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A fact from CMS Enhancements appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 27 December 2022 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that hard drive reseller CMS Enhancements nearly went bankrupt while attempting to enter the personal computer systems market amid a price war?

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The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 20:11, 21 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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... that hard drive reseller CMS Enhancements twice tried producing complete personal computers? Source: "CMS Enhancements Struggles to Recover From Series of Costly Blunders" ; "CMS shuts division, focuses on high-end VARs" (subscription required)
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Nihon Sho Gakko fire

Moved to mainspace by DigitalIceAge (talk). Self-nominated at 02:28, 1 December 2022 (UTC).[reply]

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
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QPQ: Done.

Overall: @DigitalIceAge: Good article. However, the hook doesn't seem all that interesting and the hook's grammar doesn't seem correct. Could you provide a different hook? Onegreatjoke (talk) 14:37, 2 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Onegreatjoke: Thanks for the review! How about ALT1: ... that hard drive reseller CMS Enhancements nearly went bankrupt attempting to enter the personal computer systems market amid a price war?

DigitalIceAge (talk) 23:26, 3 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]

That hook is better.

Approving alt1. Onegreatjoke (talk) 23:30, 3 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]