Template:Did you know nominations/Wireless Set, Number 10

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The result was: promoted by Kingsif (talk) 21:39, 4 August 2021 (UTC)

Wireless Set, Number 10

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Wireless Set No. 10

... that the British Army's Wireless Set No. 10 (pictured) was the first microwave relay, forwarding telephone signals across Europe? Source: Cambrook
- ALT1:... that although the Germans boasted they captured British radio traffic with ease, the Wireless Set No. 10 (pictured) was so secure they never even knew it existed? Source: WW1945b
- ALT2:... that Bernard Montgomery lauded the Wireless Set No. 10 microwave relay (pictured), saying its value "cannot be overestimated"? Source: SDRE2002

Comment: open to more hooky hooks

Created by Maury Markowitz (talk). Self-nominated at 11:41, 17 July 2021 (UTC).

Taking a look... Girth Summit _(blether) 15:57, 18 July 2021 (UTC)
The article is new enough, plenty long enough, free from copyright issues that I can detect (I cannot access the offline sources, but the only hit that Earwig picked up was the attributed quote), the image is PD and appropriately tagged. The content is well-referenced. The hooks are interesting, and are cited within the article. Overall, I'd be willing to pass this, but for a few issues with the content which I think should be addressed before moving forward. Specifically:

The first sentence of the lead kind of drives a coach and horses through MOS:SOB. I wonder whether this could be mitigated by a rewording.
Since this is a British army device, would it make sense to use BrEng per MOS:ENGVAR? 'Meters' rather than 'metres' jumped out at me, there may be other things that need changing.
There were a couple of sentences that didn't quite work for me. I wonder whether the text could do with one more read-through and copy edit.
A long-distance telephone conversation might make due with as little as 4 kHz of bandwidth... Make due with? Was 'make do with' intended? Perhaps a bit informal if so?

It was just as the magnetron was being created, a solution to the modulation problem arrived. Change the beginning, or replace the comma with the word 'that'.

If these were addressed I'd be in good-to-go territory. Girth Summit _(blether) 16:21, 18 July 2021 (UTC)

@Girth Summit: all should be fixed now. Nice proofing! Maury Markowitz (talk) 17:16, 19 July 2021 (UTC)

Maury Markowitz I made a couple of further slight tweaks, please revert if you disagree. The first sentence of the lead still has the slight issue of having multiple adjacent wikilinks, but that's not a show-stopper for DYK. Happy to AGF on the offline sources and pass this. Girth Summit _(blether) 12:12, 20 July 2021 (UTC)