Talk:2013 Fonterra recall

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False Alarm[edit]

This article needs updating as it does not report that the bacterial contamination from this incident was notbotulism causing. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 131.203.9.147 (talk) 23:25, 11 May 2014 (UTC)

I've made the most essential updates. The new Aftermath section could be expanded with figures on the financial costs resulting from the crisis when and if these become available. I expect the government investigation will mention these.-gadfium 22:23, 12 May 2014 (UTC)

cleanup[edit]

I am not a fan of general tags, but the article needs general copy-editting. For example, products are used as a count noun in the first sentence of the lead, and product is used as a mass noun in the second sentence. Stylistic issues like word choice and agreement are problems in just about every other sentence of the article. μηδείς (talk) 20:08, 4 August 2013 (UTC)

Another example is "A problem was first noticed by Fonterra in March 2013 when tested revealed the possible presence of a Clostridium bacteria, many strands of which are harmless" which should probably be something like: "A problem was first noticed by Fonterra in March 2013 when tests revealed the possible presence of Clostridium, a bacterium many strands of which are harmless". μηδείς (talk) 20:16, 4 August 2013 (UTC)

  • FYI, "a Clostridium bacteria" is ungrammatical, bacteria is plural. Either the a should be removed or bacterium be made singular. μηδείς (talk) 20:48, 4 August 2013 (UTC)
  • "Product" is used eight times, "Products" nine. It should be one or the other in almost all cases. μηδείς (talk) 20:51, 4 August 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for pointing out some of my errors. I have fixed these and others - let me know if any concerns remain. --ThaddeusB (talk) 21:15, 4 August 2013 (UTC)

Australia - claim totally wrong[edit]

I've just corrected the claim here and on the main page that Australia was affected by the Chinese ban - the NZ Minister appears to have been misquoted in this Reuters story and the NY Times story - see the Australian news story here which includes a longer and less garbled version of the quote from the NZ minister. The import of NZ milk powder products which had been processed in Australia was banned, but Australian milk powder isn't affected. There's nothing in the Australian or NZ media about a ban on Australian exports. Nick-D (talk) 10:25, 16 August 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for the correction. --ThaddeusB-public (talk) 16:38, 16 August 2013 (UTC)