Template:Did you know nominations/US federal recognition of Native Hawaiians

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:39, 17 November 2015 (UTC)

US federal recognition of Native Hawaiians

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Queen Liliʻuokalani, the last monarch of the Kingdom of Hawaii

... that the United States is creating a Native Hawaiian tribal nation in Hawaii with elections of delegates for a $2.6 million constitutional convention for its federal recognition of Native Hawaiians?

Created by Mark Miller (talk). Self-nominated at 04:02, 7 October 2015 (UTC).

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Eligibility

Article created by Mark Miller on October 6, 2015 with 7739 characters (0 words) "readable prose size"
Article is NPOV, currently stable, no edit wars, no dispute tags

Hook, Sourcing and copyvio check

Every paragraph sourced
No bare URLs, and no external links used as inline sources
Hook is fine at 197 characters, sourced and stated in the article
The last sentence in the article, which is the basis for part of the hook, is worded almost identical to the source. You need to reword this sentence. No other copyvio/close paraphrasing found.

This issue has been resolved. — Maile (talk) 13:04, 12 November 2015 (UTC)

The lead says "over a hundred and eighty federal statutes", but when I read the source, it says 160. Did I miss something in the source?

This issue has been resolved. — Maile (talk) 16:12, 11 November 2015 (UTC)

Image

No image used, but I would recommend the Liluokalani image. My understanding on the Commons licensing is that the original black and white is Common Domain, but that you colorized it and have freely licensed it on Commons. It's wonderful.

Image added. — Maile (talk) 15:05, 11 November 2015 (UTC)

Awaiting response on the one copyvio issue and the 180 or 160 issue. Everything else is fine. — Maile (talk) 22:37, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Thanks you so much. I have been on a Wiki Break. I will make the needed fixes and respond momentarily.Mark Miller (talk) 02:46, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

Done Lede text reduced to main fact that federal statues have been enacted without count. Uses the source fact without using numbers that may be time sensitive, according to publication. Image added with caption (feel free to delete or edit for brevity).--Mark Miller (talk) 05:42, 10 November 2015 (UTC)

I adjusted the hook so that the "delegates" intralink no longer goes through a redirect. Thanks for creating and nominating this article, Mark Miller, this is great news I was pleased to read about. —GrammarFascist _contribs ^talk 19:57, 4 November 2015 (UTC)

Thank you GrammarFascist. I will get to this tonight or tomorrow Maile66. Been offline completely for a bit.--Mark Miller (talk) 02:20, 10 November 2015 (UTC)

@Mark Miller: Just so we're clear here, since it's been a while. Image has been added. You did adjust that one sentence in the lead. Here's what I see, and you tell me if it needs a tweaking:

Article: If held, the election is expected to cost about $150,000 to be conducted by D.C. based firm, Elections America. The constitutional convention has an estimated price of 2.6 million dollars.

Source: The constitutional convention will cost about $2.6 million. The election itself will cost about $150,000 and will be conducted by Washington, D.C.-based contractor Elections America.

There's only so many ways that information can be worded. How about putting it in quotes? — Maile (talk) 15:05, 11 November 2015 (UTC)

Sure, or just simplified to the bottom line facts (with some additional tweaks): When held, the election is expected to have a price of about $150,000, and will be carried out by Washington D.C. firm, Elections America. The constitutional convention itself has an estimated price tag of 2.6 million dollars.

Done This should work better.Mark Miller (talk) 04:10, 12 November 2015 (UTC)

All right, then. Thanks for all your hard work and expertise. This one is Good2Go. — Maile (talk) 13:04, 12 November 2015 (UTC)

Thank you for your patient review and help!--Mark Miller (talk) 00:20, 13 November 2015 (UTC)