Talk:Cervix/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (talk · contribs) 17:44, 27 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this article, which was created on June 8, 2001. It appears that this was among the first three thousand articles created on wikipedia according to this report. Wow!!!--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:44, 27 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

The disambiguation link in the toolbox notes 2 redirects and dab pages that need to be addressed.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 18:00, 27 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

The first thing that I have noticed is that there is no discussion of contraception in this article. I think cervical barrier techniques like Diaphragm (contraceptive), Cervical cap and Contraceptive sponge should be mentioned here. Maybe even spermicide.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:52, 27 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

In order for the contraception suggestion to make sense there needs to be a mention of the fact that during fertilization it is part of the pathway for the male sperm.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:57, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

The structure section needs to be re-formatted. All stubby subsections need to be expanded or merged into larger paragraphs. This includes everything from position to development.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:56, 27 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Every paragraph needs at least one WP:IC from a WP:RS.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:57, 27 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

WP:LEAD

The first sentence is misleading as written "The cervix (Latin: neck) is one of the parts of the female reproductive system that lies between the uterus and vagina." It is "one of the parts of the female reproductive system" and it does lie "between the uterus and vagina". But the sentence implies that several things lie between the two.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:24, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Although cervical cancer is an important topic, the cervix is also important as a part of the pathway for fertilization and one of the stages of the pathway targeted by barrier forms of contraception. This needs to be prominent in the LEAD and detailed in the main body.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:24, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
This should be further evaluated to determine whether it summarizes the article when the article has been revised toward the end of a review.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:24, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
The final paragraph needs to be merged or expanded.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:36, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Structure

Again "The cervix is one of the organs in the female reproductive system between the vagina and uterus." Are there other organs between them. The picture to the right shows an orifice on either end of the cervix. Does these count as organs?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:51, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"The cervical canal varies greatly in length and width" over the course of one's life or from woman to woman?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:05, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"The part of the cervix outside of the external opening in the vagina is called the ectocervix, and the part within the vagina known as the endocervix" seems to be unclear. I think within should be changed to beyond.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:33, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
During intercourse, is it common for the male genitalia to make contact with the ectocervix? Endocervix?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:36, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"between the squamous epithelium lining the ectocervix to the columnar epithelium that lines the endocervix" is ungrammatical. A between is usually followed by an "and" at some point in the phrase.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:42, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Cervical mucus

Are there any forms of physical hostility to sperm/fertilization embodied by the cervix?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:34, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- E.g., could the cervical mucus have complications that make sperm transit hazardous.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:46, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
When your water breaks is it the Mucus plug being dislodged?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:52, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Cervix as reservoir

This topic also seems misleading. It suggests that the sperm end their travel at the cervix. However, Human fertilization suggests otherwise.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:59, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Clinical significance

Cryotherapy and Cervical conization clearly need to be linked. These are not everyday terms.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:40, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Worldwide, cervical cancer is the fifth most deadly cancer in women" not found in WP:IC.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:34, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Do any instant pregnancy tests involve contact with the surface of the cervix?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:34, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
" It affects about 16 per 100,000 women per year and kills about 9 per 100,000 per year" WP:IC does not seem to be working.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:17, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Images are all PD.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:29, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

This article seems quite deficient. I am FAILing the article. It needs plenty of work. When it has been revised resubmit it. If you would like to contest this review please consider WP:GAR.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:35, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your review. I will continue to work on the article and make many of the changes you suggest. I hope that you are able to re-review the article when changes have been made and the article renominated. --LT910001 (talk) 07:17, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]