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There is a list of sources questioned (above at 24 July 2021) that does not appear to have been addressed. Just looking at the first on the list, I can find no indication of reliability at largest.org. Sourcing should be reviewed. [[User:SandyGeorgia|'''Sandy'''<span style="color: green;">Georgia</span>]] ([[User talk:SandyGeorgia|Talk]]) 15:38, 4 November 2021 (UTC)
There is a list of sources questioned (above at 24 July 2021) that does not appear to have been addressed. Just looking at the first on the list, I can find no indication of reliability at largest.org. Sourcing should be reviewed. [[User:SandyGeorgia|'''Sandy'''<span style="color: green;">Georgia</span>]] ([[User talk:SandyGeorgia|Talk]]) 15:38, 4 November 2021 (UTC)


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*:It explains who was in charge and a simple variation in "Under X, ABC happened...Under Y, DGH happened". Doesn't sound promotional to me in the slightest
*:It explains who was in charge and a simple variation in "Under X, ABC happened...Under Y, DGH happened". Doesn't sound promotional to me in the slightest
*The overall organization of the lead is lacking and needs a bunch of reordering. {{tq|The university offers degrees in more than 150 courses of study through ten colleges and houses 18 research institutes.}}, the sentence about the university's academics, shouldn't be way at the end. Meanwhile, {{tq|The Texas A&M Aggies athletes compete in 18 varsity sports as a member of the Southeastern Conference.}} gets to be in the first paragraph, with the double problem that it's then disconnected from the other sentences about student life in the last paragraph. Listing examples of the organizations that fund the university's research also seems questionable for the lead and certainly the first paragraph.
*The overall organization of the lead is lacking and needs a bunch of reordering. {{tq|The university offers degrees in more than 150 courses of study through ten colleges and houses 18 research institutes.}}, the sentence about the university's academics, shouldn't be way at the end. Meanwhile, {{tq|The Texas A&M Aggies athletes compete in 18 varsity sports as a member of the Southeastern Conference.}} gets to be in the first paragraph, with the double problem that it's then disconnected from the other sentences about student life in the last paragraph. Listing examples of the organizations that fund the university's research also seems questionable for the lead and certainly the first paragraph.
*:This sounds very much like preferences, not standards. I have no objection to addressing these, but not as part of FAR. SEC is included in the lead paragraph because there is a very strong popular association with athletic conferences in the US.
*{{tq|Working with various A&M-related agencies, the school has a direct presence in each of the 254 counties in Texas.}} appears to be uncited and does not appear in the body.
*{{tq|Working with various A&M-related agencies, the school has a direct presence in each of the 254 counties in Texas.}} appears to be uncited and does not appear in the body.
*:removed
*[[Texas A&M Corps of Cadets]] is linked twice in the lead.
*[[Texas A&M Corps of Cadets]] is linked twice in the lead.
*:fixed
*Is there a list of largest U.S. campuses to wikilink?
*Is there a list of largest U.S. campuses to wikilink?
*:[[List_of_United_States_public_university_campuses_by_enrollment]] was removed initially per [[WP:OVERLINK]]
*Infobox has incorrect capitalization with “College Town”.
*Infobox has incorrect capitalization with “College Town”.
*:I see nothing with "College Town"
*Accreditation is unsourced (and should be in body).
*Accreditation is unsourced (and should be in body).
*:fixed
*Infobox has the academic staff count but is missing the total staff count.
*Infobox has the academic staff count but is missing the total staff count.
*:Is that a standard?
*Does ''[[The Battalion]]'' have official status from the university? Most college newspapers don't and therefore shouldn't be in the infobox.
*Does ''[[The Battalion]]'' have official status from the university? Most college newspapers don't and therefore shouldn't be in the infobox.
*:This was recently added. I have no objection to its removal or addition. As for whether it should be in the infobox, that's a matter of opinion, not an objective standard.


'''Other'''
'''Other'''
*The history section photos need improvement. There's only one actual historical photo in it, the World Wars era section is unillustrated, and then there's a sandwich.
*The history section photos need improvement. There's only one actual historical photo in it, the World Wars era section is unillustrated, and then there's a sandwich.
*:What needs improvement? As for photos, some were removed because it was "too cluttered". [[WP:IDONTLIKEIT]] applies in spades to preferences. The "sandwich" was noted above; moved photo anyway.
*The 2017 statue removal paragraph has poor wording.
*The 2017 statue removal paragraph has poor wording.
*:See talk page and history for the rationale behind the word choice.
*In the student body section, I don't think it's necessary to give the percentage of students that took SAT vs. ACT.
*In the student body section, I don't think it's necessary to give the percentage of students that took SAT vs. ACT.
*:Basic acceptance averages seem acceptable. Many look at these pages to look for colleges and this is pertinent information.
*The student body section is lacking a bunch of demographic information. There should be coverage of racial and socioeconomic demographics at the very least.
*The student body section is lacking a bunch of demographic information. There should be coverage of racial and socioeconomic demographics at the very least.
*:What would you like to see?
*{{tq|as follows}} is poor wording.
*{{tq|as follows}} is poor wording.
*:[[WP:IDONTLIKEIT]]? Rephrased anyway.
*The rankings section just gives a bunch of listings of individual rankings, many of questionable value, rather than a holistic overview of the university's reputation.
*The rankings section just gives a bunch of listings of individual rankings, many of questionable value, rather than a holistic overview of the university's reputation.
*:The University confers degrees in such a wide list of studies and various ranking systems have wide-ranging criteria. There is no set standard. What would you propose?
*The campus tree photo in the research section doesn't have anything to do with research.
*The campus tree photo in the research section doesn't have anything to do with research.
*:Swapped with Zachry
*The photo in the worldwide section of four guys in a group photo with a flag is not very compelling.
*The photo in the worldwide section of four guys in a group photo with a flag is not very compelling.
*:If you'll note the caption, it's from the [[TAMUQ]] campus in [[Qatar]]; the part of the main campus located in another country...it's pretty unique. What's not compelling?
*{{tq|Several halls include a "substance-free" floor, where residents pledge to avoid bringing [[alcoholic beverage|alcohol]], [[recreational drug use|drugs]], or cigarettes into the hall.}} The wikilinking choices here seem odd; why the first two but not [[cigarettes]]?
*{{tq|Several halls include a "substance-free" floor, where residents pledge to avoid bringing [[alcoholic beverage|alcohol]], [[recreational drug use|drugs]], or cigarettes into the hall.}} The wikilinking choices here seem odd; why the first two but not [[cigarettes]]?
*:[[WP:OVERLINK]]. If you feel it would be beneficial, please add it. If you think the wikilinks are unnecessary, please remove them. Your criticism [[WP:SOFIXIT|could be easily fixed]] rather than voicing such a vague complaint.
*{{tq|The Corps welcomed female members in the fall of 1974,{{fake ref}}.}} has a punctuation error, and "welcomed" seems promotional compared to "began accepting".
*{{tq|The Corps welcomed female members in the fall of 1974,{{fake ref}}.}} has a punctuation error, and "welcomed" seems promotional compared to "began accepting".
*:I would argue that they were allowed to attend. I don't think they were "accepted" as readily/
*{{tq|The university houses the public broadcasting stations: ''[[KAMU-TV]]'', a [[PBS]] member station since 1970, ''[[KAMU-FM]]'' an [[National Public Radio|NPR]] affiliate since 1977, and the student-run ''KANM'', "the college station of [[College Station, Texas|College Station]]".}} Needs grammar fix.
*{{tq|The university houses the public broadcasting stations: ''[[KAMU-TV]]'', a [[PBS]] member station since 1970, ''[[KAMU-FM]]'' an [[National Public Radio|NPR]] affiliate since 1977, and the student-run ''KANM'', "the college station of [[College Station, Texas|College Station]]".}} Needs grammar fix.
*:Fixed a missing comma. Please be more specific if it's something else.
*My concern above that the alumni section is significantly overlong has not yet been addressed. For smaller schools with less alumni, I find it more justifiable for individual people to be [[WP:DUE|noteworthy]] in the context of the institution as a whole, but for somewhere as large as Texas A&M, I'd like to see mainly numbers (e.g. how many billionaires, how many generals, etc.), with only a few of the very most notable people individually called out. The rest can be moved to the people list page.
*My concern above that the alumni section is significantly overlong has not yet been addressed. For smaller schools with less alumni, I find it more justifiable for individual people to be [[WP:DUE|noteworthy]] in the context of the institution as a whole, but for somewhere as large as Texas A&M, I'd like to see mainly numbers (e.g. how many billionaires, how many generals, etc.), with only a few of the very most notable people individually called out. The rest can be moved to the people list page.
*:We indeed have addressed and trimmed the page substantially. Pretending we've done nothing is absurd. All of the people mentioned are on the people page. These were largely chosen during the FA process.
*The alumni section also focuses exclusively on alumni. I'd like to see its scope expanded to "noted people" to also include notable faculty members.
*The alumni section also focuses exclusively on alumni. I'd like to see its scope expanded to "noted people" to also include notable faculty members.
*:"The alumni section also focuses exclusively on alumni"...how exactly is that a complaint? Isn't that exactly what you'd expect in an Alumni section? If you want it to be alumni and notable faculty, we could consider a change, however, most notable faculty are famous for their contributions prior to coming to A&M, not their work while at A&M. As such, it's fame/notability by mere association and the primary reason such people were removed from such a list.
*In the external links section, I question whether having a link to the athletics page is justifiable per [[WP:ELMIN]]. I would suggest instead linking ''The Battalion''{{'s}} website (see [[Wikipedia_talk:College_and_university_article_guideline#Student_newspaper_external_links|this thread]]), the accreditation page from SACS (since it's an independent source with detailed info), and the [[College Navigator]] page (since it's from the U.S. government).
*In the external links section, I question whether having a link to the athletics page is justifiable per [[WP:ELMIN]]. I would suggest instead linking ''The Battalion''{{'s}} website (see [[Wikipedia_talk:College_and_university_article_guideline#Student_newspaper_external_links|this thread]]), the accreditation page from SACS (since it's an independent source with detailed info), and the [[College Navigator]] page (since it's from the U.S. government).
*:Their athletics page makes since as that and college admissions are the two primary reasons people popularly look up information about a school in the US, and certainly A&M. For the other sources, feel free to add them.
Last updated: [[User:Buffs|Buffs]] ([[User talk:Buffs|talk]]) 03:39, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


For content beyond the lead, I did only spot checks on various areas, not a full read. If I looked longer and deeper, I'm sure many additional concerns would arise, but the above is as much effort as I'm willing to devote. I hope these comments are helpful. Best, <span style="color:#AAA"><small>&#123;{u&#124;</small><span style="border-radius:9em;padding:0 5px;background:#088">[[User:Sdkb|<span style="color:#FFF">'''Sdkb'''</span>]]</span><small>}&#125;</small></span> <sup>[[User talk:Sdkb|'''talk''']]</sup> 19:13, 2 November 2021 (UTC)
For content beyond the lead, I did only spot checks on various areas, not a full read. If I looked longer and deeper, I'm sure many additional concerns would arise, but the above is as much effort as I'm willing to devote. I hope these comments are helpful. Best, <span style="color:#AAA"><small>&#123;{u&#124;</small><span style="border-radius:9em;padding:0 5px;background:#088">[[User:Sdkb|<span style="color:#FFF">'''Sdkb'''</span>]]</span><small>}&#125;</small></span> <sup>[[User talk:Sdkb|'''talk''']]</sup> 19:13, 2 November 2021 (UTC)


There is a list of sources questioned (above at 24 July 2021) that does not appear to have been addressed. Just looking at the first on the list, I can find no indication of reliability at largest.org. Sourcing should be reviewed. [[User:SandyGeorgia|'''Sandy'''<span style="color: green;">Georgia</span>]] ([[User talk:SandyGeorgia|Talk]]) 15:38, 4 November 2021 (UTC)
There is a list of sources questioned (above at 24 July 2021) that does not appear to have been addressed. Just looking at the first on the list, I can find no indication of reliability at largest.org. Sourcing should be reviewed. [[User:SandyGeorgia|'''Sandy'''<span style="color: green;">Georgia</span>]] ([[User talk:SandyGeorgia|Talk]]) 15:38, 4 November 2021 (UTC)
:Uh...I responded within 24 hours. [[User:Buffs|Buffs]] ([[User talk:Buffs|talk]]) 02:42, 15 November 2021 (UTC)
:Uh...I responded within 72 hours. [[User:Buffs|Buffs]] ([[User talk:Buffs|talk]]) 02:42, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


:No improvements since OldAg's post a week ago, and no movement on Sdkb's list. [[User:SandyGeorgia|'''Sandy'''<span style="color: green;">Georgia</span>]] ([[User talk:SandyGeorgia|Talk]]) 09:09, 10 November 2021 (UTC)
:No improvements since OldAg's post a week ago, and no movement on Sdkb's list. [[User:SandyGeorgia|'''Sandy'''<span style="color: green;">Georgia</span>]] ([[User talk:SandyGeorgia|Talk]]) 09:09, 10 November 2021 (UTC)

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Texas A&M University

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Notified: Buffs ([1]), WikiProjectHigher education, ([2])
See this discussion; additional notifications to WP Big 12, WP Texas, Karancas, Oldag07, BlueAg09, ElKevbo SandyGeorgia (Talk) 18:49, 31 October 2021 (UTC) [reply]

Review section

This article was promoted over a decade ago and it is showing its age. Much of the content is dated, sizeable portions of the article are unsourced, and there is a heavy reliance on primary sources and even some unreliable sources such as IMDb. Some of the images also lack alt text. I expressed concerns with this article back in early April and no improvements have been made. ~ HAL333 22:45, 22 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

HAL333, well, this is a bit of a joke. You hardly "expressed concerns with this article back in early April." In fact, you made one single vague statement and question: "I'm concerned about the heavy use of primary sources published by Texas A & M that are used in this article. Could this be fixed?" Just because no one answered your question then doesn't mean a lack of a response equates to "the article is lacking." To the contrary, this was brought up in the FAC nomination and had the requisite support, to include such citations as-is. Your opinion hardly overrides that consensus. The University providing such sources is no different than the Smithsonian or US Government providing such sources on themselves regarding general, uncontentious facts; falsification of such figures and statistics would incur financial penalties and/or criminal liabilities. They are an educational institution and have a reputation for fact-checking and accuracy. Accordingly, I don't see that you've satisfied the first requirement for a FAR.
As to the rest of your concerns that were FIRST brought up here (and never brought up prior), I would be happy to address them, but you need to be much more specific.
Which parts are "dated"?
Which portions do you feel are "unsourced"? By my quick count, there are a total of only 14 sentences that do not have a direct reference associated with them. Most of these were referenced by the previous sentences, are uncontentious facts, are frivolous facts that could easily have been removed, or, in the case of the single sentence in the lead, mentioned later in the article.
Which sources are unreliable? The sole reference to IMDb is Robert Earl Keen and Lyle Lovett. REK has told this story at hundreds of concerts. While a better source, such as the youtube video above, would be a better source, the fact itself is not in question.
Which images lack alt text? Alt text may be desired by you, but does not appear to be one of the requirements of a Featured Article
I'll be happy to address these concerns with specifics, but I'm not going to jump through vague hoops over vaguery/exaggeration. Buffs (talk) 05:25, 23 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I've fixed every unreferenced instance on the page that I could find by either finding a source or deleting the necessary sentence. I've also replaced the REK reference with a MUCH better one.
It should be noted that during the FAC, concerns were made that it was OVER-referenced. Given that there is not a single passage without a reference, I think this point can be pretty much put to bed. I await clarifications on your other contentions. This only leaves things you feel are "dated", which is completely subjective without further clarification. Buffs (talk) 06:06, 23 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Here are some of the sections which need to be updated:
  • Most of the Rankings section.
  • Did the "University era" end in 2013?
  • The last three paragraghs of the Student body section need to be updated with recent stats.
  • The entire Endowment section needs to be rewritten and resourced to reflect the present.
  • Hopefully you get what I mean by dated. The later sections also need such work.
  • As I said the prose still needs some work. There are several bits the need to be made less authorial/promotional. First off, in the lede we have fluffy language like "over 500,000 strong". (The 500,000 statistic also happens to be unsourced...)
  • Why are multiple sources sometimes placed all at the end of the sentence and sometimes placed directly after the dependent material? This needs to be standardized.
  • For it to be accessible to screenreaders, it still needs alt text for every image.
Hopefully we can address those. ~ HAL333 13:26, 23 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I don't believe alt text is part of FA requirements. (t · c) buidhe 17:53, 23 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I did not say it was. But if an article is to be featured and exemplify the finest work on Wikipedia, it should be inclusive for screenreaders.18:13, 23 July 2021 (UTC)
The FA criteria require that an article complies with the Manual of Style, and MOS:ACCIM, part of the MOS accessibility guideline, states Images that are not purely decorative should include an alt attribute that acts as a substitute for the image for blind readers, search-spiders, and other non-visual users. If additional alt text is added, it should be succinct or refer the reader to the caption or adjacent text. So my interpretation would be that yes, alt text is required for FAs. If there's a reason to believe that having alt text would make the article worse, I'd be open to considering an IAR argument for leaving it out, but if it's just that no one wants to put in the few minutes of work to add it, I really don't have much sympathy for that. {{u|Sdkb}}talk 04:54, 24 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I have little sympathy for someone expecting others to jump through hoops for something they could have fixed in a few minutes and threatening to delist a featured article. I do not believe this was EVER addressed on the talk page which should have been the FIRST place to go. Given the misleading rationale for this page in the first place, this feels much more like a person attempting to manipulate/exert control over forcing others to do something.
Now, I'm going to do it., but I do so under protest that this was done in exceptionally poor form. Buffs (talk) 22:24, 24 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. If you don't like the word choices, feel free to edit. Buffs (talk) 22:44, 24 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Now, to address each of the other points brought up:
  • Most of the Rankings section. The rankings section includes some of the latest information from 2021...we will update 2022 when it happens.
  • Did the "University era" end in 2013? No, but few major things have happened in the past 8 years. If you feel something has been missed, feel free to mention it, but you can't say you're missing something without specifying what's missing.
  • The entire Endowment section needs to be rewritten and resourced to reflect the present. I wouldn't say it needs to be rewritten from scratch, but I've since updated it.
  • Hopefully you get what I mean by dated. The later sections also need such work.[vague]
  • As I said the prose still needs some work. There are several bits the need to be made less authorial/promotional. First off, in the lede we have fluffy language like "over 500,000 strong". (The 500,000 statistic also happens to be unsourced...) That statistic is 508,000 and is sourced in the Texas_A&M_University#Notable_alumni_and_faculty section. If you have other specific instances, I will be happy to address them.
  • Why are multiple sources sometimes placed all at the end of the sentence and sometimes placed directly after the dependent material? This needs to be standardized. Unless you have a citation from WP:MOS, that is your personal preference. Citations are provided in the middle of sentences when appropriate and at the end of sentences when the sources apply to the whole sentence. This is consistent throughout and is pedantic to edit
  • The last three paragraghs [sic] of the Student body section need to be updated with recent stats. While we can update more, it doesn't need to be 100% up to date with the most relevant stats or it should be delisted. I will do what I can to update the figures.
To be blunt, this FAR needs to be pulled as malformed and certainly not within the guidelines of how one of these should roll; borderline done in bad faith (based on the opening logic, specifically "I expressed concerns with this article back in early April and no improvements have been made."). There's no reason this should have even been brought to FAR. Buffs (talk) 03:57, 26 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Some of the sourcing needs to be revamped. Here are a few that may not be high quality reliable sources:

  • "Largest.org", currently cited as "largest,org"
  • "brazosgenealogy.org"
  • Britannica is a tertiary source.
  • asumag.com
  • Is the Military Times considered reliable?
  • Kiplinger?
  • Applied Biosytems?
  • Are the cited college newspapers editorially independent?
  • Etc.

I'm not being picky either. When I got my first FA through earlier this year, I was told that I couldn't use Politico. I have ignored places where primary sources can/should be replaced with reliable secondary sources. Sources also need to be standardized. ~ HAL333 18:50, 24 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Re:"I'm not being picky either". Yes you are. And so were the people who said you couldn't use Politico. What is a reliable source depends highly on the claim being made. If I say "Biden/Trump said ______" and cite the primary reference for such a claim, that's perfectly accurate. The same could be said for the KKK or a Black Panther statement. Such a citation is not only appropriate, but desired so people can read the statement for themselves. The accuracy of said claim is irrelevant; so is the source as a WP:RS: they are the stated claims that were made from the organizations themselves. If Ben Shapiro states something on DailyWire.com, it's valid to cite that source as where he said it as it is the publishing arm of his organization. That does not mean the statement is accurate nor does it mean that DailyWire is somehow a more reliable source because of it, but it IS a reliable source for the statement itself even if it is self-published.
Re: "Some of the sourcing needs to be revamped. Here are a few that may not be high quality reliable sources" I'm not going to go through an article and address the few that "may not be high quality reliable sources" if you're going to be so vague and include even simple typos. WP:SOFIXIT applies in spades here. There's VERY little that you couldn't just fix yourself and would require far less work than what you're putting in here. If you are contending that any of these are unreliable sources, it's incumbent upon you to explain why, not vaguely claim there might be problems.
Lastly, this is not the forum for such claims and you have not acknowledged/corrected your deceptive initial statement. I'm not inclined to address such concerns only to have a litany of new concerns and preferences brought to the table ad nauseam every time they are addressed.
So, for that last time...for each of these points"
  • "Largest.org", currently cited as "largest,org" WP:SOFIXIT; you wasted WAY more space here complaining than it would have taken for what is clearly a simple typo fix.
  • "brazosgenealogy.org" Do you consider this unreliable? All the facts I see are accurate.
  • "Britannica is a tertiary source." So? What's your point? WP:RS "Reputable tertiary sources, such as introductory-level university textbooks, almanacs, and encyclopedias, may be cited."
  • "asumag.com" The only thing it's cited for is an utterly uncontentious claim about where the college came from that neither school disagrees with. 1 2 3. I'm truly perplexed as to what the problem is here.
  • "Is the Military Times considered reliable?" For a statement about what they themselves published? Absolutely. That distinction is made in the very sentence it's cited (and the only citation from that source).
  • "Kiplinger?" For a statement about what they themselves published? Absolutely. That distinction is made in the very sentence it's cited (and the only citation from that source). This is the kind of asinine standards you're attempting to apply here. You clearly aren't even looking at the context in which they are used.
  • "Applied Biosytems? [sic]" Again, an utterly uncontroversial claim. The other source was a press release by the school.
  • "Are the cited college newspapers editorially independent?" In general, yes. This was addressed in the FAC and has been addressed multiple times on the talk page. Please review the archives.
  • "Etc." Sorry, but no one can possibly address what you're questioning here. There's not enough information.
You come up with a list of problems. I'll be happy to address them. But a vague "Here's a few, maybe, and there are more...because it was done to me" is horrible logic for proposing to delist an FA. Buffs (talk) 22:17, 24 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Some issues I spot:
    • Missing an "organization and administration" section (see WP:UNIGUIDE for what it should contain).
    • Veterans section is way too short to stand on its own.
    • Enrollment surpassing 50k in 2011 is history moreso than anything about the student body.
    • A bunch of the info in the worldwide section belongs in the campus section.
    • It's promotional to talk about The Battalion's awards before ever introducing it.
    • Notable alumni section is significantly overlong.
    • Various prose issues throughout: "Note that", MOS:%, the promotional "over 500,000 strong"
There is probably a bunch more, but that's to start. {{u|Sdkb}}talk 21:39, 28 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
So, then let's start with that logic then, not some circuitous reasoning that isn't mandatory. I still disagree that such a section is necessary in order to be "comprehensive", but I've added a section anyway and will update the bare urls in due time. Buffs (talk) 04:19, 5 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Fixed the Veteran section; merged as part of the rankings.
  • Removed 50K reference...not really needed.
  • Fixed the Battalion reference.
    Looks good now. {{u|Sdkb}}talk 02:29, 4 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Fixed 500K, "note that", updated percent -> % via rephrasing.
    Oh, MOS:% seems to say that writing out percent is more common for non-technical articles, but so long as you're consistent, % looks alright to me. {{u|Sdkb}}talk 02:29, 4 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Notable alumni section was formed by consensus and agreed upon in the FAC.
    The FAC was in 2007, so I can't put much stock in it. Notable alumni sections have been discussed frequently recently, and as a WP:HED participant, I have a good sense of the range of them. This one is way longer than most—it'll need significant trimming to avoid undue weight. {{u|Sdkb}}talk 02:29, 4 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    5 paragraphs to summarize the contributions of over half a million alumni (and this excludes faculty)? That's hardly extensive given the number of people and hardly undue weight. Buffs (talk) 18:54, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Re: "A bunch of the info in the worldwide section belongs in the campus section." What parts? All of this pertains to parts of the school that aren't on the main campus...I'm confused. Buffs (talk) 19:21, 30 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The Qatari campus is a campus. On second look, I think most of what's in the academics section is fine there, but the campus section should include at least a bit on the Qatari campus. {{u|Sdkb}}talk 02:29, 4 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
So...that one's a bit of an oddity. The campus at Doha, Qatar is considered part of the A&M College Station main campus. It is not considered a separate school. Those who graduate from TAMUQ have "Texas A&M College Station" on their diploma. Buffs (talk) 03:47, 5 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from HAL
Extended resolved commentary (with plenty of tq templates that stall the FAC page) moved to article talk. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 14:11, 9 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Should these be addressed (along with the ones above), I'll be happy to support keeping this as an FA. Cheers. ~ HAL333 00:30, 4 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

    • I'm happy to see the great work put into this article by Buffs. At this point, I drop any objections and advocate keeping this article as an FA. Cheers. ~ HAL333 14:36, 25 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Motions to close

Close without FARC At this point, I think it's clear I'm happy to address any issues you find and respectfully request that this FAR be rescinded by its submitter as the pretenses for its listing are unfounded/unwarranted. Buffs (talk) 22:56, 30 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Review by Z1720

Hi Buffs, let's get this FAR closed as a keep! I am going to review this article and make copy-edits along the way. Please review my edits and, if you choose to revert them, please note them below and explain why. I also have some concerns/questions that I've listed below, which I hope you can resolve.

  • I removed the 50,000 alumni from a sentence in the lede as awkward. Perhaps it can be mentioned later in the lede, with a sentence talking about notable alumni?
  • I am surprised by the number of citations in the lede. MOS:LEDECITE says there should be a balance in number of citations in the lede verses repeating citations that are stated later in the body. Perhaps most of these can be removed?
  • "Under the leadership of President James Earl Rudder in the 1960s, A.M.C. desegregated" This is the first time A.M.C. is used to refer to the university, and there is no explanation that says this acronym is for the university. I suggest that this be stated earlier in the article.

Brings me to "Beginning years". I will continue more comments later. Z1720 (talk) 23:19, 1 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • First one is fine by me! :-)
  • Not my preference either. All of these points are well referenced in the body of the article, but there are some that feel having the references in both places is a better placement. That's not a hill I'm willing to die on. I can see both points, but even in this, there are claims that portions are "unreferenced" when indeed they are and in the manner WP:MOS dictates. I'd rather have extra references than too few (too few = "well, it's unreferenced! I'll just delete it!").
  • If the references are removed, and someone tries to remove the information from the lede for "uncited claims" I will support their reinstatement. Just ensure that the information is referenced in the body. Z1720 (talk) 19:25, 4 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Your citation also says "The verifiability policy advises that material that is challenged or likely to be challenged...should be supported by an inline citation...including within the lead." I'm not trying to be pedantic here, but this phraseology basically means everything can be challenged and everything needs a citation. I agree that isn't the intent, but everything in the lead with a citation is there because someone challenged it. Given the dichotomy of this situation, there is no solution that will appeal to all readers. I'm going to err on the side of those who want citations. Buffs (talk) 23:02, 4 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Fixed
  • I undid part of your changes. I re-added the quote about the Morrill Act purpose. This was a major point of contention in the early days of the school. Profs started teaching a "classical education" and cadets got bored. This led to a decline in the population and it was only saved by Lawrence Sullivan Ross, a former governor of Texas, who saved the school from being turned into an insane asylum (the folks at our rival school say that they succeeded beyond their wildest expectations). Including that quote gives context for why there is such a focus on Ag and Engineering. I also re-added the part about the school starting on 2 Oct...and then 4 Oct...There is reasonable debate about the "first day". Including both dates with what happened bridged a divide between multiple contributors. I'm fine with the rest of the changes, in fact, I thank you! Great updates!Buffs (talk) 04:19, 2 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I can add more Buffs (talk) 23:02, 4 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Buffs:, I responded under your bullet points above so it is easier to track conversations. Z1720 (talk) 19:25, 4 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I also see that there are still comments ongoing above. I don't want to make this review too hectic, so please ping me when the above reviewers are complete with their assessment and I will continue with mine. You can also ping me if you need an outside opinion on something. Z1720 (talk) 19:28, 4 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Z1720 Please simply add them here and I will address as-able. This is nothing close to being overwhelming. Buffs (talk) 23:02, 4 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I'm more worried about me getting overwhelmed. I also don't want to overlap on work, so I'll pause here. It looks like other editors are giving great comments, which will make my work easier once they are finished. Z1720 (talk) 01:27, 5 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Z1720 8 left to address + clean up bare urls. Now's as good a time as any. Buffs (talk) 21:19, 10 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Down to 2 + bare urls Buffs (talk) 20:54, 16 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry I did not get to this sooner. I made changes as I read along, which I hope you will review. Here are some comments below:

  • "Ross made many improvements to the school" Like what?
    Running water and physical dorms. Many cadets at the time literally lived in tents. the entire year. Clarified this. Buffs (talk) 22:27, 17 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "During his tenure, many Aggie traditions were born" Since the word "Aggie" has not been introduced in the article yet, I think this name will need to be explained.
    The word Aggie is explained in the lead paragraph. But I added a sentence anyway to quickly explain the history of the nickname. Buffs (talk) 22:07, 17 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In 2017, the status of this statue" So I understand that this section is here because we just spoke about the statue of Ross. However, I think chronologically it should be in the 2017 section so that it is easier for readers to find this information if they are looking for it. Thoughts?
    Moved + added more + bare url refs Buffs (talk) 22:25, 17 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • There's nothing in the history from 1948-1960. Anything of note during this period?
    Not really historical, no. Student enrollment stagnated. It wasn't until Rudder became Prez that things really started to change from a historical perspective. Buffs (talk) 22:29, 17 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "On March 26, 1960, Major General James Earl Rudder, class of 1932, became the 16th president of the college.[36] Rudder's tenure (1959–1970)" Did he become the president in 1960, or 1959?
    1959...not sure where the other date came from other than a possible typo. Fixed. Buffs (talk) 22:36, 17 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Rudder's tenure (1959–1970) marked a critical turning point in the school's history." Delete, this is not in Wikivoice and we can describe the turning point in the follow-up sentences instead of saying it.
    This is an introductory statement for the following sentences and is indeed in Wikivoice. This indeed was a critical point and the decisions he made still have ramifications today. From becoming coed, no longer military-mandatory, and admitting black people (this was more of a change in US and Texas policy than anything else, but still happened under his tenure), his decisions changed the school into the powerhouse it is today. If you'd like to rephrase to make it better, you're welcome to do so. Buffs (talk) 22:40, 17 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the 58th Legislature of Texas approved of Rudder's changes," What changes?
    see next item Buffs (talk) 22:46, 17 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "By his death in 1970, Rudder had overseen the growth of the school from 7,500 to 14,000 students from all 50 states and 75 nations." Does the article really need this? It's a little promo and the timeline is jumping around a little bit, and the next paragraph is going back to 1963.
    Fixed the timeline jumps. I think it's appropriate given that students for the first time came from all 50 states and it's notable that enrollment nearly doubled. I'm not against rephrasing if you have a better idea. Buffs (talk) 22:46, 17 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Much of the legislative work allowing the expansion of Texas A&M and the admission of women was pushed by State Senator William T. "Bill" Moore," So I think this is really important to include. Unfortunately, the subsequent sentences talk about Moore's nicknames and life instead of the process of how Moore convinced others to allow women to attend the university. Can more information be included on that, and less on Moore's bio?
    Better incorporated into prose. Buffs (talk) 23:03, 17 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Former President George Bush remained actively involved with the university, frequently visiting the campus and participating in special events." Is this sentence necessary for the article?
    It's somewhat unusual for a President to spend as much time as he did at such a library/institution. I've reincorporated it into the prose a little better to include that he was buried there on the grounds. Buffs (talk) 23:07, 17 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • In general, the history section reads like it was written by the university, and not by an uninterested, dispassionate writer as outlined in WP:WIKIVOICE. Part of this might be the overreliance of primary sources for the history section, and I suggest that other sources about the university are sought and used to replace the university's sources. I also suggest that this section is read over by more editors with no personal connection to the university who can identify parts that can be reworded or might not be completely necessary.
    Others are welcome to read/re-read these sections and make updates to better phrasing (as they've done over the years), but I cannot address that on my own. Of the 39 sources listed in the History section, only seven come from the University itself (and a few of them are just the University archives). The rest are third party sources. I dispute that this should be categorized as an "overreliance of primary sources". Buffs (talk) 22:52, 17 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • I still think there is an overreliance of primary sources because many of the sentences are cited to the Texas A&M website or to Texas A&M University Press. This, coupled a history section that I felt had too much of a pro-Texas A&M bias contributed to this conclusion. When I do a second readthrough I will look at this section again, but in the meantime I would advocate that the citations be switched with a non-Texas A&M source wherever possible. Z1720 (talk) 19:22, 23 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

This brings me to Academics. Z1720 (talk) 00:24, 17 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

More comments. Sorry for the delay.

  • Bare url citations need to be expanded upon.
    The line right above this states clearly I'm aware of these and I've previously explained I will do so when we are done. It's easier to do en masse.
  • "who has executive responsibility." What does that mean?
    Executive vs legislative or judicial authority. Direct verbiage from the source. Others in the school have judicial authority and others have some legislative authority. This would be similar to authority/responsibility of CEOs. Buffs (talk) 16:09, 24 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the branch campuses in Galveston and Qatar and other locations across Texas." Is this saying that students are at other branch locations across Texas, or that students are living across Texas and are enrolled in the school?
    Students are at other branch locations across Texas. Rephrased for clarity Buffs (talk) 16:09, 24 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The student body includes students from all 50 US states and 124 foreign countries." I don't think this is necessary and sounds a little WP:PROMO
    The fact that a school is representative of all the states is of note. Many state schools cannot say the same. Buffs (talk) 16:09, 24 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The university consistently ranks among the top ten public universities" Can the article state when this top ten placement began, instead of having the general statement of "consistently ranks"?
    This is already on the list (see Hal's) Buffs (talk) 16:09, 24 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "According to the College Board, the fall 2008 entering freshman class consisted of 54% students in the top 10% of their high school graduating class," This should be updated to more current numbers.
    This is already on the list (see Hal's) Buffs (talk) 16:09, 24 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The whole "Rankings" section should be checked and the most recent available year for rankings should be given.
    This is already on the list (see Hal's) Buffs (talk) 16:09, 24 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • In surprised that the Research section starts with, "The Texas A&M University System, in 2006, was the first to explicitly state in its policy that technology commercialization was a criterion that could be used for tenure. Passage of this policy was intended to give faculty more academic freedom and strengthen the university's industry partnerships." This feels very specific for the opening information about the university. I think this section has more generalised statements about the university's research that should be placed before specific examples.
    Fixed/rephrased Buffs (talk) 15:07, 25 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why are the dimensions of Texas A&M's research facilities important to this article? Is it perhaps too much detail that should be deleted?
    Fixed/rephrased/con solidated Buffs (talk) 15:07, 25 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The last paragraph in the Research section about PETA has a pro-university POV, with language like "targetted by PETA" and much more space given to the university's response than to explaining what PETA's concern is. This should be rewritten.
    First, this was PETAs language, not A&M's. THEY stated they were targeting Texas A&M. Second, this entire paragraph was agreed upon by multiple points of view. I disagreed with even including it, but I acquiesced to this choice of verbiage via majority opinion (this is mentioned above). PETA's point of view was that these dogs were being bred for research just to have these disabilities to research on. The fact is, their owners brought them to A&M to help them and gave them up for research to hopefully find a cure. I've personally taken a dog to A&M to have them help him; he was there for ~6 weeks and they ended up writing a paper on how to treat border collies with skin conditions because of it. Their vet school is second to none. Buffs (talk) 16:19, 24 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    Fixed/rephrased Buffs (talk) 15:07, 25 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The Research section in general is disorganised and has too much detail. The general information about the university's research, such as the paragraph starting with, "In 2017 Texas A&M ranked 19th nationally in R&D spending with total expenditure of $905.5 million." Should stay, but more specific information about their research should be summarised or removed.
    Fixed/rephrased/consolidated Buffs (talk) 15:07, 25 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The "Worldwide" section seems to be a combination of Texas A&M's international research and the Qatar campus. I think this section can be deleted and its information moved to other sections.
    The Worldwide section is about more than just research abroad, but the school's international reach of education. It opens with research and study abroad opportunities + TAMUQ. Then it describes international cooperation, a longer TAMUQ paragraph (there is some controversy there, so a little more is warranted), and ends with future campus options/what's been done in the meantime. I think that is a sufficient section that keeps it as concise as possible. Buffs (talk) 22:14, 24 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Those are some thoughts. I'm at "Campus". Z1720 (talk) 19:22, 23 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • Z1720, then we are caught up together except for the bare urls, the rankings section, and the Student body section. I'm holding off on these for a couple of reasons. These two content areas are going to take the most work + I'm waiting until the end to see if there's anything else we can/should incorporate. The bare urls are simply MUCH easier to adjust en masse. Buffs (talk)
    • @Buffs: I am sorry that I have not responded sooner: real life has had to take precedence for the past while. Since there are some sections that would require a little bit of work, would you (or anyone) be willing to ping me once those are complete? That will allow me to assess those sections and complete the rest of the review when I have more time. Again, sorry that this response was delayed. Z1720 (talk) 19:44, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
      • @Z1720: We're now into the third month of this with 2 people agreeing it's good and then there's yourself. I think it's pretty clear I'll address anything you throw at me. Let's close this FARC and I'll happily work with you to make any improvements when you have time. Keeping this open indefinitely is a no-go, IMHO. Buffs (talk) 21:09, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
        • @Buffs: Thanks for addressing all of my concerns and helping to get this article out of FAR as a keep. I agree that this shouldn't be open indefinitely, but I don't want to review a section that is going through massive restructuring or a large number of changes, as the comments I would give might be moot with the new prose. If the changes are complete, I am happy to continue my review. Are the changes in the sections mentioned above complete? There's also no time limit at FAR as long as changes are being made, so I am going to take my time through this to ensure the article is the best it can be. Z1720 (talk) 14:38, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
        • Give me your inputs and I'll address them all. I think it's more than a little unreasonable to have a virtual Sword of Damocles hangin over the article. Likewise, I don't have time to constantly address this points whenever you feel like getting around to it with the threat of a de-listing hanging over the discussion. You could fail to reply for a month, then I don't check the page when you do update it, and suddenly it's delisted. If you're in no hurry, let's close this and move it to the talk page where we can make updates a little more leisurely (for both of us) without the threat of delisting hanging over the discussion. Buffs (talk) 22:58, 6 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
          • @Buffs:, the @WP:FAR coordinators: can give more information about what happens if there are a lack of comments in this discussion. Since we have been making great progress, if this FARC looks like it will be closed as delist, I will work to make improvements to prevent this. I don't think we are close to that declaration yet. Z1720 (talk) 20:08, 8 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

More comments:

  • I removed information about the town that the main campus is located in, such as their population or that they are a largely educated people. I think this is off-topic to this article and struggled to find the connection to the campus, so I think it belongs in the wikiarticle about the town, not here.
    I think explaining the surrounding area helps explain something about the campus itself. The Air Force Academy, for example, is in the shadow of the Rocky Mountains, but isn't in them proper. However, they do influence the school's image pretty dramatically. That said, I left it. Buffs (talk) 19:53, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The Campus section is largely supported by primary sources. Are there any secondary sources that the article can draw upon, such as local newspapers?
    I'll see about adding add some more. Just because they are primary references doesn't mean they aren't appropriate. You would expect, for example, the schools to mention how degrees are conferred. They are not contentious facts in question. Buffs (talk) 19:53, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The Greek life section is mostly a list of the fraternities and sororities on campus. I think this should be moved to "Activities", and reduced to "At Texas A&M, about 10% of the undergraduate population is affiliated with a Greek fraternity or sorority. Texas A&M is home to 58 nationally or internationally recognized Greek letter organizations." The list is not really notable, as it is too large to give effective information to the reader, and the information of events put on by Greek life is not notable, as indicated by the lack of wikiarticle for these events. Therefore, I think both can be removed. Thoughts?
    I generally concur. I don't think mentioning every single one is necessary any more than mentioning every unit of the Corps of Cadets. Buffs (talk) 19:53, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The two images in Corps of Cadets is creating MOS:SANDWICH on my computer, and this was before I removed commentary on the marching band. Is this the case with others? I suggest removing the Robert Gates image.
    Sandwiching is when they are aligned together. MOS:SANDWICH states "Mul­ti­ple im­ages can be stag­gered right and left" as these are. If you have ANY two images staggered right and left, you can adjust a window width that will put text between them. I don't read that as the same intent.
  • "Until 1965, Corps membership was mandatory." Mandatory for what? This has been mentioned throughout the article right from the very beginning.
    Going to A&M. "Compulsory" perhaps? Buffs (talk) 21:24, 8 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The current head basketball coach is Buzz Williams." Needs a citation
    Added Buffs (talk) 21:24, 8 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "acknowledge athletes whose accomplishments on the field have brought credit to Texas A&M." This quotation needs a citation.
    Citation is already provided just 2 sentences later. We can duplicate it if you want to. Buffs (talk) 21:24, 8 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think the Hall of Fame section should not have its own heading, and instead become the third paragraph at the top of the Athletic section, per MOS:OVERSECTION. Thoughts?
    I'm ok with that.
  • The Alumni and staff section was too large, so I was going to split it and put headings for alumni and staff. However, I think there were only two staff mentioned in the section, so I removed them. They can be readded a separate staff section is established, although I do not think it is necessary.
    This is where we're having preference issues. If you'll note above, those staff members were specifically asked to be included. It's a no-win scenario. Buffs (talk) 21:24, 8 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • I removed alumni that I thought were not notable from the alumni section. This section is still too large, in my opinion, and I think others can be removed like most of the business leaders and some of the military personal mentioned.

This brings me to the end of the article. I haven't looked at the formatting for the references yet, but I hope to assess that in the coming days. In general, I am still concerned that some sections continue to rely on primary sources from the university, but I have faith that this will be sorted soon as new sources are found. I removed a lot of prose that I thought was WP:PROMO, off-topic or too much detail for this article. Let me know if you have any questions or concerns. Z1720 (talk) 20:08, 8 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

All righty...lots of changes. To be blunt, I like most of them, but some are no-go for me; I'll rephrase/re-add but make sure they aren't WP:PROMO. Some of these additions add a little "color" to the article. As for primary sources, we can always augment some of them with outside sources, but much like the military or government institutions, they are going to track their own history better than most. While there is certainly the temptation to fudge numbers, their credibility is worth far more and they aren't going to fudge things like enrollment numbers. The cited facts are generally non-contentious. Buffs (talk) 21:24, 8 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Re-added the Aggie Band info. 4 sentences isn't too much for an entity that plays a such prominent role in school activities. Buffs (talk) 21:32, 8 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Re-added a little bit, but I think most of the sentences are a net benefit; they can be tweaked more later. Readded the congressmen in particular as they are WAY more notable than the first transgender judge, IMHO. Last items: rephrase those two paragraphs and fix the citations. Buffs (talk) 18:18, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I've been somewhat-following the changes and reverts Buffs has done, with some arguments that are worth exploring (I tend to want shorter articles, so I am not surprised that some of my deletions have been restored). @Buffs: please ping me when you are done reviewing my edits and I will take another look at the article. Z1720 (talk) 18:48, 11 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Rankings section is complete. We can always add more/take away some. Buffs (talk) 14:14, 14 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Student Life section is complete. Not much is out of date, but some minor rephrasing was all we needed. We're down to just citations at that point, soread for your review now on the remaining items, @Z1720:Buffs (talk) 15:12, 14 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

More comments below:

  • For ref 11, "Texas Higher Education Enrollments" leads to an excel spreadsheet. Is there a better document that has this information, like a report with an author? If not, can this ref have more information in the citation?
  • "Fall 2012 Executive Summary" was used to support the statement, "As of 2020, Texas A&M's student body is the second largest in the United States" which the report doesn't verify, so I removed it as outdated.
  • I went through the infobox and removed some references as the information is cited in the article, per WP:INFOBOXREF. I think other references in this infobox can be removed after the information placed in the article.
  • In the "University era" section of the history, the Chemistry Plaza image is causing MOS:SANDWICH with the Presidential Library image. Since the article text doesn't mention the plaza, can we remove the plaza image, or move it to a different section?
  • "and confirmed that removal of the statue would require Texas Congressional approval." Who confirmed this?
  • "The admission rate for students who applied as undergraduates in 2012 was 67%." This number should be updated, if possible.
  • Texas A&M University System is referred to as several different descriptors (TAMUS, Texas A&M System). One short-form should be picked and used consistently in the article.

The reduction in comments shows that there is little work to be done! We are very close. Z1720 (talk) 01:20, 18 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • For ref 11...
    I'll add another source when I clear up the citations as well as add additional info for this citation. Holding off changes on that until I'm done with the rest (otherwise "ref 11" loses meaning when it becomes #10 or #34...)
  • "Fall 2012 Executive Summary" was used
    Good call
  • I went through the infobox...
    Good call
  • In the "University era" section of the history, the Chemistry Plaza image is causing MOS:SANDWICH with the Presidential Library image. Since the article text doesn't mention the plaza, can we remove the plaza image, or move it to a different section?
    See justification above for left images. Also, fun little tidbit, the water fountain in front of the chemistry building is in the shape of a water molecule...
  • "and confirmed that removal of the statue would require Texas Congressional approval." Who confirmed this?
    clarified...the school did
  • "The admission rate for students who applied as undergraduates in 2012 was 67%." This number should be updated, if possible.
    63% updated. https://www.usnews.com/best-colleges/texas-am-university-college-station-10366/applying
  • Texas A&M University System...
    Fixed along with capitalization IAW MOS

If there is nothing else by 28 Sept, I'll clean up the source annotations last. Buffs (talk) 16:38, 21 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Please ping me when you clean up the sources so I know to check them. Z1720 (talk) 20:43, 23 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I'll hopefully have time this weekend and will ping when done. Buffs (talk) 22:53, 24 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Additional comments below:

  • "As of 2020, Texas A&M's student body is the second largest in the United States." Neither reference at the end of this sentence verify this claim. ""Texas A&M Reports Fall 2021 Enrollment". Might be used instead to verify these claims.
  • "are retained as a link to the university's tradition." -> Are retained as a tribute to the university's former designation?
  • "Under pressure from the legislature," I assume this is the Texas legislature. Can this be specified in the article?
  • "and became nationally recognized for its programs in agriculture, engineering, and military science." The reference for this statement is from the university itself, meaning that the university itself is verifying that it became nationally recognized at this time and a potential COI with the source. I suggest either this statement is removed or a new source is given.
  • How is the Chemistry Plaza image relevant to this section? If it is not, it should be removed. I know I recommended its removal above, but regardless of if SANDWICH applies, it still needs a reason to be here, and the plaza is not mentioned in the article.

Those are my comments. I think this might be my last set. Z1720 (talk) 01:34, 30 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

My notes...
  • Updated student population with 2020 info/source. 2021 info appears to have them ahead of USF with no one else close, but that isn't conclusive nor published in other sources. Will update as needed in the future.
  • Updated A&M description as requested, good upgrade.
  • Updated/wikilinked "The lege".
  • The reference for "became nationally recognized for its programs in agriculture, engineering, and military science." is the Texas State Historical Society (an independent, nonprofit organization for >100 years), not Texas A&M. I'm a little perplexed as to how you got that. Updated ref anyway.
  • The plaza itself is not mentioned by name, but was part of the facilities upgrades over the past 70 years.

@Z1720: That should be everything. Cleared to close? Buffs (talk) 17:01, 1 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Intent to review; please hold closing. (Particularly since correct notifications were not done and I just did them.) SandyGeorgia (Talk) 18:17, 31 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Oldag07: Notes on article

Comment 1; First off, It seems like this article is in an archive. Does it mean it survived its review? We should move this page to Wikipedia:Featured article review/Texas A&M University/

No, it is in the right place; all FARs start off automatically in the next open archive. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 22:08, 31 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comment 2; I am sorry about the grammar. I wrote this in a rush, and I don’t particularly want to spend the time to proofread it.

Introduction; It is impossible for me to review this objectively. The notion of getting the Texas A&M University article as a "Featured Article" is one of the reasons why I got into wikipedia editing in the first place. Hence my scren name. Originally written as a joke, it hasn't aged well. Moreover, when we made this push, I was a senior at A&M, and I was intimately familiar with the topic. I feel like my knowledge of the topic is not what it was. And while I am proud of the work I put in to this article, but I really don't have the energy to care if this is demoted or enough. I am literally training for a marathon and my job already puts me in front of a screen way too much. That being said, I got a lot better at writing during grad school. I am actually an administrator on a mid size Fandom (Wikia) site. And my unique perspective might help improve this article. While will try to give what feedback I can. Of note, I don't think any of my criticisms disqualify the article. It seems like Z1720 has done a fantastic job nitpicking over the article and Buffs has done a fantastic job of cleaning up these errors. Thank you so much for helping to improve this article. I, instead will look at the forest, not the trees, and go for a big picture critique of the article. Of note is the Georgetown University article, the only other featured university article. I feel that article has just as many problems as this one does.

History I have always found history sections difficult to write in Wikipedia articles, most notably at the end of these. Knowing what is significant and what isn't while history is "being made" is hard.

  • Perhaps adding dates for each section like the History of Texas A&M page would be useful.
  • The Black Lives matter protests belong on this page. But it seems out of place with what is going on with the rest of the history section. It is a weird way to end the section. Perhaps some sort of summary of what Texas A&M has become would be a good way to end the section. Something like "As of 2021, the university growing at a rate of ???. it is a leader in research in the areas of ???? Texas A&M continues the challenges of merging its rich traditions with the challenges of the 21st century". That definitely is a way to end the History of Texas A&M University article. Something shorter?

Student Body

  • This article probably needs something about graduation rates.
  • Conservatism/Religion- The word "conservative" is only mentioned once in the article. And that isn't something that describes the student body. I know we used to mention it more. I know recent events have redefined the definition of "conservative". The average student might even be more liberal than average American. But in academia, A&M is still on the right. The average Aggie is much more religious than most university students.

Research

  • Research sections of any university article are also difficult to write. Summarizing all of the research at a university the size of this university is hard. This section highlights a bunch of interesting research this that A&M does, and then it ignores others. Great, A&M made its uranium safer. What about the university's work with knockout genes in mice? What about the 100 million dollars the university just earned from the DOD to research hypersonics? [3] I don't know how to prioritize what research belongs on this page and what doesn't.
  • Here is some big picture things that could be added. What is A&M's are on total research expenditures, Where does get its funding, how much it spends its money compared to other universities. I also know A&M has been very aggressive in hiring Nobel Prize researchers. The word "Nobel" is not found with a quick Ctl-F search. Researching this critique, I found a great article on that very issue. https://today.tamu.edu/2021/02/10/first-in-texas-am-research-tops-1-billion-mark/

Campus

  • Oh wow, the campus page is really outdated. Obviously not something that affects this article.
  • I feel like this seciton is a very clinical description of the campus. But what does the campus "feel like". How is its architecture styled? What are the the major buildings on campus, notably the MSC and Kyle field.
  • I haven't been back to main campus in years. Some updated photos would be nice.

Student life

  • Certainly the section I am most rusty at. I am mixed on why Texas A&M Hillel is in the article. It is the "oldest" in the nation, but it certainly isn't a particularly large organization. Most people who graduate from the school probably never heard of it.
  • I know Greeks do not own the school like they do at some Universities. But I am not sure how to write that appropriately. The student body has voted against having a Greek block... on several occasions. Maybe that is enough?

Traditions

  • I think this section is pretty spot on. It is emphasizes the importants of traditions, and gives a good overview of the topic. But it doesn't "go into the weeds".

Athletics

  • Really… Is the basketball section bigger than the football section? This is a football school. Make me feel like it is one when I read this.
  • Basketball. Buzz Williams might be in is 10th year as head coach, but we should mention that he has only been at A&M since 2019.
  • Other sports. This certainly could be longer. How many varsity teams does A&M have? I know A&M has one of the only equestrian teams in the nation. One way to discuss how comprehensive the school's athletics programs is to discuss how well the school has done in the NACDA Directors' Cup.

Alumni

  • I think these are horrible on almost all university pages. I believe this section not only should list out notable alumnim, but it should include stuff about the Aggie alumni as a whole. Here are some ideas of what could be added.
  • What are the typical jobs Aggies take after they graduate?
  • Where do they typically live?
  • How do Aggie alumni feel about their alma mater?
  • How large is the alumni association?
  • How generous are Aggies to their alumni association?
  • How many and how large are Aggie booster clubs?
  • How are Aggie alumni perceived by others?
  • I think the hall of fame article in the sports section could be moved into a section like that.

Final Comments. I don't believe anything I wrote above disqualifies this article. They were written as a way to improve the article. I feel like I should add some of the suggestions myself. Maybe I will someday. Thanks and Gig em! Oldag07 (talk) 21:51, 31 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Oldag07: I'm willing to address each of these points in due course, however, as you state "I don't believe anything I wrote above disqualifies this article", I'm going to refrain from addressing them until after this FAR is complete. It's been 3 months and I'm not going to lengthen it when even the criticizer says it isn't necessary. Likewise, many of the points you address are there because of wikiproject guidelines, which are de facto rules. Changing those would literally require changing thousands of other articles. I don't argue many of your points, but I'm going to refrain from adjusting anything that isn't an FA hangup. Buffs (talk) 17:09, 1 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Some bits of OldAg's concerns will be an "FA hangup" for me when I do my read-through (which I won't start until others like Z1720 indicate they are ready). I understand your frustration, and it is unfortunate that notifications were incomplete, but we mark an article as passing FAR when it is at featured standard, and FARs have remained open for a year. What I would like to see from OldAg's writeup:
  • History: I don't agree those changes are necessary.
  • Student body: OldAg could well be right, but should have provided sources-- we can't go on a goose chase for that kind of content.
  • Research: OldAg's comments rightly indicate a problem with how we assign due weight to mention of the University's research. Education articles tend to become promotional as we add content based on non-independent sources rather than using independent coverage to assign due weight. I see that here, including press releases from the University, and would rather see more independent mentions used to determine what research activities warrant inclusion in this article (over press releases). Some of the sources in that section, also, are old, making me wonder whether currently significant research is given appropriate weight. A comprehensive search for sources should be done in this area, and I see OldAg already supplied a source.
  • Campus: some of what concerns OldAg can be conveyed with images rather than text (Stanford University is gorgeous, but that is not conveyed in the text, rather than images). If OldAg wants text in this area, then supplying a source would help.
  • Student life: it looks like some of those points should not be difficult to fix.
  • Athletics: some needs to be incorporated, and OldAg even gave sources. But it seems to me that the basketball section is larger than football simply because basketball has a women's team, so I disagree with that critique of OldAg's.
  • Alumni, ugh (as they always are): convert it to a list, move it off the page, link to it, and focus on broader discussion of the type that OldAg mentions.
Let me know when some of OldAg's commentary has been completed, along with Z1720's work, and I will read through. In advance, please keep an eye as to whether the article is using good sources, or just a publicity brochure based on University press releases (I haven't looked yet). Also, please remember that when a FAC or FAR closes, that version is marked in the Article milestones, so it would be awkward to close a FAR when there are still improvements needed, leaving a less-than-best version flagged in article history. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 18:01, 1 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Incomplete comments from Sdkb

First, I acknowledge Buffs' understandable frustration that this FAR has been open for so long. Higher education articles are notoriously difficult, and this one has undergone a lot of changes to bring it closer to the 2021 FA standards. However, looking through the article, I'm not yet persuaded that it has met them. Comments:

Lead

  • ”the only university in Texas to hold simultaneous designations as a land, sea, and space grant institution” reads as promotional and undue, especially since my understanding is that space-grant is not particularly important.
  • MOS:LEADCITE has not been followed; many excess citations in the lead.
  • ”Agricultural and Mechanical College of Texas: is a bit of an MOS:EGG link.
  • ”Under the leadership of President James Earl Rudder” Is "the leadership of" needed? Seems promotional.
  • The overall organization of the lead is lacking and needs a bunch of reordering. “The university offers degrees in more than 150 courses of study through ten colleges and houses 18 research institutes.”, the sentence about the university's academics, shouldn't be way at the end. Meanwhile, “The Texas A&M Aggies athletes compete in 18 varsity sports as a member of the Southeastern Conference.” gets to be in the first paragraph, with the double problem that it's then disconnected from the other sentences about student life in the last paragraph. Listing examples of the organizations that fund the university's research also seems questionable for the lead and certainly the first paragraph.
  • ”Working with various A&M-related agencies, the school has a direct presence in each of the 254 counties in Texas.” appears to be uncited and does not appear in the body.
  • Texas A&M Corps of Cadets is linked twice in the lead.
  • Is there a list of largest U.S. campuses to wikilink?
  • Infobox has incorrect capitalization with “College Town”.
  • Accreditation is unsourced (and should be in body).
  • Infobox has the academic staff count but is missing the total staff count.
  • Does The Battalion have official status from the university? Most college newspapers don't and therefore shouldn't be in the infobox.

Other

  • The history section photos need improvement. There's only one actual historical photo in it, the World Wars era section is unillustrated, and then there's a sandwich.
  • The 2017 statue removal paragraph has poor wording.
  • In the student body section, I don't think it's necessary to give the percentage of students that took SAT vs. ACT.
  • The student body section is lacking a bunch of demographic information. There should be coverage of racial and socioeconomic demographics at the very least.
  • ”as follows” is poor wording.
  • The rankings section just gives a bunch of listings of individual rankings, many of questionable value, rather than a holistic overview of the university's reputation.
  • The campus tree photo in the research section doesn't have anything to do with research.
  • The photo in the worldwide section of four guys in a group photo with a flag is not very compelling.
  • ”Several halls include a "substance-free" floor, where residents pledge to avoid bringing alcohol, drugs, or cigarettes into the hall.” The wikilinking choices here seem odd; why the first two but not cigarettes?
  • ”The Corps welcomed female members in the fall of 1974,[1]. has a punctuation error, and "welcomed" seems promotional compared to "began accepting".
    The university houses the public broadcasting stations: KAMU-TV, a PBS member station since 1970, KAMU-FM an NPR affiliate since 1977, and the student-run KANM, "the college station of College Station".: Needs grammar fix.
  • My concern above that the alumni section is significantly overlong has not yet been addressed. For smaller schools with less alumni, I find it more justifiable for individual people to be noteworthy in the context of the institution as a whole, but for somewhere as large as Texas A&M, I'd like to see mainly numbers (e.g. how many billionaires, how many generals, etc.), with only a few of the very most notable people individually called out. The rest can be moved to the people list page.
  • The alumni section also focuses exclusively on alumni. I'd like to see its scope expanded to "noted people" to also include notable faculty members.
  • In the external links section, I question whether having a link to the athletics page is justifiable per WP:ELMIN. I would suggest instead linking The Battalion's website (see this thread), the accreditation page from SACS (since it's an independent source with detailed info), and the College Navigator page (since it's from the U.S. government).

For content beyond the lead, I did only spot checks on various areas, not a full read. If I looked longer and deeper, I'm sure many additional concerns would arise, but the above is as much effort as I'm willing to devote. I hope these comments are helpful. Best, {{u|Sdkb}}talk 19:13, 2 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Sdkb thanks for the indepth review! Templates are discouraged at FAC and FAR because they cause the FAC page and archives to exceed template limits, which then cuts off the page. You have made extensive use of the tq template above. Would you mind if I go through and just convert them to straight (non-colored) quotes? Because of problems like this, there is consideration to remove the FAR page from FAC, to the detriment of FAR, so we should be sure to not use templates here. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 14:18, 9 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@SandyGeorgia: Sure, go ahead; thanks! {{u|Sdkb}}talk 15:31, 9 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

There is a list of sources questioned (above at 24 July 2021) that does not appear to have been addressed. Just looking at the first on the list, I can find no indication of reliability at largest.org. Sourcing should be reviewed. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 15:38, 4 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Buffs responses to each

Lead

  • the only university in Texas to hold simultaneous designations as a land, sea, and space grant institution reads as promotional and undue, especially since my understanding is that space-grant is not particularly important.
    NASA would disagree and it has been there for ~14 years based on plenty of prior consensus. Texas A&M is a prominent research institution with ties to US space programs nationwide.
  • MOS:LEADCITE has not been followed; many excess citations in the lead.
    Since anything that may be challenged needs a source, a source has been provided. I disagree as well, but that was the consensus in the FA.
  • Agricultural and Mechanical College of Texas is a bit of an MOS:EGG link.
    Not at all. It's a link to the history. If you don't like it, feel free to remove it
  • Under the leadership of President James Earl Rudder Is "the leadership of" needed? Seems promotional.
    It explains who was in charge and a simple variation in "Under X, ABC happened...Under Y, DGH happened". Doesn't sound promotional to me in the slightest
  • The overall organization of the lead is lacking and needs a bunch of reordering. The university offers degrees in more than 150 courses of study through ten colleges and houses 18 research institutes., the sentence about the university's academics, shouldn't be way at the end. Meanwhile, The Texas A&M Aggies athletes compete in 18 varsity sports as a member of the Southeastern Conference. gets to be in the first paragraph, with the double problem that it's then disconnected from the other sentences about student life in the last paragraph. Listing examples of the organizations that fund the university's research also seems questionable for the lead and certainly the first paragraph.
    This sounds very much like preferences, not standards. I have no objection to addressing these, but not as part of FAR. SEC is included in the lead paragraph because there is a very strong popular association with athletic conferences in the US.
  • Working with various A&M-related agencies, the school has a direct presence in each of the 254 counties in Texas. appears to be uncited and does not appear in the body.
    removed
  • Texas A&M Corps of Cadets is linked twice in the lead.
    fixed
  • Is there a list of largest U.S. campuses to wikilink?
    List_of_United_States_public_university_campuses_by_enrollment was removed initially per WP:OVERLINK
  • Infobox has incorrect capitalization with “College Town”.
    I see nothing with "College Town"
  • Accreditation is unsourced (and should be in body).
    fixed
  • Infobox has the academic staff count but is missing the total staff count.
    Is that a standard?
  • Does The Battalion have official status from the university? Most college newspapers don't and therefore shouldn't be in the infobox.
    This was recently added. I have no objection to its removal or addition. As for whether it should be in the infobox, that's a matter of opinion, not an objective standard.

Other

  • The history section photos need improvement. There's only one actual historical photo in it, the World Wars era section is unillustrated, and then there's a sandwich.
    What needs improvement? As for photos, some were removed because it was "too cluttered". WP:IDONTLIKEIT applies in spades to preferences. The "sandwich" was noted above; moved photo anyway.
  • The 2017 statue removal paragraph has poor wording.
    See talk page and history for the rationale behind the word choice.
  • In the student body section, I don't think it's necessary to give the percentage of students that took SAT vs. ACT.
    Basic acceptance averages seem acceptable. Many look at these pages to look for colleges and this is pertinent information.
  • The student body section is lacking a bunch of demographic information. There should be coverage of racial and socioeconomic demographics at the very least.
    What would you like to see?
  • as follows is poor wording.
    WP:IDONTLIKEIT? Rephrased anyway.
  • The rankings section just gives a bunch of listings of individual rankings, many of questionable value, rather than a holistic overview of the university's reputation.
    The University confers degrees in such a wide list of studies and various ranking systems have wide-ranging criteria. There is no set standard. What would you propose?
  • The campus tree photo in the research section doesn't have anything to do with research.
    Swapped with Zachry
  • The photo in the worldwide section of four guys in a group photo with a flag is not very compelling.
    If you'll note the caption, it's from the TAMUQ campus in Qatar; the part of the main campus located in another country...it's pretty unique. What's not compelling?
  • Several halls include a "substance-free" floor, where residents pledge to avoid bringing alcohol, drugs, or cigarettes into the hall. The wikilinking choices here seem odd; why the first two but not cigarettes?
    WP:OVERLINK. If you feel it would be beneficial, please add it. If you think the wikilinks are unnecessary, please remove them. Your criticism could be easily fixed rather than voicing such a vague complaint.
  • The Corps welcomed female members in the fall of 1974,[1]. has a punctuation error, and "welcomed" seems promotional compared to "began accepting".
    I would argue that they were allowed to attend. I don't think they were "accepted" as readily/
  • The university houses the public broadcasting stations: KAMU-TV, a PBS member station since 1970, KAMU-FM an NPR affiliate since 1977, and the student-run KANM, "the college station of College Station". Needs grammar fix.
    Fixed a missing comma. Please be more specific if it's something else.
  • My concern above that the alumni section is significantly overlong has not yet been addressed. For smaller schools with less alumni, I find it more justifiable for individual people to be noteworthy in the context of the institution as a whole, but for somewhere as large as Texas A&M, I'd like to see mainly numbers (e.g. how many billionaires, how many generals, etc.), with only a few of the very most notable people individually called out. The rest can be moved to the people list page.
    We indeed have addressed and trimmed the page substantially. Pretending we've done nothing is absurd. All of the people mentioned are on the people page. These were largely chosen during the FA process.
  • The alumni section also focuses exclusively on alumni. I'd like to see its scope expanded to "noted people" to also include notable faculty members.
    "The alumni section also focuses exclusively on alumni"...how exactly is that a complaint? Isn't that exactly what you'd expect in an Alumni section? If you want it to be alumni and notable faculty, we could consider a change, however, most notable faculty are famous for their contributions prior to coming to A&M, not their work while at A&M. As such, it's fame/notability by mere association and the primary reason such people were removed from such a list.
  • In the external links section, I question whether having a link to the athletics page is justifiable per WP:ELMIN. I would suggest instead linking The Battalion's website (see this thread), the accreditation page from SACS (since it's an independent source with detailed info), and the College Navigator page (since it's from the U.S. government).
    Their athletics page makes since as that and college admissions are the two primary reasons people popularly look up information about a school in the US, and certainly A&M. For the other sources, feel free to add them.

Last updated: Buffs (talk) 03:39, 15 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

For content beyond the lead, I did only spot checks on various areas, not a full read. If I looked longer and deeper, I'm sure many additional concerns would arise, but the above is as much effort as I'm willing to devote. I hope these comments are helpful. Best, {{u|Sdkb}}talk 19:13, 2 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

There is a list of sources questioned (above at 24 July 2021) that does not appear to have been addressed. Just looking at the first on the list, I can find no indication of reliability at largest.org. Sourcing should be reviewed. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 15:38, 4 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Uh...I responded within 72 hours. Buffs (talk) 02:42, 15 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
No improvements since OldAg's post a week ago, and no movement on Sdkb's list. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 09:09, 10 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

FARC section

Many edits were made during the review section but progress seems to have stalled. Nikkimaria (talk) 04:17, 14 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]