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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:2016 Berlin ePrix/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 17:50, 29 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]


Opening for discussion. Courcelles (talk) 17:50, 29 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  • " He held the lead through the mandatory pit stops in which drivers switched into a second car to win the race. " This sentence needs more punctuation.
  • "with the pit lane on Karl-Marx-Allee and goes around Strausberger Platz and Alexanderplatz." The pit lane gpoes around these squares? Or the course does? Either way, clarity is needed.
  • "was sixth points behind in the battle for the position". Six, I think?
  • "The deal was confirmed in the week before the race and was originally slated to be World Endurance Championship driver Adam Carroll but the agreement fell apart." Source?
  • If Qualifying was on Saturday and practice eon Sunday, why do we talk about practice first?
  • "di Grassi was in a tight bunch of cars consisting of Vergne and Prost in fifth." They all can't be in fifth, who was in that position?
  • "the pressure caused Vergne to clout the bollards at the chicane." This sentence literally has no meaning to me. Possible to rewrite in ordinary language?
  • You're missing a word in "Buemi revealed that allowed Vergne to pass him and attacked him when the latter had used up more electrical energy. "