Talk:Mobile source air pollution
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Great start with this article! The biggest thing to improve it at this point is citing sources. Pretty much all the information in the article ought to be traceable to the specific source it comes from.
To this end, http://www.epa.gov/airquality/peg_caa/carstrucks.html is a good replacement site for the dead EPA links referenced in I think citations 5 & 6 (I'm not sure how to do all the Wikipedia source edits) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Nathan24601 (talk • contribs) 22:31, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
Some other improvements could include:
- Adding wikilinks to other articles as appropriate throughout the article.
- The lead should be more specific. It should give readers a good short overview of what mobile source air pollution is, and how it is regulated.
- Converting the bullet points in the first section to normal prose, and or possibly have each bullet as a subsection, and add a bit more on how each of these is regulated.
If you have any questions about that stuff, just let me know.--Sage Ross - Online Facilitator, Wikimedia Foundation (talk) 18:05, 6 April 2011 (UTC)
Comments on recent changes
Great start on the article. I like the outline for the most part, I think you cover all of the main points. I might think about putting your section regarding regulating agencies before the section on regulatory laws and standards. That may help people understand where the laws and standards are coming from. Also- there is a lot of jargon or language that makes it hard to read. Your information is good, the language simply did not hold my attention or make your points explicatively clear. Beyond some rewrites for language I would also be sure to add some links to other wikipedia articles. I know it's already been labeled an orphan but I thought I would point it out again. Overall good start. Jthebooknerd87 (talk) 18:15, 9 April 2011 (UTC)
I think this is a pretty well written article. I agree with your first commenter in that you need to add more links to other wiki articles. A section on the different types of sources of msap may be nice, too. Your mention of them in the intro is brief, and it could be expanded and organized better as a separate section. Bkmertz (talk) 02:55, 10 April 2011 (UTC)
Article looks good, however, more links to other articles. Also the links that you have inside the last couple of paragraphs if you could either move to the end and create another section e.g. External links or a link with another display title. I liked the idea of a table for the regulations. Overall good job. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dnpatton (talk • contribs) 19:25, 19 April 2011 (UTC)
Succinctly done, but if I remember correctly, you guys are still editing off of Wiki. My only recommendation is to include pictures of those stickers comparing auto emissions at the dealership. Great entertainment value. IUrangerb (talk) 00:34, 28 April 2011 (UTC)IUrangerB
Mobile source classification
According to Wikipedia:Manual of Style#Article titles, headings, and sections (permanent link here), many words which are capitalized in this article need to be converted to lower case.
—Wavelength (talk) 23:51, 3 May 2011 (UTC)