User talk:Lauren at World Business Academy

September 2020

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Your submission at Articles for creation: Jerry B. Brown (November 1)

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by DGG was:

This submission does not appear to be written in the formal tone expected of an encyclopedia article. Entries should be written from a neutral point of view, and should refer to a range of independent, reliable, published sources. Please rewrite your submission in a more encyclopedic format. Please make sure to avoid peacock terms that promote the subject.

The comment the reviewer left was:

This is written as an extended press release, and an encyclopedia article .

Avoid one sentence paragraphs
Use his name only occasionally. "He" is a good substitute, and if the paragraphs and sentences are combined logically, even that might not be needed.
There are some chronological gaps in the career. It can be helpful to do a section "Education and Early Career". Forthe later career, there needs to be a chronological listing of positions.
Do not make links in the text to outside web pages, but use them as references.
Don't describe the WBA here. If its notable enough for a page, make one.
Do not make refs to blog, like #20.
The list of books should give with year, date, publisher, and ISBN (referenced to WorldCat), and links to published reviews of them; in full bibliographic format. A list of important articles should be separate , again giving full bibliographic format with a link to the article.
You cannot make as reference to Wikipedia. You should simply link the WP article in the text.
And mosti mportant, you should avoid a tone of advocacy.

Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved.

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DGG ( talk ) 23:08, 1 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, Lauren at World Business Academy! Having an article declined at Articles for Creation can be disappointing. If you are wondering why your article submission was declined, please post a question at the Articles for creation help desk. If you have any other questions about your editing experience, we'd love to help you at the Teahouse, a friendly space on Wikipedia where experienced editors lend a hand to help new editors like yourself! See you there! DGG ( talk ) 23:08, 1 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

=COI editing

If you going to do COI editing, we expect not to have to use our time as volunteers teaching you to do it. I've given you enough help above, that you should be able to figure out the rest. ( If you've written PR, please note that our style is essentially the exact opposite--anything that looks like it would do for a web page will not work as a Wikipedia article. It an be difficult to change styles to this degree, and not everyone is able to do it--but it can be done.

I'm going to look at the Rinaldo Brutoco article. You need to add a note about COI to its talk page,. DGG ( talk ) 23:13, 1 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Problems

I found some problems, and fixed a few, such as excessive use of the subject's name, wordiness, and name-dropping. There are a number remaining, which I can best correct with your assistance-- we need a listing of the subject's published books, in full bibliographic format, showing whether he is author, co-author or editor, publisher, date, and ISBN number. ; We need dates for all items that don't have them, and the section on the subject's career needs to be arranged in chronological order. To the extent that authorship is a large part of his notability , we need references to substantial reviews in third-party published independent reliable sources, not press releases, blurbs, blogs, Amazon, or Goodreads.

Please fix these in a day or two; otherwise I will choose between doing the work myself, or returning the article to draft.

After this and the other article, I expect that you will have learned enough about our style need this assistance. I remind you that declaring a coi does not remove the requirement to write an non- promotional article, and I also remind you of the special requirements for documentation in articles on living people--see WP:BLP, DGG ( talk ) 03:47, 2 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Concern regarding Draft:The Optimist Daily

Hello, Lauren at World Business Academy. I just wanted to let you know that Draft:The Optimist Daily, a page you created, has not been edited in at least 5 months. Draft space is not an indefinite storage location for content that is not appropriate for article space.

If your submission is not edited soon, it could be nominated for deletion under CSD G13. If you would like to attempt to save it, you will need to improve it. You may request userfication of the content if it meets requirements.

If the deletion has already occured, instructions on how you may be able to retrieve it are available here.

Thank you for your submission to Wikipedia. Bot0612 (talk) 06:18, 13 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Your draft article, Draft:The Optimist Daily

Hello, Lauren at World Business Academy. It has been over six months since you last edited the Articles for Creation submission or Draft page you started, "The Optimist Daily".

In accordance with our policy that Wikipedia is not for the indefinite hosting of material deemed unsuitable for the encyclopedia mainspace, the draft has been deleted. If you plan on working on it further and you wish to retrieve it, you can request its undeletion. An administrator will, in most cases, restore the submission so you can continue to work on it.

Thanks for your submission to Wikipedia, and happy editing. Liz ^{Read! Talk!} 22:32, 2 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]