Template:Did you know nominations/Shah Budak
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The result was: promoted by AirshipJungleman29 talk 00:03, 19 October 2024 (UTC)
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Shah Budak
- ... that Shah Budak, a prince of the Anatolian Dulkadir dynasty, blinded his nephew Shahruh in retaliation for the same treatment his son Feyyaz received?
- Source: * Har-El, Shai (1995). Struggle for Domination in the Middle East: The Ottoman-Mamluk War, 1485-91. E.J. Brill. p. 195. ISBN 9004101802. OCLC 624096003. Retrieved 19 March 2023.
- Reviewed:
Improved to Good Article status by Aintabli (talk).
Number of QPQs required: 0. Nominator has fewer than 5 past nominations.
Aintabli (talk) 18:26, 2 October 2024 (UTC).
Sourced in article, passed GA recently, generally well written, interesting enough, my only issue is the hook is phrased weirdly in the last half in a way that feels strangely ambiguous. "in retaliation for the same treatment his son Feyyaz received?" can you think of another way to say this? Also maybe don't mention the name of his son; possibly do "in retaliation for the same having been done to his son"? PARAKANYAA (talk) 20:14, 2 October 2024 (UTC)
- Alt1 ... that Shah Budak, a prince of the Anatolian Dulkadir dynasty, blinded his nephew Shahruh in retaliation for his son's similar fate? @PARAKANYAA: How does it sound now? Aintabli (talk) 15:12, 3 October 2024 (UTC)
I still think that phrasing is slightly awkward, but it's better and less ambiguous. PARAKANYAA (talk) 18:47, 3 October 2024 (UTC)- Having two non-bolded links next to each other is discouraged by WP:DYKMOS. jlwoodwa (talk) 05:55, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
- Alt2 ... that Shah Budak, a prince of the Dulkadir dynasty in Anatolia, blinded his nephew Shahruh in retaliation for his son's similar fate? @Jlwoodwa and PARAKANYAA: Thank you. I've fixed the issue. Aintabli (talk) 15:08, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
