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The World of Strawberry Shortcake

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I began this page on an animated TV special almost four years ago, and now I've saved it enough to avoid a tentative merger into Strawberry Shortcake (80s Annual Specials). A long-awaited Triple Crown and a GAC are close by.

I'm planning to do the same for the remaining specials in the coming weeks or months, perhaps enough to merit a good topic on the subject.

Thanks, Slgrandson (How's my egg-throwing coleslaw?) 19:58, 7 September 2010 (UTC)

Almost forgot: I submitted this page as a Did you know? suggestion yesterday. --Slgrandson (How's my egg-throwing coleslaw?) 20:06, 7 September 2010 (UTC)

Review by ResMar Bleh, Strawberry Shortcake. Still, in the context of a complete encyclopedia...not much to say really, a nice short article that's ready for a nice short GA nomination.

General

• Please see WP:DASH for instructions regarding the use of short (-) and long (—) dashes. Using clause-clause is simply not correct. I've fixed this using {{ndash}}.

Lead

• The special received generally favorable reviews in the School Library Journal, which reviewed it twice in different decades. Clarify please: what decades?

• Changed to "...reviewed it in 1983 and 2007." --Slgrandson (How's my egg-throwing coleslaw?) 16:31, 10 September 2010 (UTC)

Plot

• Strawberry's foe, the Peculiar Purple Pieman... Is foe the right word? It's a kid's show after all :)

• Changed to "villain". --Slgrandson (How's my egg-throwing coleslaw?) 16:31, 10 September 2010 (UTC)

Release

• Some time after the title character's debut at the 1980 American International Toy Fair, The World of Strawberry Shortcake was offered to the major U.S. television networks. What networks?

• The source I have on hand doesn't say which ones, but I'm implying ABC/CBS/NBC (the only ones back then). For now, I've reworded it thus: "...major television networks in the U.S. were given a chance to air..." --Slgrandson (How's my egg-throwing coleslaw?) 16:31, 10 September 2010 (UTC)

• A soundtrack album, with contributions by Flo & Eddie of The Turtles, was released by Kid Stuff Records some time after the special aired. Can we get a specific date or year?

• Tried looking it up—nothing at hand. Ended sentence with "...the same year as the original airing" instead. --Slgrandson (How's my egg-throwing coleslaw?) 16:31, 10 September 2010 (UTC)

I the {{mdash}}; you've picked up on it :) ResMar 18:57, 10 September 2010 (UTC)