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- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 21:30, 28 May 2020 (UTC)
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Lynden Archer
![Cornell University's Lynden Archer giving a lecture in January 2020.](http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/thumb/f/fd/Lynden_Archer_UCDavis.jpg/160px-Lynden_Archer_UCDavis.jpg)
Cornell University's Lynden Archer giving a lecture in January 2020.
... that Lynden Archer (pictured) has developed materials technologies to prevent the failure of lithium batteries?- ALT1:
... that Lynden Archer (pictured) has researched materials for new electrolytes, membranes, and electrodes to prevent the failure of lithium batteries? - ALT2:
... that Lynden Archer (pictured) was involved in the development of materials technologies that aimed to prevent the failure of lithium batteries?
- ALT1:
- Comment: I would suggest embedding a cropped image, such as
{{CSS image crop|Image = Lynden Archer UCDavis.jpg|bSize = 600|cWidth = 250|oLeft = 165|oTop = 30}}
- Comment: I would suggest embedding a cropped image, such as
Created by AthalGolwen (talk). Self-nominated at 02:23, 28 April 2020 (UTC).
- Hi AthalGolwen and thanks for your nomination. Before this is officially reviewed, I should mention that your proposed hook sounds a little promotional, as currently worded. While a variation of this hook can still be used, the wording "has developed" might be a little problematic, and I'd recommend changing it slightly. Could you suggest some additional hooks that can be used, any other facts that might be suitable? epicgenius (talk) 13:10, 28 April 2020 (UTC)
- I was talking with Narutolovehinata5 on Discord, who suggested the following alt hook: "
... that Lynden Archer (pictured) was involved in the development of material technologies that aimed to prevent the failure of lithium batteries?". Feel free to correct this if it's wrong, or to suggest other hooks. epicgenius (talk) 14:12, 28 April 2020 (UTC) - Thank you so much for pointing this out Epicgenius! I just drafted another alternative hook and added both mine and yours and Narutolovehinata5's suggestion here. AthalGolwen (talk) 14:42, 28 April 2020 (UTC)
- I was talking with Narutolovehinata5 on Discord, who suggested the following alt hook: "
Long enough, new enough, no copyvio issues. FWIW I prefer the ALT2 hook Gbawden (talk) 07:59, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
- I've prepared a crop at File:Lynden Archer UCDavis (cropped).jpg, which may be better for the DYK picture. The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 08:12, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
Hi, I came by to promote this, but these hooks are hardly going to be of interest to a broad readership. In fact, they are so technical and multisyllabic as to be incomprehensible. I suggest that you add to the article which discovery Scientific American was talking about, and then write a hook like this:
- ALT3:
... that in 2017, Scientific American listed one of Lynden Archer's discoveries among their top 10 ideas that will change the world?Yoninah (talk) 22:55, 23 May 2020 (UTC)
- @Yoninah: I added the info to the article and corrected the year in your suggested hook:
- ALT3a:
... that in 2016, Scientific American listed one of Lynden Archer's discoveries among their top 10 ideas that will change the world?AthalGolwen (talk) 00:45, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
Thank you. I see that you paraphrased the source, but your wording
their top 10 ideas that will change the world
is not encyclopedic. I thought it was the name of the list, but the name is "World Changing Ideas". So I suggest using the source wording in quotes as follows:- ALT3b: ... that in 2016, Scientific American listed one of Lynden Archer's discoveries among their top 10 "World Changing Ideas"?
- Since I suggested the hook, another reviewer is needed for ALT3b. Yoninah (talk) 12:10, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
ALT3b sounds good. I'm assuming good faith here for the source since the Scientific American links are behind a paywall. Rest of the review per above. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:54, 27 May 2020 (UTC)