Template:Did you know nominations/Verna Mersereau
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Verna Mersereau
- ... that American stage actress Verna Mersereau performed her traditional classical dances before royalty in Calcutta?
Created by Silver seren (talk) and FloridaArmy (talk).
Number of QPQs required: 1. Nominator has 128 past nominations.
SilverserenC 01:49, 18 September 2024 (UTC).
New enough (moved draft), long enough. No copyvio from spotcheck of the first 3 sources. Very nice work with the newspapers. On prose, just a double check on whether we should be writing "Europe and the Orient", it feels outdated. Perhaps it should be in quotes, as I am unsure modern readers will understand what "the Orient" means. In Career, I am unclear how she joined a company in 1928 if she had already travelled with them in 1927.For the hook, I am unsure where "ancient" comes from, it is not in the sources. I would also suggest wording it as "royalty in Calcutta", as I'm not sure Calcutta itself had specific royalty. Otherwise, it is interesting and sourced. CMD (talk) 13:48, 23 September 2024 (UTC)
- Hi, Chipmunkdavis! I've fixed usage of "the Orient", per your suggestion. I only used the term because the papers in question did without technically defining what area that referred to. I've fixed the year discrepancy. I've changed the hook to "in".
- As for ancient, I would love for alternative suggestions on that one. I included it for a particular reason. If it just says "classical dance", then people are going to assume that means ballet or ballroom dances, when that is absolutely not the type of dances being referred to. The dances she used were things like ancient Assyrian and Egyptian dances. However, the sources on her dancing before the Calcutta royalty didn't specify which dance types she used in that case, so I wasn't comfortable automatically including either of those two cultural names. SilverserenC 21:44, 23 September 2024 (UTC)
- Interesting that the sources all seem to use classical dance, perhaps its meaning has shifted. After a quick look around, would something like "folk" or "traditional" work? The royalty wording should be tweaked in the article as well. CMD (talk) 00:56, 24 September 2024 (UTC)
- As for ancient, I would love for alternative suggestions on that one. I included it for a particular reason. If it just says "classical dance", then people are going to assume that means ballet or ballroom dances, when that is absolutely not the type of dances being referred to. The dances she used were things like ancient Assyrian and Egyptian dances. However, the sources on her dancing before the Calcutta royalty didn't specify which dance types she used in that case, so I wasn't comfortable automatically including either of those two cultural names. SilverserenC 21:44, 23 September 2024 (UTC)
