Talk:Organ transplantation in China/GA3

GA Review

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Reviewer: LT910001 (talk · contribs) 09:30, 21 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

If there are no objections, I'll take this review. I'll note at the outset I've had no role in editing or creating this article. I welcome other editors at any stage to contribute to this review. I will spend a day familiarising myself with the article and then provide an assessment. Kind regards, LT910001 (talk) 09:30, 21 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, LT910001. Please read my concerns from the time of the previous GAN, my reassessment, community reassessment and my current comment. Thank you. Axl ¤ [Talk] 10:56, 21 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Axl. Having a look at previous nominations, reassessments and the talk page is often my second port of call when conducting a GA review. --LT910001 (talk) 03:20, 22 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for waiting. In conducting this review, I will:

Provide an assessment using WP:GARC
If this article does not meet the criteria, explain what areas need improvement.
Provide possible solutions that may (or may not) be used to fix these.

Assessment

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	See below
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	See below
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	See below
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.

Commentary

Thanks to the editors for working on this article. With the festive season upon us in many countries, I am more than happy to wait several days for a response. As it is, I believe this article needs improvement to meet the GARC. However I feel this improvement would be possible in a limited timespan so will not close the review. Some concerns: --LT910001 (talk) 22:36, 22 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

This article is not suitably broad. As an article about "organ transplantation in China", here are some questions which arose during my review. These aren't intended to be comprehensive or prescriptive, but are intended to illustrate that this article is not suitably broad.
- How many organ transplants have occurred in the last 5 years? How many of these were voluntary / not voluntary? What tissue types are used? How does a person voluntarily donate their organs? How does a person get on a waiting list? Is there a cost involved? Does organ donation differ between the military and civilian systems?
- Without this information, and a portrayal of the Chinese transplantation system in general, I am concerned that the article focuses almost entirely on concerns regarding involuntary transplantation.
I feel, although this is not a requirement of the review, that this article would benefit from a clearer restructure, perhaps in something like "International concerns / US / China / Canada" to separate out the relevant portions. As it is it's quite hard to follow other than as a timeline. This impacts on readability. I feel with the inclusion of some extra information for context this readability issue will not be as apparent.

Please feel free to take your time responding during this season, I wish you and you family well. Kind regards, --LT910001 (talk) 22:36, 22 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the prompt review. Your main issue is the coverage, I feel the coverage is broad enough for GA criteria. The main notability of organ transplantation in China has been covered, with appropriate weight given to the depth of coverage in reliable sources of various aspects; the main one, of course, being international concerns; some of that - the main aspects indeed - being covered in Kilgour-Matas report. I understand that it can be tricky to draw the line between the comprehensiveness demanded in a FA review and the broad coverage of a GA review - much comes down to the judgement of the reviewer. Judgement is often assisted by seeing what is covered in scholarly documents, books, news reports, etc - spending a little bit of time doing a Google of the topic to get a feel for the coverage. If you have done that independent background reading of the sources on the topic and feel the article is biased and undue, and that the coverage is not broad enough, then of course you should fail it; that is your judgement as the reviewer. No probs, and no hard feelings. SilkTork ^{✔Tea time} 00:31, 23 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

This article does not meet the 'broadness' criteria required for GA promotion, and so I have failed per your comments above. I would strongly advise making some changes to the article so that this issue, as documented in the past reviews and reassessment, is addressed, before the article is renominated. I wish you well on your wiki-travels, --LT910001 (talk) 01:12, 27 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]