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"If the player collides into a wall or another call whilst driving," -do you mean car?
Oops, I really should've re-read this JAGUAR 14:52, 1 February 2016 (UTC)
"At any time, the player can get out of the car and enter any building that has a name tag on it, however enemies will only appear during certain times of the day. " -are you sure it's "any time", I remember playing this game and getting frustrated with the lack of ability to actually get out of the car. Even at the venues I couldn't figure out how to get out of the car and enter them. Perhaps word it as "At a labelled building, the player can get out of the car and enter, though enemies will only appear during certain times of the day." You might eleaborate here on what is in the venues if you can see a bit of the game, generally limited to pool table or two and chairs I believe and just a couple of rooms.
Rephrased and added. I didn't know that you couldn't get out of the car at any time, as I've only read the reviews and watched a review on YouTube. I can gather that it's pretty frustrating, which makes the game funny! JAGUAR 14:52, 1 February 2016 (UTC)
"on their films" -not sure how major Hollywood films like Platoon and Jurassic Park could be called "their films" unless they were involved in producing them.
I see how that sounds. Changed "their" to "the" JAGUAR 15:17, 1 February 2016 (UTC)
"however he criticised the "terrible" attribute issues in the 'Frankie goes to Florida' mode. " -a bit odd, unclear what the issues are and what "Frankie goes to Florida mode means" I think you should probably begin with saying that the game was strongly criticised for its poor controls and playability and then quote various critics. Something about the car being difficult to maneouvre and the tendency for them to explode with even the slightest impact with a wall or car I think, that's what most critics would probably have picked up on. One of the major problems I think was that there wasn't any instruction of what club you should be at and no time to actually get there. Can you find anything on that?
The Your Sinclair review only offers a sentence of criticism, and I don't even know what the 'Frankie goes to Florida' mode is! I actually forgot to write an opening sentence here, so I've added one. I couldn't find anything on criticism of a timetable in any review, but I managed to add a tad more on the Computer Gamer review. JAGUAR 15:17, 1 February 2016 (UTC)
"hris Bourne of Crash criticised the mechanics and graphics of the game, especially that of the car. Bourne stated that driving the car is "ludicrous" and takes "at least half an hour to get used to", whilst summarising that the game was overall "very bad"." -ludicrous for the reasons I stated above I gather? You then return to the poor handling at "Jim Lloyd of Computer and Video Games praised the music, however he condemned the handling of the car as "very difficult" and theorised that the game would sell due to "its name". A reviewer of Zzap!64 also criticised the difficulty of handling the car, stating that it was "frustrating" and made the game "dull, boring and unplayable". Something to explain the overall problem and then quote various critics I think would be a more informative way to deal with this. Itr would be better to structure it by each issue I think. Also I'm surprised there is nothing more mentioning the music, I think the music was largely the reason why anybody played it and widely praised I think.
I've done some rearranging and mentioned a little about the music, although surprisingly I couldn't find any particular praise with it, even though it's very good. I put the criticisms of the car handling first, and everything else after that. JAGUAR 15:39, 1 February 2016 (UTC)
Overall this is a decent effort, just a restructure of reception really and some elaboration in places needed I think and it'll be a pass.♦ Dr. Blofeld 14:36, 1 February 2016 (UTC)
@Dr. Blofeld: thanks for the review! I've attempted to address everything. Please let me know if there's anything else I can do. JAGUAR 15:39, 1 February 2016 (UTC)
Still not quite sure what you mean by "the "terrible" attribute issues in the 'Frankie goes to Florida' mode".
Ah got it, I think he was referring to Attribute clash, which is the cause of graphical errors on consoles like the ZX Spectrum and Commodore 64. I've elaborated this, as in he says in the review "The whole picture goes to pieces simply by walking next to a vase of flowers". JAGUAR 17:30, 1 February 2016 (UTC)
Still not sure what 'Frankie goes to Florida' mode". is but I'll pass it, good job!