Talk:Religion in the pre-colonial Philippines

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Multiple issues[edit]

This page still needs a good going over to make sure all the content is reliable. There needs to be copy editing as well to fix grammar and readability. Finally, quite a few of the citations have strangely formatted external links, which needs to be fixed. GypsyJiver (drop me a line) 14:10, 8 December 2010 (UTC)

I'm copying my comments over from the talk page of Buddhism in the Philippines:

Inline citations[edit]

I've added a few inline tags to the first two paragraphs of the "Pre-Colonial History" section, indicating how the article needs to be cited. This isn't intended as anything bad, it is just that there needs to be a lot better citing of sources to fulfil Wikipedia:Verification. Feel free to take some of the tags down on the less controversial sentences if you don't want them there. GypsyJiver (drop me a line) 07:09, 3 December 2010 (UTC). MOVED GypsyJiver (drop me a line) 14:10, 8 December 2010 (UTC)

Rajah-states[edit]

What is meant exactly by the phrase "Rajah-states"? It comes up in the "Pre-Colonial History" section a lot. Maybe this means Thalassocracy, or maybe it refers specifically to kingdoms, sultanates, or rajahnates mentioned in History of the Philippines? Clarity would be good here, I think. GypsyJiver (drop me a line) 07:13, 3 December 2010 (UTC). MOVED GypsyJiver (drop me a line) 14:10, 8 December 2010 (UTC)

Grammar[edit]

I've done some grammar fixing. This article contained a lot of incorrect past participle uses. I have changed most of them to simple past tense. Some phrases like has been and has arrived have been changed to was and arrived. For example, I changed this:

Vajrayana Buddhism has been also known as Tantric Buddhism and Mantrayana, the esoteric teaching, which has been conveyed only by a master to a disciple through initiation or empowerment.

To this:

Vajrayana Buddhism was also known as Tantric Buddhism and Mantrayana, the esoteric teaching, which was conveyed only by a master to a disciple through initiation or empowerment.

There is still a lot of work to do on the content, but at least the grammar is mostly fixed for now. GypsyJiver (drop me a line) 05:51, 10 December 2010 (UTC)