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The result was: promoted by BobAmnertiopsisChatMe! 22:20, 28 June 2014 (UTC)

Louis John Gill

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Entrance to San Diego Zoo

Created/expanded by Keizers (talk). Nominated by MelanieN (talk) at 17:23, 26 June 2014 (UTC).

Thanks for the suggestions, User:Czar. I think I have dealt with the problems; please take another look. --MelanieN (talk) 15:46, 28 June 2014 (UTC)

I'm still seeing some close paraphrasing:

By 1913, Louis Gill was promoted to chief draftsman and a year later formed a partnership with his uncle known as Gill and Gill, Architects. During this time, Louis Gill assisted on the designs of the La Jolla Women’s Club, ... (source)

By 1913 Louis had been named Chief Draftsman for his uncle, and in 1914 they formed a partnership: Gill and Gill, Architects. During this time Louis contributed to the designs for the several notable buildings including La Jolla Woman's Club ... (WP article)

I'd go back to the sources and make sure that every sentence is presented as its own idea, not just in rephrased, parallel structures. "During this time", for example, should not just be replaced with another turn of phrase, but recast in such a way to be materially different from the source, etc. czar  18:52, 28 June 2014 (UTC)

OK, is that better? --MelanieN (talk) 20:03, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
Yep! Hook checks out, good work, gtg czar  21:00, 28 June 2014 (UTC)