Talk:Heat-pipe tectonics

Comments from Ariel

• It like how the figures are simple and neat.
• Sentence structure and use of language in general could be improved.
• Some sections need more elaboration, e.g. "existing theories" and "beyond heat pipe". Also, the definition of heat pipe could be more precise and detailed, e.g. how crustal resurfacing rate changes through time etc.
• It would be great if you could add a section on how to testify the heat pipe model, e.g. detrital zircon age patterns.

Comments from Jacqueline

1. good use of tables! It makes it much easier to understand than paragraphs of words
2. can try to place the figures better, sometimes it’s confusing as to which part of the text the figures are trying to illustrate
3. Can add a few sentences to elaborate more on “Heat-pipe evidence”. Do all observations correspond to all hypotheses? Or are some hypotheses generated from one or two observations only?
4. Can try to make the figures clearer, e.g. figure 2 took me a while to understand Numbered list item

JacqCLSin (talk) 18:58, 28 November 2019 (UTC)

Recommendation from Alex:

1. Adding "Reference" section for the reference list. For "Check date values in: |date= (help)" problem, it can be solved by removing "month". (E.g. (2013-09) --> (2013)).
2. More explanation can be added in "The Present Earth" sub-section to show how heat-pipe model relates to the earth dynamics.
3. Adding more hyperlinks where any scientific concept are involved so that readers can understand the basis of those concepts and enhance understanding for the text.

--Alexnlk (talk) 12:47, 21 October 2019 (UTC)

Recommendation: 1. More elaboration can be made on the 4 methods to build up the internal energy in the "hypothesis" section, e.g: by what impacts can the accumulation be made? how is the metallic core formed? the mechanism of nuclear decay? how is the tidal heat generated? 2. It would better summarize the observation on Io into bullet points i.e. 1. extraordinary large surface heat flux 2. high relief 3. silicate magma 3. hyperlinks can be made on the words in the introduction so that readers can view the prefered content more conveniently. For example, hyperlink can be used for the word "heat-pipe Earth hypothesis" so readers can be directed to the heat-pipe Earth hypothesis section. --Charlespsml (talk) 13:51, 15 October 2019 (UTC)

Recommendation from Abraham

1. Please look at the section Heat-pipe Planets: Moon. "i.e." means in other words. You should use "e.g." instead of "i.e." when you want to give examples.
2. Maybe you can make text bold to highlight the numbered lists. For example, under Heat-pipe Earth Hypothesis, the four methods to build up internal energy. It may be more easy to be distinguished from paragraphs.
3. The full name of TTG gneiss should be stated at the first time you use TTG. Please look at Heat-pipe Earth Hypothesis: Existed Models & their constraints: Barberton and Pilbara Greenstone Belt.

--AMLSIU (talk) 12:40, 22 October 2019 (UTC)

Comments from Jacqueline

1. good use of tables! It makes it much easier to understand than paragraphs of words
2. can try to place the figures better, sometimes it’s confusing as to which part of the text the figures are trying to illustrate
3. Can add a few sentences to elaborate more on “Heat-pipe evidence”. Do all observations correspond to all hypotheses? Or are some hypotheses generated from one or two observations only?
4. Can try to make the figures clearer, e.g. figure 2 took me a while to understand Numbered list item

JacqCLSin (talk) 18:58, 28 November 2019 (UTC)

Comments from Yansy

1. English can be improved, especially for the use of articles and words. E.g. No tectonism before 3.2 billion years ago. -> There is no tectonism 3.2 billion years ago. Also, some words are not consistent in terms of capitalization, like "Earth".

2. The figures are simple and easy to understand!

3. You may consider adding a line or two about the importance of studying the heat-pipe tectonics in the introduction to arouse the audience's interest.

4. Maybe the figures can be placed horizontally under the "Theory" section. I thought the figure next to the section about Io is about Io but actually it's related to the fundamental concepts of the theory.

Yansytang (talk) 03:22, 29 November 2019 (UTC)