Talk:Over There (Fringe)

GA Review

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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk) 20:44, 30 March 2011 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this article. I'll give it a read through now and add any queries or points below. If theres anything simple to fix I'll do it myself, but if I inadvertently change the meaning of something without realising it, then please feel free to revert it. Miyagawa (talk) 20:44, 30 March 2011 (UTC)

• Plot: "Walter (John Noble) and Olivia (Anna Torv) discover that Peter (Joshua Jackson) has agreed to go back with his real father, "Walternate" (Noble), back to his own dimension." - any chance of rewording to prevent the repeat of "back"?
• "Olivia goes to the typewriter communication station to await orders and is revealed to be Fauxlivia infiltrating our side." - I would say that it would be better worded to say that she was revealed to be Fauxlivia by going to the typewriter communication station.

• Production: "a little bit more playful... When [Anna] first showed up on set in this different guise, she had really embodied this other character in a very playful and sexy way. She turned a lot of heads". - MOS requires that the relevant citation needs to immediately follow the quote.
• "like such a doofus holding a gun," - same again.
• "faced a bit of hatred" - and again. I'll stop listing them as theres a couple more and just ask that you check the rest of the article for quotes and add direct citations. You just need to add them to the end of the sentence that the quote is in - in some places its a sentence or two later.

Other than that, I have no further issues. It's mainly just the referencing for the quotes. Good job. Miyagawa (talk) 21:29, 30 March 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for the review. I have edited the article per your suggestions. Please let me know if there is anything else the article might need. Thanks, Ruby2010 talk 21:49, 30 March 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for the quick review, happy to mark this one up as a GA now. Good job! Miyagawa (talk) 22:06, 30 March 2011 (UTC)

Copyedit May 2011

Hi

During the copyedit a few things came to light which may need attention:

Part one

*"Walternate is seen leaving with the" - leaving where?

• Changed to "Walternate is seen in the room housing the device Peter will be a part of and leaves with its final component."Chaosdruid (talk) 12:22, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

Part two

*"claiming that it can help heal the other world." - really? I thought he claimed it could heal both (I will download it again to watch it and check). Also when using terms to describe the opposite of where they are such as "the other world" it really needs to say where the are, or use "our reality/the Other side" etc.

• I'll rewatch the finale and verify the above. Thanks for noting them Ruby2010 comment! 02:53, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

• On a repeat viewing, Walternate leaves the room they are keeping the doomsday device, but I don't think this is important enough. I can try to rephrase the sentence and add it if you think it's necessary :) Ruby2010 comment! 03:53, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

• 09:00-09:05 "...applied to heal the problems of this world, of your world..." - so it was both, phew I got that right at least lol :¬) Chaosdruid (talk) 12:22, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

;Production

• "executive producers and showrunners" - showrunners is too ambiguous, as there is a title "runner" used in credits, as well as poor grammar.

• I removed showrunners entirely. Is that acceptable? Ruby2010 comment! 02:53, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

Yes, but I was trying more to think what could be substituted instead, it turns out I needed educating though, as per the page Showrunners lol...would you mind restoring the text and linking it to the showrunners article if you like, over here in the UK we don't really use that term (yet I suppose), so my apologies for that. Chaosdruid (talk) 03:30, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

• No worries! I restored it to just say showrunners (and not exec. producers) Ruby2010 comment! 03:53, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

;Writing and filming

• "For the finale Jeff Pinkner and J. H. Wyman brought back the" - This was in part one, not part two?

• Are you saying I should more specifically say part one, or is it alright unchanged? Ruby2010 comment! 02:53, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

Oh, I thought I had just removed the "For the finale" bit... yup, I did, my mistake sorry - it now reads:

Pinkner and Wyman brought back the "Cortexiphan kids", Chaosdruid (talk) 03:30, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

Chaosdruid (talk) 02:22, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

• Thank you very much for the copy edit. I hope it is now (or nearly) at FA's standards. Thanks again, Ruby2010 comment! 02:53, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

Sorry about those "corrections" that were not needed, my mistake entirely. It has been a long day lol so I am off for the night now, best wishes for the FA! Chaosdruid (talk) 03:30, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

• No problem at all! Thanks again for looking it over Ruby2010 comment! 03:53, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

• Sorry about the gap, I fell asleep on the couch watching them lol. I think that's pretty much fixed all of the issues I had with it, I just hope it succeeds FA now - as you can see I am a bit of a fan myself :¬) Chaosdruid (talk) 12:22, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

• Yeah, I hope it makes it to FA too. :) It's such an amazing show. Can't wait for the finale! Ruby2010 comment! 16:22, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

Regarding the "Production" chapter

• Didn't anyone notice the colour scheme of the title sequence? Reddish instead of blueish? Vandenzel (talk) 00:27, 6 July 2011 (UTC)

Yup, but these were not the first to use the red titles. I think the first was S03E03 (hence people referring to them as the red and blue universes since then). Take a look here I know it may be a public contribution, so not a ref, but it is fairly comprehensive about the red and blue parts. Chaosdruid (talk) 01:19, 6 July 2011 (UTC)

And this is S02E22-23. Seems to me more first than S03E03. Vandenzel (talk) 12:33, 6 July 2011 (UTC)