Talk:Al-Mahdi Abdallah

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This article needs massive improvement[edit]

I found this on the list of articles needing copy-reading, and I figured that was something I could help out with. I was so, so wrong-- I simply don't know enough about this topic to be able to decipher and accurately re-tell this information. This sentence sticks out: "When Abdullah entered the palace and saw his son hussiens about to kill the imam who killed his son and his father yelled have mercy on your imam Hussien he said to his father but he killed my brother his father took his jambia off and cut of his beard a sign of begging in the very north tribal parts of Yemen his son dropped the sword and the imam said ask for anything Hussien said I Want Ibb a governorate of Yemen today He also asked for Hajjah And Dhale Where a lot of the tribes coming from the both settled a lot of Bakil settled in ibb and stayed. Hussien And his Son Adulwahab And his brothers sons ruled over these governorate a until the late 1800s when they were expelled by the ottomans." I recommend that someone who knows more about this topic than I do, and who can bring in some sources, eliminate the introduction and re-write it more cohesively. The rest of the article suffers from a lack of overall flow/smooth readability, but can be dealt with otherwise. --BLu (talk) 19:41, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Upon further research, I've found that the article used the first sentence as the introduction, and then an IP added all of the other information. It doesn't appear to be malicious, just that this individual didn't quite know where to put this information or how to format it. Perhaps it would be best to revert the introduction back to the original single sentence version, and seeing if the other information can be salvaged and used elsewhere? --BLu (talk) 19:49, 19 October 2016 (UTC)