User talk:Khp10

Peer Review

Howdy! I have a few comments after reviewing your article, Gender and Public Administration." First, I would get rid of the "introduction" section. Instead, merge the lead paragraph with the introduction material. In the lead paragraph, refrain from using opinion words like "important" and extreme adjectives/adverbs such as "impossible," unless the text is a quote or direct reference to scholarly work and is noted as opinion and is immediately succeeded by a formal citation. Throughout the article, check for proper grammar and spelling usage. There are a few errors that I noticed, but they are minor. Also, some sentences were confusing in structure or were vague due to the diction. Little tweaks and a bit of reworking should fix the problem quickly! Lastly, I would put section 5, "Challenges for Marginalized Gender Identities in Public Admin," as a subsection of 4 since it is still commenting on the marginalized identity. On that note, be sure to change "Public Admin" to "Public Administration"--especially since it is in a title.

Great work! I hope these comments help in some way. -CWG — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cwg20 (talk • contribs) 07:32, 28 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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Article Evaluation

Vietnam War

The article I'm looking to evaluate is the article over the Vietnam War. I am a first born Viet-American of two refugees, my parents and the scattered members of my family who had the means to come to the United States left their home country of Vietnam due to the aftermath of the war. I was taught very little growing up about the events and particular battle plans of the war from my family, but I know of a lot of personal stories and first hand experiences as members of the Saigon (Southern) front and took a lot of time of my own to independently study the topic and it's social-economical effect on Vietnam, even now forty years after the war was declared over.

I am critical of the article spending the bulk of it's summary and highlighting considerable amount of importance in the U.S. involvement, particular that of the anti-Vietnam War movement. While the U.s. did have a pinnacle role, so did many other countries (which are mentioned, but not to the depth of the U.S.). I do not think it's fair that their coverage of the anti-war movement is purely centralized in the U.S. and the racial coalition built around it is not thoroughly talked about, rather it focuses on the "anti-establishment hippies" who were mostly white Americans who's focal concern was pulling U.S. troops out. ^[1]

With a well-established article like that, you might want to discuss major changes on the article's talk page before you make them. Make your case clearly, and if someone reverts your additions, discuss it and make sure there's consensus before you re-add things. See WP:BRD. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:46, 19 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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^ https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Opposition_to_United_States_involvement_in_the_Vietnam_War

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