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* ref#1 is so extensively cited within the article that I would suggest to split it between two separate references, one for "Howard Staunton: part I" and the other for "Howard Staunton: part II"
* ref#1 is so extensively cited within the article that I would suggest to split it between two separate references, one for "Howard Staunton: part I" and the other for "Howard Staunton: part II"
::I've just used my browser's "Print Preview" facility to check the total length - a little under 6 A4 pages, which shorter than many of the other sources cited. [[Special:Contributions/82.34.73.184|82.34.73.184]] ([[User talk:82.34.73.184|talk]]) 16:53, 19 June 2008 (UTC)
* as Murray is cited almost word by word in this paragraph, it would be better practice to acknowledge that by putting quotation marks.
* as Murray is cited almost word by word in this paragraph, it would be better practice to acknowledge that by putting quotation marks.
::After re-reading Murray, I remember why I presented it as I did - in the last sentence the phrase "played the part of Lorenzo in the Merchant of Venice to Edmund Kean's Shylock" is archaic and will be hard for readers to understand if they are not theatre fans (I've only seen such phrases in the context of theatre, not movies). Here's the whole passage: [[User:Philcha|Philcha]] ([[User talk:Philcha|talk]]) 19:15, 18 June 2008 (UTC)
::After re-reading Murray, I remember why I presented it as I did - in the last sentence the phrase "played the part of Lorenzo in the Merchant of Venice to Edmund Kean's Shylock" is archaic and will be hard for readers to understand if they are not theatre fans (I've only seen such phrases in the context of theatre, not movies). Here's the whole passage: [[User:Philcha|Philcha]] ([[User talk:Philcha|talk]]) 19:15, 18 June 2008 (UTC)

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Review of Howard Staunton

Howard Staunton - as good as I can make it right now Philcha (talk) 16:18, 17 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]


Comment I am really impressed by the quality of this article, the members of the WikiProject Chess seem to improve every day their knowledge of what makes a good article! The article is organised, well referenced and encyclopedic. I think it is close to GA-class, and possibly more with some improvements. Here are my first remarks based on this version of the article. SyG (talk) 12:15, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

General remarks

  • There are several typos here and there. Just to list a few:
  •  Done Anderssen's victory over him in the 1851 London 1851 International tournament effectively...
  •  Done Eary in 1843 Staunton played either a match or a pair of matches... : I guess "Early" was meant.
  • the strongest players he saw in London, Saint-Amant and George Walker, could could easily have given him Rook odds
  •  Done and lists it as as Staunton's best performance
  •  Done von der Lasa later suggested this was why... : first letter should be in capital.
As it's the start of a sentence.Philcha (talk) 18:07, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I suggest to read thoroughly the text once again to correct all.
The trouble is I see what I expect to see - fresh eyes will do better. Thanks for catching the ones above.
  •  Done One difficulty of this article is that Stauton was not only a chess champion, but also a Shakespeare scholar. My knowledge of Shakespeare is vastly insufficient to assess whether this aspect is adequately covered or not. If you do not mint, I would link to request the help of someone from the Wikipedia:WikiProject Shakespeare to see if the article is good enough on this aspect or not.
Why didn't I think of that? Doh! Philcha (talk) 18:07, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • There could be a case for splitting the Biography in two parts, the first one dedicated to the chess aspects and the other one (shorter, I presume) dedicated to the Shakespeare aspects. What do you think ?
I considered that and preferred chronologcal sequence because IMO that would gives a clearer impression of how energetic Staunton was. Splitting into chess and Shakespeare aspects would also make it more difficult to find a good place for his book on education. Philcha (talk) 18:07, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • One of the requirements for Featured Articles is brilliant prose. While I am definitely a complete patzer on prose, I still feel the text could generally be improved, for example:
  • the sentence "In 1836, Staunton came to London, and there he took out a subscription for ..." could be transformed in "In 1836, Staunton came to London, where he took out a subscription for ..."
In general I have strong a preference for the simplest possible style: I think Wikipedia's target audience should be curious 12-year olds; a simple style is best in documents that are to be read online (see for example Web Style Guide and the rather simple style used in WP:MOS. The fundamental reason is that web users don't want to read, they want to scan. (Jakob Nielsen). Philcha (talk) 18:07, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • the word "however" is not well placed in the sentence "However after a long and difficult negotiation, which he reported in the Chess Player’s Chronicle, Staunton went...". I suggest the following: "After a long and difficult negotiation, however, Staunton went...". The fact that it was reported in the Chess Player’s Chronicle can be put in a footnote.
Re "However", burying it deep in the sentence IMO makes it more difficult to read - humans are not good at stack processing.
The mention of the Chess Player’s Chronicle is a case of my paranoia about important web sources for chess history. Also that page of Winter's is cited several times, mostly for different C.N.'s. If these citations were more specific, it would be necessary to give a separate citation in each case; or to make the one footnote say e.g. "For topic X Winter cites original source A, for topic Y he cites original source B, etc." Is either of these desirable? Philcha (talk) 18:07, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Several references miss a Retrieve date. As this is a purely bureaucratic and thankless task, I have no problems to add them myself, once I have finished the review of the article.
Thanks! I thought I'd got them all. Isn't there a bot that can do this? Philcha (talk) 18:07, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • The "References" section could be split between a "Notes" section and a "References" section, for the ease of reading.
What types of thing do you think should go in which? I'm also not sure what you mean by "for ease of reading". Philcha (talk) 18:07, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • When possible, the citation of books should contain the page number.
Some of the citations were already there and to book I don't have, so I WP:AGF - e.g. Hooper & Whyld's Oxford Companion to Chess. There's also a problem with Fine's The World's Great Chess Games - I have the 1952 UK edition, and Fine revised the book for a later edition. If anyone can help resolve these, I'd appreciate it.

Lead

  • During the GA-review of Alexander Alekhine the reviewer mentioned that the Lead should contain four paragraphs. I think it can apply here as well.
As you said above, the problem with Staunton is his exceptionally wide range of activities and the fact that his chess and Shakespearean writing career extended from the middle of his chess career to the end of his life.. I think combining the paras would be confusing in this case. Philcha (talk) 18:07, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  •  Done Spaces are missing between date of birth and date of death. Also, I am not sure we should wikilink the year of birth: as the day is missing, the wikiformatting will not work anyway. This is backed by the following sentence in Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates and numbers)#Autoformatting and linking: Links to date elements that do not contain both a day number and a month are not required; for example, ..., and month and year combinations. Hence, while it is currently (April 1810June 22 1874), I would guess it should be (April 1810 – June 22 1874). Sorry to be that pedestrian :-)
In general I agree. There are few occasions when wikiling e.g. a year (1492 springs to mind) or day (25 December) add something to the article, but these are rare examples. Philcha (talk) 18:07, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • The Lead contains some information that, in my opinion, are anecdotic for a Lead and better let in the main body of the article. I would for example delete all of the following:
  •  Done ...(the other contender was von der Lasa)
  • Despite the story that Paul Morphy described him as "the author of ... some devilish bad games",
I thought that story was so well-known (especially in USA, where there's a strong anti-Staunton prejudice) that should be mentioned up front. Philcha (talk) 18:07, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • In fact a heart ailment made it very unlikely that Staunton would be capable of serious competitive chess after 1853, and he was extremely busy working under a contract to produce editions of Shakespeare's plays.
I understand your point, but removing it would leave a very short paragraph.
  • I am not able to perceive clearly the structure of the Lead. The first paragraph talks about his chess books and the chess tournament he organised, the second paragraph is on style, the third paragraph is on the unplayed match with Morphy, the fourth is on Shakespeare, then the fifth starts back at the beginning of the early life, then the last one talks about his character. This just reads like the author tried to sum up all the information from the main body (which is definitely good), but in my humble opinion this needs to be rewritten into a logical flow.
I've been looking at this while reading your other comments. The simplest change I can see would be to move the short bio (currently 5th para) to 2nd para. After that the problem is that there were so many threads in his life. Where would be a good place to present different ways of arranging this so that others can comment? Philcha (talk) 18:07, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
The main elements of the structure were meant to be:
  • Why Staunton is notable.
  • Short bio.
  • Chess style.
  • Why no match with Morphy (a well-known controversy)
  • Non-chess activities.
  • Personality
I think these are separate topics and combining paras would be confusing, On the other hand if themes are not clear there's a problem. What do you think would make them clearer?
  • It is explained that Staunton was one of the two best players, but in the next sentence it is written that Anderssen became chess champion. The difference is clear from the rest of the article, but if someone reads just the Lead it is confusing.
It currently says "who was probably one of the world's two strongest players from 1843 to 1851". Woul d it help if the next sentence said ".. principal organizer of the first international chess tournament in 1851"? Philcha (talk) 16:44, 19 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I do not think the infobox should contain that he was World Champion. I appreciate it is mentionned "unofficial", but I think it should just be deleted because it is not true.
We have an outstanding issue about the whole "official" / "unofficial" distinction (see Talk:World Chess Championship. I think "official" / "unofficial" is rubbish, but I'm not sure that's the consensus at present. He was explicitly hailed as world champion after beating St. Amant in Paris. The real problem with all this is where we put the beginning of Steinitz' reign. I'm not sure about this at present. Philcha (talk) 18:07, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I've just noticed that Murray (part 1) wrote in 1908, "... modern writers, attempting to trace back the line of champions from the time of the first claimant to the title—William Steinitz—regard this match as a contest for the championship, and date Staunton's tenure from this year." This only emphasises how we need to sort out how we label "champions by acclamation", and especially Steinitz. Thanks for making me look! Philcha (talk) 21:26, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  •  Done In the sentence "Staunton was a relatively minor Shakespearean scholar but his work is still well-regarded, and he also wrote a book about English public schools which presented some very progressive ideas", there is no connection between the two parts, so I would just split it into two separate sentences.
  • The sentence "There are no reliable sources for his early life" sounds a bit too "wikipedian". Why not something like "Little is known on his early life", or "From his early life it is only known that..." ?
"Little is known about his early life" would raise objections from readers who read accounts based on Staunton's later words, unless we used emphasis as in "Little is known about his early life" - which strikes me as rather a lawyer's trick. "From his early life it is only known that ..." has a bigger problem - if "known" is interpreted striclty, it is only known that he was born, probably around 1810!
The material cited was provided by one of Winter's contributors, who wrote "None of this throws any real light on Howard Staunton. In this case the simple truth may be the safest policy - there are no reliable sources. Philcha (talk) 16:44, 19 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Staunton's life (introduction)

  • ref#1 is so extensively cited within the article that I would suggest to split it between two separate references, one for "Howard Staunton: part I" and the other for "Howard Staunton: part II"
I've just used my browser's "Print Preview" facility to check the total length - a little under 6 A4 pages, which shorter than many of the other sources cited. 82.34.73.184 (talk) 16:53, 19 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • as Murray is cited almost word by word in this paragraph, it would be better practice to acknowledge that by putting quotation marks.
After re-reading Murray, I remember why I presented it as I did - in the last sentence the phrase "played the part of Lorenzo in the Merchant of Venice to Edmund Kean's Shylock" is archaic and will be hard for readers to understand if they are not theatre fans (I've only seen such phrases in the context of theatre, not movies). Here's the whole passage: Philcha (talk) 19:15, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"Howard Staunton was born in 1810, and was reputed to be the natural son of Frederick Howard, fifth Earl of Carlisle. He was neglected in youth, and received little or no education, and although he spent some time in Oxford, he was never a member of the University. When he came of age he received a few thousand pounds under his father's will, a fortune which he soon squandered. We know little of his manner of life at this time, but he was passionately fond of the theatre, and apparently spent some time on the stage. In later life he often used to tell how he had once played the part of Lorenzo in the Merchant of Venice to Edmund Kean's Shylock."
  • Winter is abundantly cited as being dubious about some facts of Staunton's life, but I cannot find that in the mentionned reference. Would it be possible to be more specific and give the precise number of the "Chess Note" from which this is coming ? (for the moment only the number of the "Chess Note Archive" is given.)
C.N. 4776. "Staunton’s origins" Philcha (talk) 19:15, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Staunton's life: First steps in chess

  • "...could easily have given him Rook odds" : the reader is not supposed to know what "Rook odds" is.
And a Wikipedia search for "odds chess" gave no hits! Considering that Staunton gave odds to most players later in his career (eventually even to Cochrane, whom Chessmetric ranks the world's srongest not long before their match), it's quite an important topic. Do you think it would be a good idea to write a stub article about chess odds? I know articles are supposed to be as self-contained as possible. The alternative would be to write a note on odds into this article, but I don't fancy trying to find sources (other than my own vast knowledge, ha!ha! hee!hee!) Philcha (talk) 19:15, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  •  Done "In 1838 he played many games with Captain Evans, inventor of the Evans Gambit. He also lost a match against the German chess writer Aaron Alexandre in 1838" : the repetition of "in 1838" is unfortunate and heavy style. Why not something like "The same year he also lost..." ?
  • What is the reference for the 1838 matches ?
Same as for Popert match - I thought it would look odd to quote the same ref twice for consecutive phrases. Philcha (talk) 19:15, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "which he won by a single game" : looking at ref#3 it seems Century British Chess says the match was won by a single game but other sources say differently ? It would be good to add ref#1, which says two interesting things:
  • the match was indeed won by a single game
  • the match was won by the "odd game", probably meaning Staunton had received one game for odds and won the match thanks to that. If confirmed, this seems to be relevant information to be added to the article.
No, "by the odd game" normally means "by one game out of many" - e.g. IIRC Fine uses this of Alekhine-Euwe 1935.
It would make a long, confusing footnote - confusion was common in sources of the time. How about simply "which he won"? Philcha (talk) 19:15, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • In one sentence Murray says "Staunton was both owner and editor of this magazine from 1841-52", but latter he says "in 1854 he sold the Chess-Player's Chronicle". Is the correct year 1852 or 1854 ? Do we have another source to cross-check that ?
Not that I know. He may have continued as proprietor after standing down as editor in 1852, then sold up in 1854. So for me to offer an explanation would be particularly fanciful WP:OR. Philcha (talk) 19:15, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "He then became chess editor of the magazine..." : what is a "chess editor" ?
Writes some lead articles, commissions articles from other writers - like e.g. a "sports editor" now. Philcha (talk) 19:15, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Staunton's life: Matches against Saint-Amant

  • The first paragraph is not about matches against Saint-Amant, this is not consistent with the title of the section.
Could re-title, e.g. "1843 - Staunton's competitive peak". What do you think? Philcha (talk) 21:26, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • The article says there is a doubt whether one or two matches were played, but the ref#3 given only talks about one match ?
These are Spinrad's research notes, rather terse, I had to read it again twice!
Staunton-Cochrane: what happened? have various accounts eg
14-4 WCC, +12 =7 -12 P+1 TS, +3 -3 P+1 and -3 =2 +1 even
Looks like Winter's World Chess Champions treats it as 1 and Bachmann's Teplitz-Schonau tournament book (!) treats it as 3!
Might be best to write "Early in 1843 Staunton played one or more matches (sources differ on this[3]) against John Cochrane ..." We can't ignore these games (I wish!) as Murray gives them as his top reason for regarding Staunton as the bet UK player, and Chessmetric rates it Staunton's best performance. What do you think? Philcha (talk) 21:26, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • The reference in the first sentence should be placed after the parenthesis.
I don't think so. The contents of the parenthesis are a nested sentence, and the ref belongs at the end of that. I don't know what the the Chicago style guide says about this particular case, but WP:MOS says the Chicago style guide's recommendations are not mandatory.
  •  Done "a strong player and theoretician" : what is a theoretician ? Maybe write "chess theoretician" and put a link to Chess theory.
  •  Done Replace "Chessmetrics treats these games as 1 match..." by "The website Chessmetrics treats these games as one unique match..."
  • The statement that the English opening is named after Staunton's second match against Saint Amant is not supported by a reference.
That man Murray again. Philcha (talk) 21:26, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "He also took Worrall and Harry Wilson to Paris as his assistants" : I think it would be worth to give a bit of background, like "Worrall and Harry Wilson, two strong chess players at the time, ...". Also, please give Worrall's surname.
You mean Worrall's first name? The source ([1]) doesn't give it. Philcha (talk) 21:26, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "this is the first known case where seconds were used in a match" : as any "first thing" statement, it should be supported by a reference.
Same ref ([2]), at end of para as it aplies to last few sentences of para.
  • ?? Done?? "almost letting Saint-Amant catch up" : this is not supported by the score, which gives the impression that Staunton always had at least an advantage of 5 points. Is it possible to give the state of the score at the time when the difference was the lowest ?
I'll check the sources (match tables) on that. Von der Lasa wrote, "An attack, for instance, of this illness was, I presume, the real cause why, in the middle of the famous match with St. Amant, when in the beginning he had won nearly every game, his strength of a sudden gave way and the opponent got a temporary chance to retrieve his losses."
I've re-worded that sentence. Philcha (talk) 21:26, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • The last paragraph of this chapter is a bit confusing on several aspects:
  • What is this French chess supremacy ? I would suggest to place it at the beginning of the chapter, as background and introductory information to the importance of the matches against Saint-Amant.
That would be good if the paragraph was entirely about the Saint-Amant matches. But as I said about, it's more about the peak of Stauntion's playing career, as it includes the Cochrane match(es). If we treat the section as about the Saint-Amant matches, the Cochrane match(es) would have to go in the preceding section "First steps in chess", and I think would be bad: beating Cochrane was not the achievement of a beginner; and it would blur the impression that 1843 was the year in which Staunton hit the top.
The article is about Staunton, not about the French chess "dynasty", so I'm reluctant expand this point. I'd wiki-link "French chess supremacy" to World Chess Championship, except that we have some unresolved issues there. Philcha (talk) 21:26, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  •  Done Who said "London became the chess capital of the world" ? What is a "chess capital" ?
Removed it. Philcha (talk) 21:26, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I do not understand the last sentence, even with the reference. Who is "he" in the sentence "as he might truly call him" ? Probably it makes sense to give a bit of context. I understand it was only one person (Earl of Mexborough) who used the terms World Chess Champion for Staunton, do I ?
Winter was looking for uses of "world chess champion" or similar, and Mexborough's speech gave a Google-like match. Murray (part 1)] also wrote, "As a matter of fact, he was at the time regarded very much in this light" - I could add this ref too. Philcha (talk) 21:26, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Staunton's life: Chess writer and promoter

  •  Done I am not sure we need to specify "according to The Oxford Companion to Chess", as it is clear from the reference.
  •  Done The expression "over-the-board play" may not be clear for the casual reader, it should be developed, footnoted or wikilinked.
Searching Wikipedia for "over the board chess" got no hits, so wikilinking won't help. An explanation would double the length of and dominate the para. I've inserted a footnote. Philcha (talk) 22:22, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  •  Done The ref#14 should be placed at the end of the sentence.
It is now :-)
  •  Done "Although most of his articles focused on over-the-board play, a significant number featured correspondence chess and others followed with enthusiasm the progress of promising young players, including Paul Morphy" : the word "although" implies a contradiction, but there is none between the proposal "most of his articles focused on over-the-board play" and the proposal "others followed with enthusiasm the progress of promising young players". Maybe the sentence should be split in two, like "Although most of his articles focused on over-the-board play, a significant number featured correspondence chess. Some articles followed with enthusiasm the progress of promising young players, including Paul Morphy"
Split. Philcha (talk) 22:22, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I am not able to find in ref#2 a sentence where Winter says Staunton "followed with enthusiasm the progress of promising young players" in his column for the Illustrated London News.
C.N. 4765. "Unnamed prodigy" Philcha (talk) 22:22, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • the sentence "which did not go out of print until 1993" is confusing. Does that mean the book was a complete failure, so that it took until 1993 to sell all copies ? Or does it mean it was a huge success, so that it was only in 1993 that they stopped reprinting it ?
The latter. It's an English idiom that you apparently have not seen before. Don't worry, your English is 1M times better than my French. :-)
  • I do not understand the purpose of ref#15.
Proves he did write such a book. I'm sure google used to give the most recent print date (I didn't just make it up), looks like they've changed that page. :-(
  •  Done "(published 1843)" should be replaced by "(published in 1843)"
  •  Done In the sentence "Another book, The Chess-Player's Companion followed in 1849", I feel there is a comma missing somewhere.
Hell, your your English is sometimes better than my English. :-)
  • The precision "and is available online" is not that encyclopedic, so better let it in the footnotes.
The point is that it someone still finds it commercially viable to make it available. Philcha (talk) 22:22, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  •  Done About the match against Harrwitz, it should be explained (at least in a footnote) what "odds of Pawn and 2 moves" means.
I've added a general footnote about odds (unsourced!!), and referred to that for "rook odds" Philcha (talk) 22:22, 18 June 2008 (UTC)as well.[reply]
  • It is better to put numbers below 100 in full letters, so I would propose the new writing : "seven games in which Staunton gave Harrwitz odds of one pawn and two moves (4 wins, no draws, 3 losses), seven games in which he gave odds of one pawn and one move (1 win, no draws, 6 losses), and seven games without any special odd (7 wins, no draws, no losses)"
I honestly disagree about this, as "web users want to scan, not read". Numerals make their meaning plainer faster - especially if the user's first language is not English. And specially when the win / lose / draw summaries are numeric. Philcha (talk) 22:22, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • The date "July 23 1849" should be wikilinked.
There was a vigorous debate about this (? Village Pump) a month or 2 ago. The problem is that Wikipedia / Wikimedia lacks a separate date formatting facility. I don't know anything that would make that date interesting for reasons other than Staunton's marriage. Philcha (talk) 22:22, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "who had had 8 children" : replace "8" by "eight"
Numerals are easier to read, see above. Philcha (talk) 22:22, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • with the games at "Pawn + 1 move" odds, the article states "Staunton lost 6 and won 1", but ref#3 states "Staunton-Harrwitz: 7-0 even, 0-6-1 P+1, 4-3 P+2 (many sources)" which in my understanding means Staunton won none, drew one and lost 6. On the other hand, ref#1 states that Staunton "won 1 to 6 of those at Pawn and move", in line with the article. Which reference is correct ? Or am I misunderstanding somewhere ?
Almost certainly confusion in the sources again. Keeping accurate records did not matter until round-robin tournaments started (AFAIK London 1862). Philcha (talk) 22:22, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Staunton's life: London International Tournament, 1851

  • As this event has its own article, maybe there would be a case to reduce the length of this section ?
Hmmm. The easiest reduction would be in the list of missing players. I'd still want to mention the absence of Cochrane, Saint-Amant and von der Lasa because of their playing strength, but "and at least X other well-known masters" might cover the rest. Staunton's offer to pay Anderssen's expenses has to stay, both for the irony and to show Staunton's determination. I'm tempted to move the part about "world championship" to the end of the 1st para, where it fits well with Bledow's proposal. Apart from the absentee list I can't see right now any cuts that would not omit or weaken important points such as:
  • Staunton's motivation and ambitions for the event (he may also have assumed that he would win, but I'd want very WP:RS before including that).
  • His alertness to opportunities (the Exhibition eased the travel problems).
  • Its contribution to the developing concept of a world championship.
  • Inter-continental support - which was a huge achievement when travel, communications and financial services were so primitive (how did the cash get from India to Britain?)
  • Management skills (although I remember reading somewhere that Cochrane said he found it easier to work with Staunton from the other side of the world).
  • His taking on too much as both organizer and player (apparently a habit, see the part about the non-match with Morphy).
  • The bit about the London Club tournament reinforces the point that Staunton was a divisive character (I imagine he'd love the modern saying "Lead, follow or get out of the way"), as well as presenting an opportunity for irony ("Anderssen won"). Philcha (talk) 23:00, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • ref#21 should be placed after the parenthesis.
Help! I've added the footnotes you suggested above, so the numbers have changed. Can you remember which one you meant? Philcha (talk) 23:00, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • the sentence "To make up the numbers the committee "promoted" the strongest of the Provincial Tournament's entrants to play in the International Tournament" may not be clear for a casual reader. What does "make up the numbers" mean ? Was it to have an even number of players ?
A knock-out contest requires a power of 2, otherwise it needs a complicated and often controversial system of seeding and byes. I could add another explanatory footnote. What do you think? Philcha (talk) 23:00, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • despite my proposal to shorten this section, it would be good to explain briefly the format of the tournament, otherwise we may lose the reader when we talk about "2nd round" and "play-offs".
" knocked out is wikilinked. I'm concerned that saying much more could lead to yet another footnote on chess tournament formats - and I really don't want to try to explain Swiss tournaments. Philcha (talk) 23:00, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

To be continued, with comments on other chapters latter

Wow, you're working your socks off! What's the French for that? Thanks for giving it so much care and attention. Philcha (talk) 23:00, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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