This is the article's 2nd FAC. It has been greatly improved since the last FAC, for which I was on vacation for. This article in my mind, now deserves a 2nd chance. Mitch32(UP) 20:41, 16 August 2008 (UTC)
Comments - sources look good, links checked out with the link checkerd tool. Ealdgyth - Talk 12:25, 17 August 2008 (UTC)
Comments on images —This is part of a comment by Awadewit (of 19:49, 18 August 2008 (UTC)), which was interrupted by the following:
Image:NY Route 22 map.png - The description needs to indicate the source for the map information. Also, ideally maps need to be in svg format.
#1 done & #2 not done -Mitch32(UP) 23:02, 17 August 2008 (UTC)
The source of the image here does say it is public domain. I do realize that may be insufficient for Wikipedia purposes but since I am not very familiar with image licensing, what do we need to do about this? Thanks. --Polaron | Talk 16:09, 17 August 2008 (UTC)
Oh, yes, I see that. Sorry. Awadewit (talk) 16:37, 17 August 2008 (UTC)
Mitch, if you don't have an account on Commons, you should link to your English Wikipedia userpage. Awadewit (talk) 16:00, 17 August 2008 (UTC)
Replied to most. I have a commons account, but I had never made a userpage.Mitch32(UP) 16:51, 17 August 2008 (UTC)
Image concerns are all cleared up. Awadewit (talk) 14:25, 22 August 2008 (UTC)
Neutral. Leaning towards support, but it's disappointing to spot-check and find things to complain of so easily:
"The highway gradually expands to three and sometimes four lanes as it passes some built-up areas withof strip development."
"Past the village, the railroad tracks come closer to the highway as NY 22 enters the scenic Harlem Valley, which lends its name to the line. The road starts to curve more gently and take longer straightaways, with less development." Which line—the railroad (oh, perhaps I'm missing a common US name for roads)? There's a lot of the word "come" around; try "edges close" here? Remove "starts to"? "with less development" is vague, and could even refer to the development of the road itself. Do you mean "with a lower density of commercial and residential development along its sides", or some such?
"Located" is usually redundant: it is here.
"Finally ends"—both words necessary?
"Massachusetts takes Connecticut's place as the state behind Alander Mountain and the other peaks visible to the east." This notion of replacement is a bit laboured here. Unsure how to reword it.
"on its way to state line-straddling Catamount Ski Center"—eeuuuw. Should be two hyphens, but it's an ugly duckling; rephrase to avoid the triple adjective. the CSC, which straddles ...
The last two bullet points have indeed been somewhat difficult to phrase over the various versions. I'll try and see if I can come up with better phrasing tonight and post here again when changes have been made. The rest of your suggestions do indeed read better and we'll implement them as well. Thanks. --Polaron | Talk 12:27, 23 August 2008 (UTC)
UPDATE: Improvements per above have been made. Regarding the 4th bullet point, I've changed the text to "North of the county line, Massachusetts becomes the state behind Alander Mountain and the other peaks visible to the east." Admittedly not the clearest way to say it but I think it is slightly better than the previous version. As for the 5th bullet point, I have reworded it to say "on its way to Catamount Ski Center, which straddles the New York–Massachusetts state line.", which is probably the best way to say it. Please let us know if these changes work. Thanks. --Polaron | Talk 18:25, 24 August 2008 (UTC)
Support, well done. A few glitches:
"Two miles from Pawling, the Appalachian Trail crosses the road next to its own flag stop on the line." Not crazy about the "its own" easter-egg link.
"... an area once the subject of a boundary dispute between New York and Connecticut." When?
"Within the park, NY 22 mainly follows the lakeshore, closer to some of its more populated areas." People live in the national park? --Laser brain(talk) 06:10, 27 August 2008 (UTC)
Thanks for the comments. I'll fix the first point to say "...next to the Applachian Trail flag stop..." and I'll also add the time period of the border dispute. As for the third point, yes, there are villages and hamlets located within the Adirondack Park lands.
Support I'm sure I could find a bunch of things to nit-pick, but I read the article before the FAC, and it generally meets the criteria. –JuliancoltonTropicalCyclone 15:42, 28 August 2008 (UTC)
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