for Shakespeare's authorship     3.1 Historical evidence
    3.2 Personal testimonies by contemporaries     3.2 Contemporary testimony
    3.3 Recognition by other playwrights and writers     3.3 Recognition by peers
    3.4 Death of Shakespeare     3.4 Death
    3.5 Evidence for Shakespeare's authorship from his works     3.5 Internal evidence
4 History of the authorship question 4 History
    4.1 Rise of bardolatry and precursors of doubt     4.1 Bardolatry and early doubt
    4.2 Open dissent and the first alternative candidate     4.2 First alternative candidate
    4.3 Search for proof     4.3 Search for proof
    4.4 Other candidates emerge     4.4 Other candidates emerge
    4.5 Authorship in the mainstream media     4.5 In mainstream media
5 Alternative candidates 5 Alternative candidates
    5.1 Sir Francis Bacon     5.1 Sir Francis Bacon
    5.2 Edward de Vere, 17th Earl of Oxford     5.2 Edward de Vere, 17th Earl of Oxford
    5.3 Christopher Marlowe     5.3 Christopher Marlowe
    5.4 William Stanley, 6th Earl of Derby     5.4 William Stanley, 6th Earl of Derby
6 Footnotes 6 Footnotes
7 References 7 References
8 External links 8 External links

Discussion

The above table compares the current and proposed headings. The proposals include the comments above ("Case for alternative attribution" and "Bardolatry and early doubt") and two changes that I suggest ("Name as pseudonym" changed to "Name as a pseudonym", and "In the mainstream media" changed to "In mainstream media"). I think the proposals are good, except that I would try not changing the headings for sections 2 and 3. Johnuniq (talk) 04:09, 6 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I just noticed the proposal includes two identical headings ("Death"). I'm not sure of guidelines on that, but identical headings should be avoided since a link with an anchor like #Death would link only to the first occurrence. There does not seem to be a good way to avoid that. Johnuniq (talk) 04:15, 6 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
The first thing I see is that "Case against Shakespeare's authorship" is not equivalent to "Case for alternative attribution". This article is about the "Shakespeare authorship question", i.e the various arguments against Shakespeare's authorship, not the cases for others' authorship. More later, but it appears to me that a radical reworking of the headers is not called for by the FAC commentary. Tom Reedy (talk) 16:35, 6 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Chiming in here: I actually agree with Johnuniq that the headings for sections 2 and 3 should not be changed, as those are good examples of instances in which it makes more sense to partially replicate the title than to exclude it. It would likely also make sense to have "Shakespeare's background" instead of simply "Background", or to choose a different word altogether. I like the revised 2.2-2.4 titles, although you might consider "Lack of" instead of "Missing", depending on the nuances of what you're trying to convey. "Death" doesn't really make sense, but neither do the originals in that case - you need something entirely different for those two, not sure what. 3-3.2 are great. I'm still not sure that "Recognition" is the right word, but the revised title is better than the original. "Internal evidence" isn't entirely clear - maybe "Evidence in the works" or the canon, or "Internal textual evidence"? Should keep "Rise" in 4.1 for clarity, otherwise fine. Everything else looks fine in the revised version. Hope that helps! Nikkimaria (talk) 18:28, 6 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Nikkimaria: when you say that "the headings for sections 2 and 3 should not be changed," do you mean just 2 and 3, or all the subheadings under them as well? With a few exceptions, I would be happy leaving all the headings and subheadings alone. For example, "mainstream media" for me doesn't suggest the same thing as "the mainstream media," though that might be another case of personal preference that is hard to explain. Another problem is "Recognition by peers". I think it begs the question of who were Shakespeare's peers in the first place. Some anti-Stratfordians seem to doubt that Shakespeare was a playwright at all (I think of Alden Brooks arguing that he was merely a play "broker"). It makes clear immediately who the peers were according to Stratfordians if we leave in "other playwrights and writers". And I agree with Tom that talking of "attribution" smacks of academic jargon. (In addition to his other reason for leaving those headers alone.) These words would likely not spark the same immediate recognition in the general reader as in those who have already thought long about the SAQ.
I would also argue against restoring "Rise of" to "Bardolatry and early doubt". (I've made it clear elsewhere that that is one case where I am uncomfortable with the way it is now.) That leads to the unintentional ambiguity of reading the header as "Rise of bardolatry and [rise of] early doubt". "Rise of early doubt" makes little sense, as the reader would soon grasp, but we would want to avoid that suggestion rather than risk the reader's fumbling around with what is really meant.
I do think you make a good point, Nikkimaria, about "Shakespeare's death" (and "Death of Shakespeare"). Readers might think, What about his death? Is this a biography? But we know that the reason for these sections is not simply to describe the circumstances of his death. Better would be something like "Argument for [against] Shakespeare's authorship based on circumstances associated with his death". Only it wouldn't be better, if only because this is much too long for a section header! But it would be good if we could convey that in fewer words. --Alan W (talk) 21:57, 6 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I meant just the level-2 headings 2 and 3, not the subheadings thereof. Nikkimaria (talk) 23:17, 6 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I've changed the ones considered to be most problematic according to the comments. Unless something is really misleading, I think we're creating more of a problem instead of solving one. Tom Reedy (talk) 00:23, 7 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Although it solves part of the problem, I can't help thinking (and, yes, here I go again) that "Memorials to Shakespeare and his will" sounds too much like "Memorials to Shakespeare and to his will". Is it just me? Is my imagination running wild? If anyone thinks so, please feel free to say it. Other opinions are welcome. The important thing is to anticipate now, as best we can, the way new readers of this page will understand these headings at first glance. --Alan W (talk) 02:00, 7 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Just saw your latest revision of this heading, Tom. In itself, I'd say it is excellent and completely avoids the problem that made me so uneasy. The only thing that gives me pause regarding "Shakespeare's death—a different perspective" is of an entirely different nature. It is the anti-Stratfordians' perspective about Shakespeare's death that is "different". Here you apply that adjective to the Stratfordians' perspective on his death. --Alan W (talk) 03:24, 7 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I think Tom's edits have resolved the headings issue. The "different perspective" is just a side effect of the fact that the article already has a section on Shakespeare's death, and the second section presents a different perspective. While anything can be improved, I don't see a problem that needs attention. Johnuniq (talk) 07:25, 7 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I agree that the slightly longer versions of the section headings are clearer, particularly for the casual non-expert reader. Not quite convinced by 'different perspective' though. Poujeaux (talk) 10:04, 7 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. ^ Shapiro 2010, pp. 138-9 (Am.ed.?).
  2. ^ Ridge 1991, p. 242