Talk:Free Family Portrait Studio

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June 17, 2012Good article nomineeListed
November 7, 2012Good topic candidatePromoted
Current status: Good article

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 14:08, 12 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I know I created the stub of the article a long ways ago, but I should be good to review this, as I had no hand in the major additions to it. Will review in the next couple of days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 14:08, 12 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • Lede: Add last names to all the characters in the intro line
  • Lede: "The episode was written and directed by B. J. Novak, which parallels with the season premiere, "The List", which he also wrote and directed." Kinda clunky, the info on the parallel isn't really needed, as its more of a coincidence than anything
  • Lede: Maybe add what was critiqued by critics
  • Lede: Link NBC
  • Plot: "with her worthless teenaged son" That's majorly POV, just say "teenaged son"
  • Plot: "and Pam Halpert (Jenna Fischer) with a reluctant Jim (John Krasinski), Cecelia and Philip" -> "and Pam Halpert (Jenna Fischer) with a reluctant Jim (John Krasinski) and their children, Cecelia and Philip"
  • Plot: "While Jim had suspected that Dwight's motive for giving away family portraits was to get revenge on Jim for a prank involving a fake Velcro suit, Dwight's real motive was to try and get some of Philip Lipton's DNA to run a test to determine Philip's paternity, which Dwight claims." -> "Jim suspects that Dwight's motive for giving away family portraits was to get revenge on Jim for a prank involving a fake Velcro suit, However, Dwight's real motive is to try and get some of Philip Lipton's DNA to run a test to determine who is Philip's actual father."
  • Plot: "doesn't", "can't", "didn't"... watch contractions
  • Plot: "After doing so Dwight goes into the bathroom to retrieve the diaper, and knowing he would do so, Angela is right on his tail as he makes a break for the hospital to run the DNA test." -> "After doing so Dwight goes into the bathroom to retrieve the diaper. However, Angela follows him as he makes a break for the hospital to run the DNA test."
  • Plot: "Andy then announces the plan and upon hearing this everyone assumes that Andy is hallucinating talking with David because none of them have seen Andy talking with David." -> "Andy then announces the plan and upon hearing this everyone assumes that Andy is hallucinating because none of them have seen Andy talking with David."
  • Plot: Why does "Communist Style Kiss" link to Cheek kissing?
  • Production: Add a cite for who wrote and directed the episode
  • Production: Add a cite for Jerry Minor's appearance
  • Reviews: "from critics.Myles McNutt" Space needed
  • Reviews: "connection to human behavior" -> "connection to real human emotions"
  • Reviews: Merge the last baby paragraph-sentence thing to the main one
  • References: Use consistent dating methods
  • References: Ref. 12 needs to be formatted properly (no bare Urls!)

On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 00:11, 14 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

A good chunk of these have been taken care of...--Gen. Quon (talk) 02:10, 16 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Alright, all the issues have been taken care of. I will pass this! Good job.--Gen. Quon (talk) 17:00, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Oh, I'm truly sorry; I had to leave my computer for awhile due to vacation, so I apologize that I wasn't able to do the edits NoD'ohnuts (talk) 17:17, 17 June 2012 (UTC)NoD'ohnuts[reply]

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