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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:38, 11 June 2019 (UTC)

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High Orchard

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Llanthony Provender Mill, High Orchard
Llanthony Provender Mill, High Orchard
Fielding & Platt 150-ton rivetting machine (1885)
Fielding & Platt 150-ton rivetting machine (1885)

Created by Philafrenzy (talk) and Whispyhistory (talk). Nominated by Philafrenzy (talk) at 21:28, 21 March 2019 (UTC).

  • This article is new enough and long enough. The hook facts are cited inline, the article is neutral and I detected no copyright issues. A QPQ has been done. The image is in the public domain but I don't think it goes with the hook. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:42, 1 April 2019 (UTC)
  • Hi, I came by to promote this, but I find the hook more a statement of fact than hooky. It's also not clear that High Orchard is an industrial area. Could you come up with something more attention grabbing, perhaps playing on some of the names or the incarnations of the area? Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 19:18, 4 April 2019 (UTC)
  • ALT1:... that an arson attack on Llanthony Provender Mill (pictured) in Gloucester's High Orchard area left it a "dilapidated shell"? Philafrenzy (talk) 21:21, 4 April 2019 (UTC)
  • @Philafrenzy: thank you for the alt, but isn't that an obvious result? I've combed the article for other hooks, but the material is very dry. Yoninah (talk) 13:15, 5 April 2019 (UTC)
I will have another look at my sources. Philafrenzy (talk) 13:19, 5 April 2019 (UTC)
  • That's interesting, thanks. Do you have a link for "rivetting machine"? Calling on new reviewer to look at ALT2. Yoninah (talk) 22:09, 13 April 2019 (UTC)
Linked, using British spelling. Philafrenzy (talk) 23:08, 13 April 2019 (UTC)
Honestly I don't really find ALT2 to be interesting. It seems rather dry, and perhaps a bit too complicated (it seems hard to tell if it's focusing on the industrial area or the machine). I think the original hook fact (about the area formerly being industrial but is now a shopping district) has potential: perhaps a new hook can be suggested based on that? Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 11:53, 20 April 2019 (UTC)
@Philafrenzy and Whispyhistory: Could you suggest alternate hooks here? Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 23:59, 22 April 2019 (UTC)
I have unstruck both the original hook and Alt1 for further discussion. Philafrenzy (talk) 10:54, 30 April 2019 (UTC)
ALT3 ... that High Orchard (buildings pictured), a former industrial area in Gloucester, England, is now the site of a shopping centre?
ALT3a ... that High Orchard (buildings pictured), a former industrial area in Gloucester, England, is now a shopping centre?
Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 12:22, 4 May 2019 (UTC)
Alt4 ... that High Orchard (buildings pictured) in Gloucester, England, was part of a medieval priory, then an industrial area, and is now the site of a shopping centre?
The image is splendid, and if it is to be used, the "(buildings pictured)" bit of the hook should follow mention of the industrial area. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 12:46, 4 May 2019 (UTC)
Alt4a ... that High Orchard in Gloucester, England, was part of a medieval priory, then an industrial area (buildings pictured), and is now the site of a shopping centre? Philafrenzy (talk) 14:24, 4 May 2019 (UTC)
  • As this has been stuck for over a month with no further objections, it appears the way forward is ALT4a. Let's go with that. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 01:51, 6 June 2019 (UTC)
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